The document discusses tightening writing by eliminating unnecessary words. It provides several examples of wordy phrases and rewrites them in a more concise manner by removing extra and redundant words. The goal is to tighten writing and make it more direct and impactful.

1. Tight Writing
Eliminating unnecessary words that aren’t needed
Keith Robinson
Coordinator of News and Public Affairs
Department of Agricultural Communication
Purdue University
June 12, 2012

2. Tight Writing
Eliminating unnecessary words that aren’t needed
Keith Robinson
Coordinator of News and Public Affairs
Department of Agricultural Communication
Purdue University
June 12, 2012

3. Tight Writing
Eliminating unnecessary words that aren’t needed
Keith Robinson
Coordinator of News and Public Affairs
Department of Agricultural Communication
Purdue University
June 12, 2012

4. "I have made this letter longer than usual
because I lack the time to make it shorter."

5. Blaise Pascal
17th century French mathematician, inventor, writer, philosopher …
"I have made this letter longer than usual
because I lack the time to make it shorter."

6. "Veni, Vidi, Vici."

7. Julius Caesar, Roman emperor
(100 BC - 44 BC)
"Veni, Vidi, Vici."
("I came, I saw, I conquered.")

8. Every sentence can be tightened,
including this one.

9. Every sentence can be tightened.
including this one.

10. The shop is located in room 170 of Smith Hall
at the corner of University and State streets.

11. The shop is located in room 170 of Smith Hall
at the corner of University and State streets.

12. Landowners can learn about good management
practices and resources for their forests and wild lands at
the upcoming Indiana Tree Farm Field Tour and Forest
Landowners Clinic.

13. Landowners can learn about good management
practices and resources for their forests and wild lands at
the upcoming Indiana Tree Farm Field Tour and Forest
Landowners Clinic.

14. He believes that creating maps of all the
potential routes for cancer cell formation is a
significant key to developing better cancer drugs.

15. He believes that creating maps of all the
potential routes for cancer cell formation is a
significant key to developing better cancer drugs.

16. Barber said that departments within the
college are beginning to strongly recommend
that students have at least one internship
experience before graduation.

17. Barber said that departments within the
college are beginning to strongly recommend
that students have at least one internship
experience before graduation.

18. Barber said that departments within the
college are beginning to strongly recommend
that students have at least one internship
experience before graduation.

19. In an AP report from the Middle East about a group of nations, including
the U.S., having a conference to decide how to aid the Syrian rebels:
The summit meeting of the “Friends of the Syrian
People” follows a year of failed diplomacy. …

20. The summit meeting of the “Friends of the Syrian
People” follows a year of failed diplomacy. …

21. By Christopher Wills
SPRINGFIELD, Ill. (AP) – Gov. Rod
Blagojevich was thrown out of office Thursday
without a single lawmaker coming to his defense,
brought down by a government-for-sale scandal
that stretched from Chicago to Capitol Hill and
turned the foul-mouthed politician into a national
punchline. (39)

22. SPRINGFIELD, Ill. (AP) – Scandal-plagued
Gov. Rod Blagojevich was removed from office
Thursday. (9)

23. SPRINGFIELD, Ill. (AP) – Gov. Rod
Blagojevich was removed from office Thursday. (8)

24. SPRINGFIELD, Ill. (AP) – He’s outta there!
(3)

25. SPRINGFIELD, Ill. (AP) – Gone! (1)

26. Neither Brumbaugh nor Basich said the problem
has impacted their businesses negatively.

27. Neither Brumbaugh nor Basich said the problem
has impacted their businesses negatively.
Neither Brumbaugh nor Basich said the problem
has hurt their businesses.

28. When it comes to soybeans, growers have a
few more options as far as seed treatments are
concerned. (18)

29. When it comes to With soybeans, growers
have a few more seed treatment options. as far as
seed treatments are concerned. (10)

30. Not only do the profits all go back to fund
programs to educate students, but the real-life
experience helps the students grasp the concepts
that they're taught in class. (29)

31. Not only do the all profits all go back to
fund educational programs to educate students, but
the real-life experience helps the students grasp the
concepts that they're taught in class. (20)

32. From:
Not only do the profits all go back to fund programs
to educate students, but the real-life experience helps the
students grasp the concepts that they're taught in class. (29)
To:
Not only do all profits fund educational programs,
but the experience helps students grasp the concepts they're
taught in class. (20)

33. Weed pressures, on the other hand, could be a more
visible problem for grain farmers this spring. Indiana has
had enough warm days for winter annuals to germinate, said
weed scientist Bill Johnson. Those weeds go dormant when
the weather returns to below freezing, but each time the
weather is warm, it promotes growth. (54)

34. Weeds pressures, on the other hand, could be a more
visible problem for grain farmers this spring. Indiana has
had enough warm days for winter annuals to germinate, said
weed scientist Bill Johnson. Those weeds go dormant when
the weather returns to in below-freezing temperatures, but
each time the weather is warm weather promotes their
growth. (45)

35. From:
Weed pressures, on the other hand, could be a more visible
problem for grain farmers this spring. Indiana has had enough warm
days for winter annuals to germinate, said weed scientist Bill Johnson.
Those weeds go dormant when the weather returns to below freezing,
but each time the weather is warm, it promotes growth. (54)
To:
Weeds, on the other hand, could be a more visible problem for
grain farmers this spring. Indiana has had enough warm days for winter
annuals to germinate, said weed scientist Bill Johnson. Those weeds go
dormant in below-freezing temperatures, but warm weather promotes
their growth. (45)

36. Thousand cankers disease, which cannot be
treated, had been confirmed in western states
during the past 10 years. But in the last several
years, it has been spotted in Tennessee,
Pennsylvania and Virginia. (33)

37. Thousand cankers disease, which cannot be
treated, had been confirmed in nine western
states during the past 10 years. But in the last
several years, it has been spotted in Tennessee,
Pennsylvania and Virginia since 2010. (31)

38. Factors that could cause prices to rise are
global instability and disruptions in supply. (14)

39. Factors that could cause prices to rise are
global instability and disruptions in supply. (14)
Global instability and disruptions in supply
could force prices upward. (10)

40. On the other hand, factors that could bring prices
down include rate of economic growth, an increase in
crude oil production, and higher-than-normal crude oil
stocks. (26)

41. On the other hand, factors that could bring prices
down include rate of economic growth, an increase in
crude oil production, and higher-than-normal crude oil
stocks. (26)
On the other hand, sluggish economic growth, an
increase in crude oil production and higher-than-normal
crude oil stocks could bring prices down. (22)

42. Close Your Eyes

43. The beef checkoff’s Research, Education and
Innovation (REI) programs manage the safety, human
nutrition, and product enhancement research, as well as the
Beef Quality Assurance, Beef Innovations Group and
Culinary Innovations programs that provides the tools,
technologies and knowledge to all sectors of the supply
chain, thereby facilitating improvements and increased
understanding of beef products offered to the public. (59)

44. Close Your Eyes

45. The beef checkoff’s research, education and
innovation programs manage safety, human nutrition and
product research. They provide technology and knowledge
to all sectors of the supply chain, helping the industry to
improve beef products and increase the public’s
understanding of them. (42)

46. The beef checkoff’s Research, Education and
Innovation (REI) programs manage the safety, human
nutrition, and product enhancement research, as well as the
Beef Quality Assurance, Beef Innovations Group and
Culinary Innovations programs that provides the tools,
technologies and knowledge to all sectors of the supply
chain, thereby facilitating improvements and increased
understanding of beef products offered to the public.

47. The beef checkoff’s research, education and
innovation programs manage the safety, human nutrition and
product enhancement research. as well as the Beef Quality
Assurance, Beef Innovations Group. and Culinary
Innovations programs that They provide the tools,
technology and knowledge to all sectors of the supply chain,
helping the industry to improve thereby facilitating beef
products and increase the public’s understanding of them.

48. The beef checkoff’s research, education and
innovation programs manage safety, human nutrition and
product research. They provide technology and knowledge
to all sectors of the supply chain, helping the industry to
improve beef products and increase the public’s
understanding of them.

49. EDIT THYSELF!