2. QUESTION 1: WHAT DO YOU LIKE ABOUT THE SYNOPSIS?
“Good descriptive writing to show events. ” W.P.
“Interesting dynamic brothers relationship, father and son relationship ” J.K.
“very emotive good idea.” B.G.
I gathered I wide range of answers, complimenting my amount of detail input.
Also they seemed to like my idea as well saying that it was emotive.
From this I gather confident response that my synopsis is interesting and
put off in a emotive manner, which was what I intended.
The issues of brother relationship and Father, Son relationship
acknowledgment, shows that I have made myself clear on what I am trying
to represent, but also makes me think on how I need to bold the issue of a
lack of mother figure in there life.
Altogether this has been a successful answered question as this makes me think,
even though it what’s good about it, it also tells me what I am trying to
make clear isn't very clear.
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3. QUESTION 2: WHAT DIDN’T YOU LIKE ABOUT THE SYNOPSIS?
“to physiologically involved to much into there own heads ” J.K.
“Beginning to long and middle and end to short ” W. J.
“Didn’t understand the need of the family friend.” G.M.
From what I got back from this changed a lot of material n my synopsis,
initially the family friend was key but the change in my whole plot made
him merely useless and just confused the story. The removal of this
character will make it no different to the events, it even will grow a bigger
representation of the family itself showing cracks in foundation.
I can see what they mean about the prolonged intro, huge amounts of detail I
packed into it, but the drought of detail in the middle and end , ending
almost sudden, makes it feel sum what rushed.
In addition to the answers I will need to shorten the intro or even it out with
the middle and end, also the existence of the family friend is abolished. I
will rewrite any parts what are to in internally connected to the character.
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4. QUESTION 3: HOW COULD I IMPROVE IT?
“The father figure could be more developed with the son.” G.S.
“Visually expressing their emotions instead of mentally.” J.K.
“Change structure of the story, so it is not weighted at the start.” J.G.
This shows me that the father figure hasn’t got a lot of importance which
informs me the character needs more depth to either show back ground
through props or enhancing his presence of his vices with sound.
Again, the visual and mental cross-over has grown from previous writing and
has become a habit, which will be over come by getting into the mind set of
the style of writing.
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5. Question 4: How many times did you read it?
The average amount of people readings is 1, but one person
read it twice. The disadvantage of this, is that there
understanding of it as a whole is very brief, which may lead
to negative comments because of there vague
understanding.
The reason being is for the hand out to be done in a short
space of time so i could analysis, if i had gave them more
time i would of asked them to read it more then once.
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6. Question 5: Did it make you feel anything? What were they?
“Sad as the boys mother has died” B.G.
“Sympathetic towards the younger boy as he doesn't understand whats going on” J.G.
“concern” W.P.
This shows that the story has a feel of emotion and that the situation is
connectable and relatable. This tells me that my idea is good and does what
is intended. From the answers i got they all said they felt similar emotions
which makes me much more confident with my idea.
To get a greater impact i need to consider rewriting the piece to create a better
atmosphere and emphasis the emotion.
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7. Question 6: Did you pick up any themes and issues?
“Preserving child innocence” J.k.
“Weak parenting and grief” M.E.
“death” B.S.
This is a good response as they are picking up on themes and issues
what are meant to be in the idea. This shows i am portraying them
clearly also correctly, given that the subject is about a corrupted
parent putting all his problems on his son to inform his younger
son about his mothers passing the keys themes have been stated.
From my idea the wide range of answers tells me that i have a lot of
themes showing that I'm not lacking in any.
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8. Question 7: Could you visualise it?
It was a closed styled question
Everyone replied yes showing that my
descriptive styled writing proved to be
successful in creating a picture for the
audience in my synopsis, allowing them to
connect and empathises the characters.
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9. Question 8: Was there any parts you couldn’t understand?
“some character unclear” S.L.
“No” Majority
The comment was referring to the family friend which i am removing
from the short as he has no importance in the film, the answers
about the family friend has help me decide to erase him from the
story.
Besides that the majority said that it was understandable and clear
what was going on. So if i do change the style the base of the
synopsis is clear.
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10. Question 9: Do you think this a believable piece?
A closed style question
All questioners answered yes.
Simply telling me the events in the short are on a ‘real’ level.
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11. Question 10: What genre/tone would you put this under?
“realism” Majority
The reply to my answer fitted the the tone i was going for, this shows
that the events are realistic and my audience can recognise the
relatable situation what some people may come across in there life.
Marking it as realism implies that what i do to shoot it, the
characteristics have to fit with the genre itself covering all the
micro and macro categories, to execute the whole short successfully.
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12. Question 11: Do you find the protagonist situation relatable? Why is
that?
“I haven't personally been in a situation like this but i can see someone being in
that.” J.K.
“Yes, family illness” B.G.
Many said that they could see it but haven’t experienced it, this
probably because it is a tragic case that is unlucky to be known to
be involved.
Even though they said it was not relatable personally, i still think the
subject is a common theme but is not widely publicised. By creating
this as a short may even create awareness to the viewers who
watch.
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13. Question 12: Is you could sum up this synopsis with an issue what
would it be?
“abandonment” W.J.
“Death” B.G.
“Lack of communication” G.S.
These answers just reassures me that they have a bold issue in the
synopsis and from these its clear that i’m on the right track at
early stages, creating a sense of abandonment through out.
This even informs me of issues i didn't cover such as lack of
communication, with this i can see where this comes up and go into
more depth with the idea to create a more vibrant issue.
This made me more confident in my target audience because they are
picking up on issues that i had in mind showing that i have chosen
a strong professional group to get secure answer.
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14. Question 13: Would this be able to be filmed in a 5
minute time frame?
The whole group said circled Yes.
Approving of the timing of events manageable for the time objective
which is 5 minutes.
The idea of editing down the intro but to even it out my expanding the
middle and end to get a smooth flowing piece so it doesn't feel
rushed at the end.
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15. Question 14: Is the subject important to todays world? Why is that?
“yes, this is a very realistic issue and relatable to many people” W.J.
“touches on some issues in everyday life but is not that common” G.M.
I know the event is not common but it does happen and making a
short around this makes it more interesting instead of typical
controversial theme.
Saying that it not as common shows that its a new subject to be dealt
with especially in a film basis making it more original.
This is a reason that this film will not bore as its a new situation for
the majority.
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16. Question 15: Does this include characters that are usually not
represented in mainstream cinema? Who are they?
“yes, single father” W.J.
“ Single father” B.J.
They identify the representative who is not normally seen in a
mainstream cinema. Having a original character in this short
makes it more interesting for the viewer to explore the life of this
characters statues.
This also tells me the character is represented well and clear to the
viewer his statues.
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17. All these questions I asked my target audience were found helpful to the
development of my short film synopsis. Due to the answers delivered I have
changed a few things that my audience picked up on which they found was
not needed to be present.
It also got me thinking on how the synopsis could be expanded to really get
a interesting story going on from my idea.
I found that the answers were useful but if I included more people to be
involved I would of got a wider knowledge back which may have lead to
higher improvement.
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