This document analyzes and reviews the discussion section of a student thesis. It identifies some errors in unity and coherence, use of transition signals, capitalization, and punctuation. Specifically, it finds issues with coherence between paragraphs, appropriate transition word choice, capitalizing words in titles, omitting capitalization after numbers in lists, and incorrect use of commas. The review concludes that identifying these errors can help improve writing and provide learning to do better on future theses.