Our peers provided feedback on our opening film sequence. [1] They thought the camera work and angles were well done but found some of the dialogue was unclear and the plot was difficult to follow. [2] It was suggested that we re-record audio to improve clarity and edit the sequence to make the plot more understandable. [3] Additional feedback included making the pace faster in parts to increase tension, adding music or sounds, and ending with more of a cliffhanger to draw the audience in.

1. Overall feedback from our peers
Our peers thought that our opening sequence was filmed well and that we have included a number
of various camera angles. After reviewing over the sequence together as a group we have noticed
that yes, some images are quite fuzzy (but this is actually an effect which we intend to keep and just
weaken so that it doesn’t ruin the image). As noticed by all peers, we have not put sound in yet
which we are currently working on and this will help to create the tense atmosphere that we want
our audience to feel. Our peers also commented on how some of the dialogue was unclear so we are
maybe going to record sound over the top of it, so that it understandable and will help the audience
to understand what it going on, as commented, the plot is perhaps a little complicated, but by re-
editing/cutting and moving scenes about, we will be able to make the plot more understandable for
the audience.
OUR FEEDBACK
 Your film was really slick and moved well, you took camera angles into consideration and
made sure you stuck to the 180 degree rule; however the plot was almost too hard to
understand, the end of the opening looks like it has been cut off straight away. Part of the
dialogue was quiet and Icouldn’t hear what was said, if you were to re film id recommend
you added sound over the top or spoke louder during filming to make sure all the dialogue is
heard.
 It is well filmed, but could do with being a little faster pace at times in order to make it
tense for the audience. The last bit of speech is also unclear at the end and it might be
useful if there was music or some sort of sound added throughout
 Shots of him writing and looking through diary are fuzzy and to dark, consider using a
different font for your text maybe film your text and also the title can be associated with
the plat, so consider how your font could link to your story, sound is of on door, only one
bang, locations are very confusing. I like the use of the clock, and how creepy the girl is,
maybe overlay with some more sound, to set the scene, try with a higher state of tension,
good range of camera angles. Try making faster cuts as it is key in a thriller for a fast paced
as this builds up the tension in the viewer. It’s not drawing me in and it ends very suddenly
and there is no cliff hanger and we need more ideas of the plot as it is very subtle. Good
continuity and i love the plot of the story and it does look interesting.