10 Tips of Email Writing
Acknowledgements
This presentation was created by Lauren Miller in conjunction with New Organizing
Institute.

These new media materials have been developed over the course of many trainings
by Lola Elfman, Lauren Miller, Matt Compton, Ben Simon, Larry Huynh, Nate Thames,
Becky Bond, Michael Silberman, Mia Cambronero, Adam Green, Jason Rosenbaum,
Colin Holtz and many others.



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What can email do for you?

 " Reach people quickly & cheaply

 " Activate people to take action

 " Enhance what you’re doing
   everywhere else
A few key principles

" It’s about everything else you’re
  doing

" It’s about story telling

" It’s about number crunching
So how to I write an email?
Basic structure of an email




              "  1st sentence:
                 Attention grabber
                "  Try to keep it to one
                   sentence. One line if
                   possible.
Basic structure of an email




             "  2nd paragraph:
                Summary. Why are you
                sending this email?
               "  Avoid too many facts,
                  figures. That’s what the
                  rest of the email is for.
Basic structure of an email



            "  3rd-4th paragraph: Take
               Action.
              "  What do you want
                 people to do?

              "  What is the theory of
                 change?
Basic structure of an email
             "  Links

                "  Stand-alone (separate from
                   paragraphs)

                "  Should you hyperlink text or
                   write out urls? It depends

                "  Don’t just use picture links
Basic structure of an email




             "  After the link
                "  2-4 more paragraphs with
                   background info, quotes,
                   bullets, etc.
                "  Repeat your theory of
                   change, action, link
10 tips for better emails
1. Keep it short.
 "  People don’t want to read a long essay.
2. Think about your subject line.

                   "   Be concise
                       (5-7 words)

                   "   Grab attention,
                       but don’t cry wolf

                   "   Be creative

                   "   Don’t be too
                       wonky
Good Subject Lines
             "   Can I dial you in?
                 (DCCC)

             "   For your eyes only (YES
                 to Fairer Votes)

             "   I agree with George W.
                 Bush (Howard Dean)

             "   Missing you (Kiva.org)

             "   We’re 54.7% sure…
                 (Families USA)

             "   Spill baby spill (Brave
                 New Films)
Bad Subject Lines
              "   The ____ Update

              "   June 2011 Newsletter

              "   Tell your Senators to
                  vote no on S. 2191

              "   Urgent FEC Deadline

              "   Maryland GOP Calls
                  for End to New Poll
                  Tex for Absentee
                  Ballot Voters
3. Keep it conversational.

                  "  Snarky is ok.
                     A formal letter isn’t.

                  "  Have voices,
                     personalities in
                     your email.
4. Never send an email without
          an action…
           All you can do is unsubscribe.

 "     Sign a petition         "  Call Congress
 "     Write a letter          "  Make a donation
 "     Tell a friend           "  Share your story
 "     Watch a video           "  Give us your
 "     Follow us on Facebook      feedback
       or Twitter              "  Attend an event
4b …But don’t ask people to do
a million things.
                   "  Multiple actions
                      confuse/
                      overwhelm

                   "  Splits the returns of
                      your actions

                   "  Better solution:
                      Segmentation &
                      Daisy Chain
5. Ask people what they want.
 "   Surveys are good for you and your list.

                                   "  Find out more
                                      about your list

                                   "  Solicit new
                                      ideas

                                   "  Make your
                                      members feel
                                      like they’re
                                      part of the
                                      team
6. Treat new supporters differently.
           Make a good first impression.
 "   Send an intro message describing your org & what
     you’ll be asking them to do.
 "   Don’t ask for money – but don’t wait too long.
7. Keep formatting simple.
       Use images sparingly.

                   "   Compelling buttons
                       can help action rates

                   "   Most don’t matter

                   "   Don’t hold up an email
                       for an image

                   "   Don’t make your
                       whole email an image
7. Keep formatting simple.
      Avoid fancy formatting.


                         "   You are not
                             writing direct mail

                         "   Fancy formatting
                             distracts from links
8. Timing is everything.



                "  Sometimes it’s better to be
                   the 1st than to be the best.
                  "   General wisdom:
                      Tuesday-Thursday late
                      morning

                  "   In reality: Whenever
                      something urgent
                      happens
9. Checklist your emails.
                One bad mistake can ruin
                your email.

                "   Ask someone who
                    didn’t write it to
                    proofread it

                "   Ask someone to click
                    every link & take every
                    action
10. Test & Segment Your emails
Tests:                   Segments:
"   Sender name/format   "  Geography
"   Subject lines        "  Donation history
"   Time of day          "  Past actions taken
"   Images (including    "  Signup date
    headers)
                         "  Whatever you’ve
"   Length
                            got
"   Links
"   Landing pages
Landing Pages
Landing Pages: Keep it simple.


                   "   Make sure it’s clear
                       what you want
                       people to do

                   "   Limit the number of:
                      "   Distractions
                      "   Fields
                      "   Clicks
Landing Pages: Daisy Chain
                   "   You don’t have to
                       just send people to
                       a “thank you” page

                   "   Prioritize based on
                       what you need
                       most:
                       "       Tell a friend
                       "       Donate
                       "       Events
                       "       Other actions
Why plan emails?
" To avoid the blinking cursor paralysis.

" To make them part of a larger campaign.

" To have more time to write better emails.

" To have get better content.

" To get something done!
1. What are your goals?
1. What are your goals?
Online goals:               Offline goals:
" List growth?              " Pass a bill?

" Fundraising?              " Save the….
                              (puppies, seals, unicorns)?
" User generated content?
                            " Events?
" Twitter/facebook
  followers                 " Volunteers?

                            " Press attention?

                            " Drive a news story?
2. What are your resources?
2. What are your resources?
  "   Email list?
  "   Volunteers on the ground?
  "   Friendly bloggers? An organizational blog?
  "   A technology platform?
  "   Allied organizations/partners?
  "   Online advertising budget?
  "   Video capabilities?
  "   Other technology abilities?
3. What are your key moments?
3. What are your key moments:
 online and offline milestones?
     " Internal news
     " External news
     " Media
     " Personal stories
     " Holidays/Days of Importance
     " Other solicitations
Is this a long or short campaign?


" Are there deadlines
  you must meet?

" Moments along the
  way that you can
  highlight?
4. What are your segments?
Do you need different emails
    for different people?
    "   Action takers/non-action takers
    "   Geography
    "   Interest
    "   How they joined the list
    "   Donation history
    "   Demographics
    "   Superactivists vs. Lurkers
4. What can people do to really
            help?




  What is your theory of change?
Get a grid.
Plug in your offline activities/
   milestones as the base.
" Petition: When will you be delivering it?

" Events: Should we invite them? Ask them to donate
  or share? What can people do if they can’t attend?

" Videos/ads/offline materials: Can the list contribute
  content? Money? Share?

" Reports/research: Can they comment? Debunk it?
  Share?
Fill in the rest.

" Kicker messages

" Follow-up results messages

" Donation messages

" Other creative things you can give
  people to do
How much email is too much
         email?
    " How often do you have something
      urgent and meaningful to say?

     Quarterly   Monthly                Weekly      Daily




                     TYPICAL
  Almost                                          Probably
 certainly                                       too much
 too little


                    Credit: Idealware
Sample Campaign:
Debbie Shank has paid enough
Debbie Shank has paid enough
" Goal: To stop a lawsuit.

" Resources: 100,000 person email list. Petition &
  Speakout technology. Contact with the family.
" Timing: Debbie’s well-being was in jeopardy

" Segments: People who signed/didn’t sign
  petition; frequent letter-writers; Facebook
  followers

" Theory of change: By shaming Wal-Mart, they’d
  drop the lawsuit.
What did we do?

"   Launched a
    petition
    (email and
    Facebook)

"   Wrote letters to
    Wal-Mart’s top
    management

"   Wrote to news
    outlets to
    cover the story
It worked.
It worked.




Never let the grid stop you from taking
    advantage of key moments.
Thank You To:
       Lauren Miller
lauren@bluestatedigital.com
        @laurenm




           www.neworganizing.com
                 @neworganizing

10 Tips for Email Writing

  • 1.
    10 Tips ofEmail Writing
  • 2.
    Acknowledgements This presentation wascreated by Lauren Miller in conjunction with New Organizing Institute. These new media materials have been developed over the course of many trainings by Lola Elfman, Lauren Miller, Matt Compton, Ben Simon, Larry Huynh, Nate Thames, Becky Bond, Michael Silberman, Mia Cambronero, Adam Green, Jason Rosenbaum, Colin Holtz and many others. Restrictions of Use The following work is provided to you pursuant to the following terms and conditions. Your use of these materials constitutes your acceptance of these terms: •  You may reproduce and distribute the work to others for free, but you may not sell the work to others. •  You may modify the work, provided that the attribution to the New Organizing Institute and the Author remain on the work. •  You shall include a copy of these restrictions with all copies of the work that you distribute and you shall inform everyone who uses the materials of this agreement.
  • 3.
    What can emaildo for you? " Reach people quickly & cheaply " Activate people to take action " Enhance what you’re doing everywhere else
  • 4.
    A few keyprinciples " It’s about everything else you’re doing " It’s about story telling " It’s about number crunching
  • 5.
    So how toI write an email?
  • 6.
    Basic structure ofan email "  1st sentence: Attention grabber "  Try to keep it to one sentence. One line if possible.
  • 7.
    Basic structure ofan email "  2nd paragraph: Summary. Why are you sending this email? "  Avoid too many facts, figures. That’s what the rest of the email is for.
  • 8.
    Basic structure ofan email "  3rd-4th paragraph: Take Action. "  What do you want people to do? "  What is the theory of change?
  • 9.
    Basic structure ofan email "  Links "  Stand-alone (separate from paragraphs) "  Should you hyperlink text or write out urls? It depends "  Don’t just use picture links
  • 10.
    Basic structure ofan email "  After the link "  2-4 more paragraphs with background info, quotes, bullets, etc. "  Repeat your theory of change, action, link
  • 11.
    10 tips forbetter emails
  • 12.
    1. Keep itshort. "  People don’t want to read a long essay.
  • 13.
    2. Think aboutyour subject line. "   Be concise (5-7 words) "   Grab attention, but don’t cry wolf "   Be creative "   Don’t be too wonky
  • 14.
    Good Subject Lines "   Can I dial you in? (DCCC) "   For your eyes only (YES to Fairer Votes) "   I agree with George W. Bush (Howard Dean) "   Missing you (Kiva.org) "   We’re 54.7% sure… (Families USA) "   Spill baby spill (Brave New Films)
  • 15.
    Bad Subject Lines "   The ____ Update "   June 2011 Newsletter "   Tell your Senators to vote no on S. 2191 "   Urgent FEC Deadline "   Maryland GOP Calls for End to New Poll Tex for Absentee Ballot Voters
  • 16.
    3. Keep itconversational. "  Snarky is ok. A formal letter isn’t. "  Have voices, personalities in your email.
  • 17.
    4. Never sendan email without an action… All you can do is unsubscribe. "   Sign a petition "  Call Congress "   Write a letter "  Make a donation "   Tell a friend "  Share your story "   Watch a video "  Give us your "   Follow us on Facebook feedback or Twitter "  Attend an event
  • 18.
    4b …But don’task people to do a million things. "  Multiple actions confuse/ overwhelm "  Splits the returns of your actions "  Better solution: Segmentation & Daisy Chain
  • 19.
    5. Ask peoplewhat they want. "   Surveys are good for you and your list. "  Find out more about your list "  Solicit new ideas "  Make your members feel like they’re part of the team
  • 20.
    6. Treat newsupporters differently. Make a good first impression. "   Send an intro message describing your org & what you’ll be asking them to do. "   Don’t ask for money – but don’t wait too long.
  • 21.
    7. Keep formattingsimple. Use images sparingly. "   Compelling buttons can help action rates "   Most don’t matter "   Don’t hold up an email for an image "   Don’t make your whole email an image
  • 22.
    7. Keep formattingsimple. Avoid fancy formatting. "   You are not writing direct mail "   Fancy formatting distracts from links
  • 23.
    8. Timing iseverything. "  Sometimes it’s better to be the 1st than to be the best. "   General wisdom: Tuesday-Thursday late morning "   In reality: Whenever something urgent happens
  • 24.
    9. Checklist youremails. One bad mistake can ruin your email. "   Ask someone who didn’t write it to proofread it "   Ask someone to click every link & take every action
  • 25.
    10. Test &Segment Your emails Tests: Segments: "   Sender name/format "  Geography "   Subject lines "  Donation history "   Time of day "  Past actions taken "   Images (including "  Signup date headers) "  Whatever you’ve "   Length got "   Links "   Landing pages
  • 26.
  • 27.
    Landing Pages: Keepit simple. "   Make sure it’s clear what you want people to do "   Limit the number of: "   Distractions "   Fields "   Clicks
  • 28.
    Landing Pages: DaisyChain "   You don’t have to just send people to a “thank you” page "   Prioritize based on what you need most: "   Tell a friend "   Donate "   Events "   Other actions
  • 30.
    Why plan emails? "To avoid the blinking cursor paralysis. " To make them part of a larger campaign. " To have more time to write better emails. " To have get better content. " To get something done!
  • 31.
    1. What areyour goals?
  • 32.
    1. What areyour goals? Online goals: Offline goals: " List growth? " Pass a bill? " Fundraising? " Save the…. (puppies, seals, unicorns)? " User generated content? " Events? " Twitter/facebook followers " Volunteers? " Press attention? " Drive a news story?
  • 33.
    2. What areyour resources?
  • 34.
    2. What areyour resources? " Email list? " Volunteers on the ground? " Friendly bloggers? An organizational blog? " A technology platform? " Allied organizations/partners? " Online advertising budget? " Video capabilities? " Other technology abilities?
  • 35.
    3. What areyour key moments?
  • 36.
    3. What areyour key moments: online and offline milestones? " Internal news " External news " Media " Personal stories " Holidays/Days of Importance " Other solicitations
  • 37.
    Is this along or short campaign? " Are there deadlines you must meet? " Moments along the way that you can highlight?
  • 38.
    4. What areyour segments?
  • 39.
    Do you needdifferent emails for different people? " Action takers/non-action takers " Geography " Interest " How they joined the list " Donation history " Demographics " Superactivists vs. Lurkers
  • 40.
    4. What canpeople do to really help? What is your theory of change?
  • 41.
  • 42.
    Plug in youroffline activities/ milestones as the base. " Petition: When will you be delivering it? " Events: Should we invite them? Ask them to donate or share? What can people do if they can’t attend? " Videos/ads/offline materials: Can the list contribute content? Money? Share? " Reports/research: Can they comment? Debunk it? Share?
  • 43.
    Fill in therest. " Kicker messages " Follow-up results messages " Donation messages " Other creative things you can give people to do
  • 44.
    How much emailis too much email? " How often do you have something urgent and meaningful to say? Quarterly Monthly Weekly Daily TYPICAL Almost Probably certainly too much too little Credit: Idealware
  • 45.
  • 46.
    Debbie Shank haspaid enough " Goal: To stop a lawsuit. " Resources: 100,000 person email list. Petition & Speakout technology. Contact with the family. " Timing: Debbie’s well-being was in jeopardy " Segments: People who signed/didn’t sign petition; frequent letter-writers; Facebook followers " Theory of change: By shaming Wal-Mart, they’d drop the lawsuit.
  • 47.
    What did wedo? " Launched a petition (email and Facebook) " Wrote letters to Wal-Mart’s top management " Wrote to news outlets to cover the story
  • 48.
  • 49.
    It worked. Never letthe grid stop you from taking advantage of key moments.
  • 50.
    Thank You To: Lauren Miller lauren@bluestatedigital.com @laurenm www.neworganizing.com @neworganizing