My second draft of my script is ready for analysis.

1. Love Story No. 514432
Pippa Evans
Pipster
original screenplay
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EXT. DAY. STREET
Hannah walks down the street, it is afternoon and she is
walking to work. She is listening to music, and is in her
work outfit (waitress).
Hannah walks into the entrance of the pub
INT. NIGHT. PUB
Hannah is getting ready to leave work and takes off her work
apron. She walks outside of the pub into the courtyard and
takes out a bottle of beer from her bag.
EXT. NIGHT. PUB
There is a rustle and bustle of noise to her right from the
bunch of lads who are there for the evening.
Hannah tries relentlessly to open the beer on the table next
to the group of lads, by smashing the head of the bottle.
She struggles before she looks up in exhaustion, sees Jake
standing there holding up a bottle opener.
Hannah and Jake exchange a smile and a glance. Hannah rejects
his offer by opening her bottle on the table. Jake find this
amusing.
EXT. DAY. PARK
Hannah and Jake sit on a bench in Hannah's house overlooking
the pond. It is still early days, they both sit awkwardly,
laughing.
EXT.DAY. PUB/RESTAURANT
Jake sits down opposite Hannah with two drinks in his hand
EXT. NIGHT. HANNAH'S HOUSE
Jake walks Hannah up to her door. Hannah turns around smiling
with ecstasy in her eyes and goes for Jake. They snog
intensely, Hannah then pushes Jake away playfully and smiles
in excitement as she walks inside.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. NIGHT
Hannah lies in bed, she stares at her phone smiling, giggling
as she types.

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INT.JAKES HOUSE. NIGHT
Jake lies in bed, he stares at his phone smiling, giggling as
he types.
EXT.NIGHT.HOUSE PARTY
Hannah and Jake are both in costume, it is clearly halloween
and they stumble out of the house party. Dancing, Hannah is
tipsy and swings in Jakes arms, he smiles at her contently.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
Jake picks up Hannah over his shoulders, they are both in
pyjamas. Jake drops Hannah on the bed playfully and he lays
down next to her. Hannah turn into Jakes chest and begins to
stroke his chest.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
Hannah walks down the corridor as we see Jake hiding behind
the corner with a water pistol. As she passes he sprays
relentlessly and she runs and screams. Hannah picks up her
own gun and they begin to shoot each other across the
kitchen.
EXT. DAY. HANNAH'S PARENTS HOUSE
Jake stands outside Hannah's parents house, Hannah is hooked
on his arm, he pushes his hand through his hair, he is
clearly stressed. Hannah turns to him and fixes his tie and
smiles. The door opens and over the shoulder of Hannahs dad
we see her ecstatic reaction, and Jakes nervous hello.
INT. JAKES HOUSE. DAY
Hannah lays on his bed tangled in the sheets. Jake sits off
the bed taking photos of her, he is clearly obsessed with
her. Hannah laughs back at him.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
Jake begins to move his things into Hannahs house, it is a
montage of shots of them setting up , changing sheets and
putting boxes away etc.
Cut to the couple sitting on the couch, Jake sits with Hannah
laying across the couch on top of him, she is flicking
through the channels bored.
Cut to Hannah stirring a saucepan, Jake creeps up and grabs

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Hannah from behind, and slowly kisses her neck. Hannah
smiles, and turns to kiss him.
Cut to Jake in the mirror brushing his teeth, top off, Hannah
sits on the toilet staring at him.
He glances to the side, pauses and smiles at her. As if to
acknowledge her presence.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
Jake stands at the end of the bed shouting at Hannah holding
her phone, he has instagram DM open as if to highlight that
she has been talking to someone else. Hannah buries her head
in her hands.
Cut to another moment, Hannah is picking up Jake's dirty
clothes and sighing, Jake sits playing video games
disinterested. It is clear he needs to put more effort in.
Cut to another moment, Jake is making the bed, Hannah walks
in furious, holding his toothbrush. She throws the toothbrush
at his face and begins to shout, Jake responds in an
aggressive way. Tension is at its highest.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
Hannah sits on her laptop stressed, Jake walks in. The
tension is still underlying and neither has spoken. He stands
at the door with his hands behind his back. She glares back
down at the laptop to ignore him. He slowly walks over and
places a soft teddy on top of her laptop webcam.
Hannah looks up, she can't help but smile slightly. They both
exchange a giggle.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. NIGHT
Both lie in bed, divided. Hannah on the left, Jake on the
right, both on their phones switched off from each other.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
We enter an argument at its peak, Hannah throws some clothes
and items at Jake, he ducks and weaves her attempts and tries
to calm her by hugging her yet she refuses and slaps him
until he has to back away, she turns away in disgust.
Cut to later, time has passed and Jake finishes zipping up
his suitcase. There is a bin bag on the bed full of his
items. Hannah walks into the room, she sees he is leaving.

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She stops for a moment to process, and then walks back out of
the room. Jake looks on her in frustration.
INT. HANNAHS HOUSE. DAY
We now see Hannah standing in the middle of her room,
surveying the room. She sits for a moment on the bed and it
jump cuts to her in different states, contemplative, sadness
and anger. Hannah gets up and again stands and surveys the
room, she has a change of mind. Hannah leaves the room. The
camera is left hanging for a second before she comes back
carrying a bin bag. Hannah starts to pile all of the memories
(photos, letters, trinkets) and throws them into the bag.
Until she finally comes to the teddy Jake left for her on the
bed. She picks it up stares at it, smiles, and then decides
it must join the rest of the junk. She throws it in and she
has made the decision to move on. She ties the end of the
garbage bag and throws it over her shoulder. Hannah leaves
the room again, the camera hangs and then fades to black.