Student Feedback Form- Compare & Contrast Essay Name: Essay Title: Old telephones vs. modern smartphones General Essay Evaluation Thesis Statement ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · The last part of the thesis is unclear Essay & Body Paragraph Structure ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Body paragraph 1: Storage Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good Body paragraph 2: Apps Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good Body paragraph 3: Plans Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good Body paragraph 4: Internet Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good Body paragraph 5: Uses Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Missing the controlling idea Body paragraph 6: Communication Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good Body paragraph 7: Mobile line Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Missing the controlling idea Conclusion ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · You did not mention ALL the points of comparison in the conclusion APA Formatting ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · Missing the correct header · Missing the title on the front page Language Use ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · See highlights in yellow for grammar corrections to make Mechanics ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · See highlights in yellow for corrections Use of Sources Evaluation: Reliability/Citation Did the student use 3 sources? ☐ Needs improvement ☒ Good Are there at least 3 in-text citations, one from each source? ☐ Needs improvement ☒ Good Is the References page formatted correctly? ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · Use hanging indent Are all sources reliable, relevant and appropriate? ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · Berenguer et. Al (2017) is NOT relevant- it talks about seniors using cell phones- You should choose sources that are directly related to your topic. This source IS NOT directly related to it. · Are all sources correctly paraphrased or directly quoted (no plagiarism)? ☒ Needs improvement ☒ Good Comments: · The information cited for Berenguer et al. (2017) is common knowledge and does not need to be cited because everyone knows it. Please find a better source and another citation that is necessary, NOT common knowledge. Are in-text citations in the correct format? ☒ Needs improvement ☐ Good Comments: · There are several sources cited that have multiple authors but you only cited ONE author- please check PURDUE OWL for the correct way to cite multiple authors Draft A Grade Estimate: See the highlighted box for the estimated grade range for each of the areas in your essay. The estimate will help you know which areas you need to improve before the final grade. Grading Criteria VERY GOOD - EXCELLENT AVERAGE -GOOD POOR - FAIR VERY POOR Content/Development (out of 30%): 27-30% 22-26% 17-21% 13-16% Organization/Essay Structure (out of 30%): 27-30% 22-26% 17-21% 13-16% Grammar/Language Use (out of 15%): 13-15% 10-12% 7-9% 0-6% Formatting (out of 15%): 13-15% 10-12% 7-9% 0-6% Mechanics (out of 10%): 8-10% 5-7% 2-4% 0-2% Overall Grade .