Development pro forma rich b

Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Richard Barber

Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like the level of detail that is put onto the picture, as it looks very much like the animal but still
has a very simplistic style due to there being no fur on the image. But this being said it doesn't
really make a huge difference if you would look at children's books because there is never much
detail within professional work for children's books. I like some of the effects (overlays) that are
used like the gradient overlay, which sows the shadowing on the animal quite well.
What would you improve if you did it again?
If I was to do it again I would spend more time adjusting the shape of the head, just so it looks
that's much more like the real photo. So that what I would do if I were to improve. As well as this
I would improve just little details such as highlights and darkening especially around the forehead
region. Although with the second one I feel I could have done the main body shape a little better
just to make all of the other elements such as the arms and feet merge together somewhat
better and give it a more realistic look.

Evaluation
I quite liked the level of detail and how the overall look went as it fits a certain style. I feel like due to the
amount of highlights throughout the image gives him a more of a realistic look. I also like the gradient in his
eyes to make him look that little bit more realistic. This will just give him a more human element to him and
make the rotoscope look just overall better. I also like the highlighting on his face as it really projects where the
light that has come onto his face and shows the feature a lot more clearly.
If I was to improve the whole image I would have taken more time to actually get the more depth into his hair,
so making it look like actual hair with different strands of it. As well I would have done the same to his beard to
make that look more realistic. I'm not to happy with how the nose turned out I feel like the colour is too dark
for the rest of the face and the overall look of it just doesn’t fit with the rest of the rotoscope.

Film Quotes
“As far back as I can remember,
I always wanted to be a
gangster”.

Evaluation
I like how it appears different from the film and really changes the style of it. Because of using
that comic book effect. In doing this I like the level of detail that is emphasised in his face, in using
the black lines to get this. I also like the way the blue has been done in order to make it pop
somewhat, which makes the person stand out just that little bit more from the background
To improve the image I would change and refine the background, so makes it look closer to the character but
make sure that the highlights/ shadowing remains the same. This will just give the picture as a whole a lift and
make the project look completely new.

Evaluation
I liked the variety within the text, so as some were short and bold some were long and enclosed
together. Just by adjusting two simple things in the leading and tracking you can make the text
look a lot more interesting.
If I was to do it again I would improve the colour scheme within the text as it could just look
better overall. I would also press a little harder at making more effects within the text, this will
make more images present on this page.

Evaluation
I liked the level of detail on the character, as the different colours flow nicely and show her emotions well. This
does well with the comic book styling and because of her stance makes the whole image feel good within the
compassion to the style. I also like the change of colour for the bow and arrow just to give it a slightly unnatural
look to the project. Whilst still keeping the rest of the background and the actress as natural and earthy as
possible.
I would give more detail towards the forest behind her, so there is more definition between that and the floor.
This I feel will just complete the overall look of the picture and make the whole thing look better generally. So
maybe just add in some more colour towards this so maybe using a brown in order to just make the tree
branches look more realistic.

Evaluation
I liked the style and overall look to the images as they all have a good level of detail within them. Although it
isn’t the most realistic level of detail you can still see the main parts of the person and the objects within.
Therefore following the conventions of the comic book look towards the comic strip.
To improve the piece I would spend time in order to refine the edges of the photos. As some of the images with
the colouring they overlap onto places that they shouldn’t. For example the last picture at the bottom some of
the green overlaps with some wood, so I would replace that with a brown.

Evaluation
Within the illustrations I quite like the overall look and how simplistic they both look. This follows
nicely within a children's book as you would not have to make a complete work of art to keep
children entertained. Although they are not the best drawings they show what they are well and
with the colours I feel works nicely.
If I was to do this again I would try to use another tool in order to make them stand out a little
more this is because especially with the pig drawing the pink colour around the face and body
doesn’t really show up well.

Evaluation
What I liked about the narrative environment was the way that the detail was put into the
production. By just having the black sections of the work to spot out the detailing in the windows
and the stains on the wall just little things that make the work look a little less dull.
If I was to redo the whole thing again I would probably improve by balancing the colours out with
the production, although it does show that some of the areas are lighter than other particularly
with the right hand side I would just take it a little darker by a couple of shades, just to make the
whole balance of colours look much better and make it look like that part of the wall should not
be there.

Proposal
Dimensions
The number of pages for the book will range between 8 and 12 and will consist of a
landscape look to them.
Story Overview
The main basis for the story is that whilst at work a man is greeted by the presence of a fairy, who then to repay
him for his work grants him 3 wishes of his choosing. Then dazzled from this experience goes home and would
like food, so asks his wife for some food. Upon being turned down then wishes for some food. Then after he
tells his wife the story so that she understands why some food has appeared randomly. She freaks out and calls
him a fool and wishes for the food to be on his nose. As it happens the couple then try to pull it off and when
they cannot he rights the wrong therefore using up all of his wishes. Although they are left with a good amount
of food left on the table.
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: Takes up next to no space sue to the compression it completes. Also that it is easily
transferred due to the file size and can be viewed upon any device to be seen as it was created.
Disadvantages: They are not the easiest files to edit and once the work is saved as a PDF file
then it is very tricky to make adjustments and is even more tricky to add in text.

Deadline
15/06/16
Audience
The audience I will be primarily targeting will be children aged 3-5 years old. I feel
like this is best because of the basic styling and the simplistic storyline. I feel like the
book could be targeted at both genders due to the main character being male and
that stereotypically that females would be more turned towards having a fairy book.
Where I feel will be the best places to sell this product would be mainly around
Britain primarily. This I feel will be the best place for the audience because they all
will know the language and the tale is a old English Folktale. However this product
would also be good for other English speaking areas such as Australia and north
America.
Production Methods
The methods and techniques I will use in order to make the storybook will be to use
a mixture of shape and rotoscoping techniques in the book. As I will use the shapes
to create settings and backgrounds for the whole book, so for the houses and office.
Then I will use a rotoscope for the characters. I feel like this could work well
because it gives a very simplistic look to the whole book (in terms of background)
and will give more definition to the characters and what they are like. In doing it
this way I am putting most of the light onto the characters as they will have a lot
more depth to them and will look more realistic.

What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
There is a clear idea of what the story is about and
is rather amusing due to having a comic presence
descriptions of the advantages and disadvantages
of the file formats are clear and understandable.
You have a good idea on what techniques you are
going to use and the audience you are aiming at
Potentially you could add another disadvantage to
your export formats
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
You have covered the story, art style, font
characters and backgrounds this is a strong piece
of work with no obvious faults
You could do with a bit more development on the
fonts you use

He seems to have a clear idea of what sort of visual
style he wants to use in the book.
The mind map is rich in ideas and seems to have
the main areas of planning covered.
The story overview could be clearer, i’m not sure I
fully understand the overview.
further developed?
There is lots of ideas on the page and they all tie
into a specific idea of what visual style this person
wants.

I like that you have a clear understanding of the
story you are going to create.
You have a good idea of the production methods
you are going to use for example rotoscoping and
the use of shapes.
To improve you could mention the type of text that
you are planning to use for example a serif or san
serif fort and why.
further developed?
It is good that you have included lots of cartoon
interpretations of people for your mood board that
you can take inspiration from when creating your
own.
You could add in some real photography to your
mood boards so that when it comes to creating
your own you do not copy any other styles and you
create your own from the original photograph, this
will also help you to create more realistic characters
and locations.

Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
The feedback mainly sates that there are a lot of the board covered within the idea generation and proposal but
there should be little tweaks added in the level of detail for the fonts as people appear to be a little undersold
about the whole text based part of the story. So are looking for more examples of the exact font type I will use.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
The areas of the feedback that I agree with are the whole font based improvement as I have re-read through and
have seen that is quite vague and could include some examples of the kind of style to the text I will use. Just
generally giving the viewer a clearer idea than just stating that I will use a serif format.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
The sections of the feedback I disagree with are using the real photographs within the mood board, although the
reasoning for this is very fair, I have represented some of the aspects to the whole production as it shows a similar
styling to what I would like to achieve with the book and also shows many different ways that the characters can
be represented within the book and the kind of illustrations that will be seen within the whole book. So showing
the office and their house as they will feature as background in the book.

Original Script http://www.worldoftales.com/European_folktales/English_folktale_65.html
Once upon a time, and be sure 't was a long time ago, there lived a poor woodman in a great forest, and every day of his life he went out to fell timber. So one day
he started out, and the goodwife filled his wallet and slung his bottle on his back, that he might have meat and drink in the forest. He had marked out a huge old
oak, which, thought he, would furnish many and many a good plank. And when he was come to it, he took his axe in his hand and swung it round his head as
though he were minded to fell the tree at one stroke. But he hadn't given one blow, when what should he hear but the pitifullest entreating, and there stood before
him a fairy who prayed and beseeched him to spare the tree. He was dazed, as you may fancy, with wonderment and affright, and he couldn't open his mouth to
utter a word. But he found his tongue at last, and, "Well," said he, "I'll e'en do as thou wishest."
"You've done better for yourself than you know," answered the fairy, "and to show I'm not ungrateful, I'll grant you your next three wishes, be they what they may."
And therewith the fairy was no more to be seen, and the woodman slung his wallet over his shoulder and his bottle at his side, and off he started home.
But the way was long, and the poor man was regularly dazed with the wonderful thing that had befallen him, and when he got home there was nothing in his
noddle but the wish to sit down and rest. Maybe, too, 't was a trick of the fairy's. Who can tell? Anyhow down he sat by the blazing fire, and as he sat he waxed
hungry, though it was a long way off supper-time yet.
"Hasn't thou naught for supper, dame?" said he to his wife.
"Nay, not for a couple of hours yet," said she.
"Ah!" groaned the woodman, "I wish I'd a good link of black pudding here before me."
No sooner had he said the word, when clatter, clatter, rustle, rustle, what should come down the chimney but a link of the finest black pudding the heart of man
could wish for.
If the woodman stared, the goodwife stared three times as much. "What's all this?" says she.
Then all the morning's work came back to the woodman, and he told his tale right out, from beginning to end, and as he told it the goodwife glowered and
glowered, and when he had made an end of it she burst out, "Thou bee'st but a fool, Jan, thou bee'st but a fool; and I wish the pudding were at thy nose, I do
indeed."
And before you could say Jack Robinson, there the Goodman sat and his nose was the longer for a noble link of black pudding.
He gave a pull but it stuck, and she gave a pull but it stuck, and they both pulled till they had nigh pulled the nose off, but it stuck and stuck.
"What's to be done now?" said he.
"'T isn't so very unsightly," said she, looking hard at him.
Then the woodman saw that if he wished, he must need wish in a hurry; and wish he did, that the black pudding might come off his nose. Well! there it lay in a
dish on the table, and if the Goodman and goodwife didn't ride in a golden coach, or dress in silk and satin, why, they had at least as fine a black pudding for their
supper as the heart of man could desire.

Story Breakdown
1. Whilst at work as he is just about to finish, the guy encounters a fairy.
2. She then tells him that she is very happy with his work and grants him 3 wishes.
3. In a daze he decides to leave work and go home to his wife, to tell her the news.
4. When he arrives home he feels hungry and asks her for food.
5. After she says no he wishes for some food. As the words leave his lips the food appears on the table
in front of him.
6. Much to his wife’s shock he explains the situation and as she gets mad at him and shouts that she
wishes that the food was on his nose, to which it then happens.
7. As this happens she then realises what he has said is true then tries to help by pulling off the food
from his face.
8. When they realise that the food is stuck the man then uses his final wish to remove it as he hates the
look of it on his nose.
9. They then feel relief that although they are not riding around in a golden coach, they at least had a
nice plate of food for the nights supper.

Draft Script
Once upon a time there was an ordinary man, who has a simple office job and a very normal life. However on this day that was
about to change as on day when he reaches work, as he is just finishing up his first task of the day a fairy pop up in his office. He is
then speechless and tries to speak but cannot. After a few seconds he finds his tongue and asks the fairy “What is happening?" and
“why she is here?”
She then tell him that she is very impressed with what he is doing at work and in his his home life. So decides to tell him that she will
grant him 3 wishes, no matter what they are she will make it happen. As soon as she says that she then disappears. He then stared
for a few minutes dazed by what has just befallen him, so decided to leave work a little early and go home to his wife.
Upon his arrival at his home he is greeted by his wife and they sit down together. He then tells her the story of what happened this
morning and his wife appears to just shrug and take it on the chin. A few minutes pass by and he feels really hungry, so asks his wife
if she will be making the dinner soon.
She replies with “not for a few hours yet, it is only 3 o’clock” and then walks into the kitchen.
So in his head he is still feeling very hungry and just wishes for some pizza. They then hear a clatter and a rustle and then a pizza
appears in front of him. When his wife returns from the kitchen she is then surprised and says “what's all this” with a slightly angry
expression. She starts to get quite mad and shouts “you are simply just a fool. I wish for that pizza to be stuck on your nose”.
As the words leave her lips she then notices that a segment of the pizza has merged into his nose.
She was completely shocked. The then decided to try to pull it off by hand but she failed to remove the pizza from his nose.
At last he was completely done with this whole thing and then wished for the pizza to bed removed from his face. Again they heard
the final clatter, clatter, rustle, rustle and it was gone. The couple then sat down talking about what could have been, they could have
been riding down the street is a golden carriage but they did not care because they had a nice pizza to have for there dinner.

Final Script
Once upon a time there was an ordinary man called James, who has a simple office job and a very normal life.
However on this day that was about to change as on this day as he reached work, just as he is just finishing up his first task of the day, a fairy popped
up in his office.
He was stunned by this and was left completely speechless, but as he tries to speak he cannot. After a few seconds he finds his tongue and asks the
fairy “What is happening?" and “why she is here?”
She then tells him that she is very impressed with what he is doing at work and in his home life. So will grant him his next 3 wishes, no matter what
they are she will make them happen. As soon as she says that, she then disappears.
He then stared for a few minutes dazed by what has just befallen him, so decided to leave work a little early and go home to his wife.
Upon his arrival at his home, his wife then greets him and they sit down together. He then tells her the story of what happened this morning and his
wife appears to just shrug and take it on the chin. A few minutes pass by and he feels really hungry, so asks his wife if she will be making the dinner
soon.
She replies with “not for a few hours yet, it is only 3 o’clock” and then walks into the kitchen.
So in his head he is still feeling very hungry and just wishes for some pizza. They then hear a clatter and a rustle and then a pizza appears in front of
him. When his wife returns from the kitchen, she then is very surprised and says. “What has happened here?" This is done with a slightly angry
expression. She starts to get quite mad and shouts “you are simply just a fool. I wish for that pizza to be stuck on your nose”.
Clatter. Clatter. Rustle. Rustle and there it was.
As the words leave her lips she then notices that a segment of the pizza has merged into his nose.
She was completely shocked. The then decided to try to pull it off by hand but she failed to remove the pizza from his nose.
At last he was completely done with this whole thing and then wished for the pizza to bed removed from his face. Again they heard the final clatter,
clatter and a rustle, rustle it was gone.
The couple then sat down talking about what could have been. They had thoughts that they could have been riding down the street in a golden
carriage. However they did not care because they had a nice pizza to have for their dinner.

Digital Flat Plans
1. 2.
More text will be added
here
On this
slide
the
text
will be
placed
here
3. 4.
The text will be shown
here
The text and dialogue will be
presented here.

Digital Flat Plans
5. 6.
7. 8.
What happens in the story will be
written from here
The text will be placed
parallel to the event
The text will follow the action
of pulling as this is what will
be done on the page
Text will remain here through this page
as well
I wish…

Digital Flat Plans
9.
Text will be placed here

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