The document identifies informal language in a paragraph describing California's weather and natural environment. It then provides a revised version replacing the informal terms with more formal academic language. The original paragraph uses colloquial terms like "best", "it's got", and "really hard" while the revised version substitutes alternatives like "perfect", "together with", and "almost uninhabitable" to make the writing style more appropriate for academic settings.

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The paragraph below contains many words that are considered
informal. Identify them and determine why they are not academic. After
you have finished, replace them with a more formal alternative.
California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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California is the best. It has a big variety of weather and it’s got lots of
beautiful nature. People that go to California can find any weather they like.
You can find cool weather in the summer and you’ve got warm weather in
the winter. We can find places that are really, really hard for people to live in
during the summer because they’re so hot. People can find a big forest, a
dead desert and a nice coast. California is the best place to visit because of its
weather and nature.

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MODEL ANSWER
California is, for many, a perfect holiday location. It has a varied
climate, together with a beautiful natural environment . People who
visit California are likely to encounter optimal conditions, with
the possibility of cool temperatures in summer and warmer conditions
in winter - although extreme climate anomalies have
rendered some areas almost uninhabitable. Extensive
forests, a lifeless desert and a spectacular coast are also
possibilities to be explored. Therefore, for its natural resources
and climate alone, California should be regarded as a prime
tourist destination.

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