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Things to improve
FIRST DRAFT
I should refilm and make the TV
straight.
The opacity, within the chorus
doesn’t work well, I need to find
a different way of Joanna seeing
Jude in her dream and make it
more obvious that he’s in the
dream.
This is the first time we see Jude
in a minute, there has to be a
way to include him nearer the
start, but acting down, due to
Joanna's environmental actions
This shot is very low focus, therefore
the ‘wake me up’ words on the alarm
appear blurred and not clearly
focused on, so the audience can see
it
Within this scene, you can
see a deodorant and
shower gel, this makes it
unprofessional, so possible
reshooting of scene
needed. Also lighting isn’t
the best
I think, I should use a
different gopro scene here,
the lighting is dark and
terrain and surroundings not
very effective.
I don’t believe I picked the
right shots for this scene, I
think I should change them
In the editor, the media isn’t even being
displayed, and in the uploaded footage,
it is evidently low-quality so I definitely
think I should reshoot this scene, to
make it more professional
As you can see the video
reaches the 3 minute mark
already, I must shorten the
video, so I can include the
footage of the
environment/world being better
in 2015.

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Things to improve

  • 2. I should refilm and make the TV straight.
  • 3. The opacity, within the chorus doesn’t work well, I need to find a different way of Joanna seeing Jude in her dream and make it more obvious that he’s in the dream. This is the first time we see Jude in a minute, there has to be a way to include him nearer the start, but acting down, due to Joanna's environmental actions
  • 4. This shot is very low focus, therefore the ‘wake me up’ words on the alarm appear blurred and not clearly focused on, so the audience can see it
  • 5. Within this scene, you can see a deodorant and shower gel, this makes it unprofessional, so possible reshooting of scene needed. Also lighting isn’t the best
  • 6. I think, I should use a different gopro scene here, the lighting is dark and terrain and surroundings not very effective.
  • 7. I don’t believe I picked the right shots for this scene, I think I should change them
  • 8. In the editor, the media isn’t even being displayed, and in the uploaded footage, it is evidently low-quality so I definitely think I should reshoot this scene, to make it more professional
  • 9. As you can see the video reaches the 3 minute mark already, I must shorten the video, so I can include the footage of the environment/world being better in 2015.