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Stephanie,
Your have written a thoughtful proposal. You are well on your
way to thinking analytically about Alexie's story. Developing a
clearer thesis statement will be a critical step in writing a
successful analysis. Here are some links that should prove
helpful to you:
· Thesis Statements Overview
· Thesis Statement (Video Tutorial)
· Prompt to Thesis Handout
· Thesis Generator
As you continue to develop your paper, any research you do
should be very valuable in helping you refine your thesis and
develop your ideas. Please be sure to review the comments I
included on your paper for additional feedback and suggestions.
As always, let me know if you have questions.
Pat L
Please note: Since your submission is one day late, 10% will be
deducted from your grade.
( 0.88 / 1.00) Articulate Interest in the Choice of Topic From
the Approved List of Prompts
Proficient - Mostly articulates interest in the choice of topic
from the approved list of prompts. Provides details about how
the topic interests the student. Minor details are slightly
underdeveloped.
Comments:
You selected an approved prompt that centers on a specific kind
of literary analysis. You might review the topic thoroughly so
that you develop a clear, focused analysis based on the topic.
( 1.76 / 2.00) Identify a Text and Explain the Connection
Between the Literary Work and Chosen Topic
Proficient - Identifies a specific literary work as directed from
the approved list of prompts, and explains the connection
between the literary work and the chosen topic. The explanation
is slightly underdeveloped.

Comments:
You are off to a good start! You clearly identified a specific
story, poem, or play from the Approved List of Prompts. Be
sure to read the story more than once and make notes. That
process will help you gather ideas about the text and prepare
you to develop a focus for your analysis.
( 1.52 / 2.00) Develop a Working Thesis
Basic - Develops a working thesis that is too broad and/or does
not clearly articulate an argument about the literary text(s). The
thesis is unclear.
Comments:
This version of your thesis needs significant revision.
Remember that a thesis statement should provide clear direction
to the essay's body paragraphs. While you did well choosing a
topic, you will need to create a thesis statement that clearly
articulates your original analysis about the author's work.
( 1.76 / 2.00) Identify Three Key Ideas in Support of Your
Thesis
Proficient - Identifies three key ideas in support of the thesis.
Some supporting points may summarize the plot rather than
reflect a critical reading of the primary text(s). The key ideas
are slightly underdeveloped.
Comments:
You make a good effort to select three key ideas; however, they
are a bit vague. You might take time to refine these ideas,
making them more concrete and clear.
( 1.76 / 2.00) Project Plans and Concerns
Proficient - Describes questions, concerns, and plans for the
project as requested in the template. Minor details are missing
or slightly underdeveloped.
Comments:
You do a terrific job describing any questions and concerns you
have for your literary analysis. You also clearly describe your
plans to research and write this essay.
( 0.44 / 0.50) Written Communication: Control of Syntax and
Mechanics

Proficient - Displays comprehension and organization of syntax
and mechanics, such as spelling and grammar. Written work
contains only a few minor errors and is mostly easy to
understand.
Comments:
Good job! Correct conventions facilitate the reading of the text.
( 0.44 / 0.50) Written Communication: Page Requirement
Proficient - The length of the paper is nearly equivalent to the
required number of correctly formatted pages.
Overall Score: 8.56 / 10.00
Overall Grade: 7.71
ENG125: Introduction to Literature
Proposal for final paper—Week 1
Once you have decided on an approved prompt and approved
text, respond to the questions below. Please be mindful of the
word count and double-space all of your responses. You are to
meet the minimum word requirement without going over the
maximum number of words requested.
1. What is your chosen prompt for the literary analysis
assignment?
(Use the space below to complete this section. Include the
number and first sentence of the prompt you chose from the list
of prompts.)
I chose Prompt 2 “What beliefs and values from Native
American culture does the
narrator consider important, based on ideas and actions in the
story?

2. What interests you most about this prompt and why?
(Use the space below to complete this section. Your response
must be 100 to 150 words.)
One of the things that interest me about the prompt is that
character in the story had a normal life even though he was
homeless. He still carried his belief from his Spokane Indian
tribe. He stayed within his Native American culture by
continuing to keep the same Indian friends. This topic gives me
a good start on my paper. I know that while writing this paper I
will learn even more about how some Native American people
live. This character has a lot of negative and positive things to
say about all of the Native American that live in the Washington
State Area.
3. What text will you write about? Why?
must be 100 to 150 words.)
The text I chose is What You Pawn I will Redeem (By Sherman
Alexie). This Story is about a homeless Indian (or Native
American) that resides in Spokane Washington. He tells about
how he lives in his day to day life where people in his
community take diligent care of him. He also speaks on how
homelessness is very common in that part of the state and he is
good at it. He has some college in his background and has had
several families. One day he just went crazy. I am looking
forward to writing this paper, and telling the story of Jackson
Jackson.
4. What is your working thesis? Keep in mind that “working
thesis” means you can slightly modify your thesis for the draft
and/or final essay.

(Use the space below to complete this section. Your thesis
statement must be ONLY one to two sentences long.)
Jackson Jackson is a Spokane Indian that went through several
transitions in life. School, several families, and work drove him
to instability and homelessness
5. What are three key ideas that you will discuss in support of
your thesis? (Write one -- and only one -- sentence for each
point.
a. Jackson Jackson staying within his own Indian culture
b. He is very effective at being homeless, and lives his version
of a normal life
c. He has had several families, has some educational
background, and has had blue collar jobs.
6. What questions/concerns do you have at this point about your
project?
must be 75 to 150 words long.)
One of my concerns is the ability to meet the page requirement.
I want to make sure that I fully develop my ideas but stay
within the page range without being too wordy and going over
the page limit. I also want to be sure I say enough about each
point. I’m also wondering about what kinds of research I will
use for this project. I plan to look at the library tutorial for help
with the research, and I will submit a draft to the Ashford
Writing Center for some extra feedback.

Running head: SAMSA’S ALIENATION 1
Samsa’s Alienation in Franz Kafka’s The Metamorphosis
Sample Student
English 125: Introduction to Literature
Professor Smith
Month and date, year
SAMSA’S ALIENATION 2
Samsa’s Alienation in Franz Kafka’s The Metamorphosis
One would normally think of the home and family as a
sanctuary; however, the opposite
is true for Gregor Samsa in Franz Kafka’s The Metamorphosis.
Instead of receiving love from

his parents and sister, Gregor is outcast. His transformation
into a vermin is a physical
manifestation of his already alienated state and demonstrates
how the family viewed him as a
commodity instead of a son or brother that they loved. By
analyzing Gregor’s room, his
relationships with others, and his own internal dialogue, one can
see that Gregor, in fact, did not
transform at all.
Various aspects of the room in which Gregor lives illustrate
that his life is not that of a
human engaging with the world. His room is described a
“proper human room” (Kafka 1915).
The addition of the qualifier “human” is an example of verbal
irony; Gregor has already
morphed into a creature at this point. The room is also “small”
and mention is made of the “four
walls” (Kafka, 1915). Though many rooms are small and have
four walls, the highlighted of this
fact by the narrator evokes a sense of enclosure or
imprisonment.
The furnishings of the room (or lack thereof) support Gregor’s
disengagement with
human connection. Nothing is related of photos of family or

friends, and the room seems empty,
save for his bed and a few other items. We read that “textile
samples lay spread out on the
table” (Kafka, 1915), thus informing us that Gregor, who works
as a salesman, takes his work
home with him. The only picture Gregor does have in his room
is one of a woman that he cut
out and framed (Kafka, 1915), thus suggesting he finds more
interest in the image of a stranger
than with that of any person in his life. Save for some furniture,
a table covered with work, and
an image of a stranger on the wall, Gregor’s room is empty and
resembles a prison cell more
than it does that of a human being connected with the world.
Author
Comment [1]: Include a brief yet
meaningful one- to two-sentence lead-in.
Author
Comment [2]: The thesis presents a claim
founded on analysis and directly responds
to the prompt.
Author
Comment [3]: This “essay map” presents
the threesupporting points in the order in
which they will be addressed.

Author
Comment [4]: Body paragraphs should
begin with a topicsentence that also relates
to the thesis.
Author
Comment [5]: The body paragraph
should contain specific textual evidence and
an explanation of how the evidence
illustrates the paragraph’s main point.
Author
Comment [6]: This topicsentence
continues the discussion in the previous
paragraph yet still offers the focus of this
one.
Author
Comment [7]: Note that quotations are
smoothly integrated into the discussion.
Author
Comment [8]: Proper APA in-text
citations should be included whenever
referring to a text.
One more item in the room that supports Samsa’s involvement
in his work and alienation
from the world is that of the alarm clock which serves to
symbolize the control that his job has in
his life. Despite being transformed into a bug, Gregor is more

worried about missing work than
he is about his physical state. Brooding about how he would
like to quit his job after paying
about his parents’ debt while tossing and turning in bed, he says
to himself, “First of all though,
I’ve got to get up, my train leaves at five” (Kafka, 1915). Then,
an entire paragraph is devoted to
Gregor’s worrying about missing his train and wondering if he
had slept through the alarm.
Gregor then wonders how he will deal with the repercussions
with his boss who would certainly
be angry with him for missing work. Gregor’s worries are
supported when the chief clerk does
stop by the apartment wondering why he did not appear at work
(Kafka, 1915). Sokel (1983)
notes that Gregor is further alienated from the products as his
labor, as he does not even enjoy
the money he earns but gives it to his family. He explains,
“Gregor’s sole reason for enduring
the hated position, the need to pay his parents’ ‘debt’ to his
boss, drastically highlights the
doubly extrinsic purpose of Gregor’s work. For not only is his
labor alien to his true desires, but
its…salary or commission that it affords him—does not even

belong to him” (p. 487). Gregor’s
room and everything in it tell the story of his life: he sleeps, he
works, and he has no connection
to other humans.
Gregor’s relationships with others also reveal his alienation and
role as a commodity, not
a person. The interaction with the chief clerk at the office
makes it clear the Gregor is valued
simply for his ability to make the company money. As already
mentioned, the clerk at Gregor’s
office soon came by the family apartment to check on Gregor’s
whereabouts. The description of
the visit makes it clear that the clerk was not at the home to
inquire about Gregor’s welfare but to
reprimand him for not being at work. When Gregor did not
respond to the family’s questions
Author
Comment [9]: The discussion
demonstrates an application of the literary
elements discussed in the textbook.
Author
Comment [10]: Note that secondary
material is used sparingly. It is to support
your own original argument.
Author

Comment [11]: Transitional language is
included in this topicsentence to signal the
move to the second pointin the essay map.
(because he was physically unable to do so), “[t]he chief clerk
now raised his voice, ‘Mr.
Samsa,’…You barricade yourself in your room...you are causing
serious and unnecessary
concern to your parents and… you fail to carry out your
business duties in a way that is quite
unheard of” (Kafka, 1915). When Gregor does finally respond
(in a way incomprehensible to
all), they assume he is mocking them instead of trying to
explain his predicament (Kafka, 1915).
The clerk is quick to fire Gregor, thus suggesting that Gregor is
a commodity that can be easily
replaced.
The chief clerk is not the only person who views Gregor as a
commodity; Gregor’s own
family sees him as a means to their own end and as something
that is useless when it is no longer
able to make money. Early in the novella, Gregor thinks about
the fact that Gregor was working

to pay off his parents’ debt and would need to work “another
five or six years” to do so (Kafka,
1915). One would think that in such a situation that the rest of
the family was incapable of
working, but this is not true, as the family soon finds other
means of income upon Gregor’s
inability to work.
Perhaps the most telling scene of the family’s view of Gregor
occurs at the very end of
section I when Gregor rushes out of his room in an effort to
reach out to the clerk and save his
job. Though one might understand confusion on their part,
Gregor’s family, in particular his
father, shun him and react violently. Upon seeing Gregor, his
father “seized the chief clerk's
stick in his right hand…, picked up a large newspaper from the
table with his left, and used them
to drive Gregor back into his room, stamping his foot at him as
he went” (Kafka, 1915). The
father then started “making hissing noises at [Gregor] like a
wild man” (Kafka, 1915). Clearly,
Gregor’s father sees Gregor not as a son but as an enemy. This
is ultimately illustrated when he

shoves Gregor into his room, injuring him. After the scene
calms, “For two whole days, all the
Author
Comment [12]: Brackets may be used to
make small modifications in a quotation in
order to retain correct grammar.
Author
Comment [13]: The discussion here and
throughout this paper does not simply retell
the story. Rather, the focus is on
presenting
an argument. Specific details are included
to support claims.
Author
Comment [14]: Note the pattern in this
and all body paragraphs: introduce main
idea. Offer textual evidence and
commentary. Offer another pointor two of
textual evidence, including commentary
after each.
talk at every mealtime was about what they should do now”
(Kafka, 1915), leading one to
believe such talk was about how the family would provide for
themselves, not how they would
care for Gregor. There is no care or concern demonstrated to
Gregor by his father or anyone, for

that matter; rather, his father exemplifies the fact that the
family only cared about Gregor when
he was useful to them. Now that he is not of use, he is simply a
burden. Ryan (2007) makes
note of additional significance of Gregor’s role that is lost in
translation. He explains that a term
used to refer to Gregor in the story’s original German was
“Ungeziefer,” a word that has a
history of connotations varying from “unclean animal,” to
“louse,” to “cockroach” and other
such undesirable creatures (p. 11). Regardless of the
translation, it is clear that Gregor is simply
not wanted.
Sadly, Gregor’s own internal dialogue parallels how his family
talks to and about him. In
fact, one might say that he has internalized the voices of his
family and the clerk. One example
of this includes his reaction upon realizing he was an insect. As
mentioned earlier, Gregor was
not concerned about finding a way to get his human body back;
rather, he was concerned about
whether or not he was late to work. Even after the clerk’s visit,
Gregor is keen on finding a way

to get to work: “If, however, they took everything calmly he
would still have no reason to be
upset, and if he hurried he really could be at the station for
eight o’clock” (Kafka, 1915). Gregor
plans for the family’s future even though they do not; in fact,
they take for granted that they will
be provided for and “had so much to worry about at present that
they had lost sight of any
thought for the future. Gregor, though, did think about the
future” (Kafka 1915). Though one
might first think it is good of Gregor to work so hard for his
family, Gregor has completely lost
his own identity in doing so. He simply sees himself as a means
to their welfare, just as they do.
Author
Comment [15]: This topicsentence
introduces the third and final point
mentioned in the essay map.
Ironically, it is after Gregor morphs into an insect (or “un-
thing,” as would be a closer
translation of the novella’s German title), that Gregor begins to
demonstrate more human

qualities. One early example of this occurs near the end of the
first section as the chief clerk is
about to leave. After rushing out of his room in an effort to
appease the clerk, Gregor sees his
mother look at him and briefly forgets about the one thing that
had previously consumed his
entire life: “’Mother, Mother,’ said Gregor gently, looking up at
her. He had completely
forgotten the chief clerk for the moment…” (Kafka, 1915). As
the story progresses, we read less
and less of Gregor worrying about his job and more about him
thinking of his own emotions.
Reflecting upon his sister’s efforts to leave him food, Gregor
wishes he were able to share his
gratitude with her. The narrator laments, “If Gregor had only
been able to speak to his sister and
thank her for all that she had to do for him it would have been
easier for him to bear it; but as it
was it caused him pain” (Kafka, 1915). This Gregor is quite
different from the work-obsessed
Gregor at the beginning of the story. Gregor shows
thoughtfulness for his parents even though
they do not demonstrate care for him as his sister does: “Out of
consideration for his parents,

Gregor wanted to avoid being seen at the window during the
day” (Kafka, 1915). These are not
the thoughts of an unfeeling, monstrous vermin but those of a
caring, considerate brother and
son.
Gregor’s change from a travelling salesman to an insect in
Kafka’s The Metamorphosis
was not truly a transformation; in fact, by studying his room,
his relationships and this thinking,
it becomes clear that Gregor did not change at all. The true
metamorphosis happens after
Gregor’s physical transformation. Turning into a bug made
Gregor realize what was most
important in his life: not his job, but his human relationships.
Sadly, his family is not able to
reciprocate his feelings of love and concern. At the close of
The Metamorphosis, it is not
Author
Comment [16]: Here and throughout the
essay you’ll notice that a variety of
sentence
structures are used. This helps to retain
reader interest and more effectively
communicate ideas.
Author
Comment [17]: This is another way to

include quotations: add an introductory
phrase. A quotation should never stand on
its own as a sentence. Using a variety of
methods to integrate quotations will
demonstrate your own control of the
material.
Author
Comment [18]: Conclusion restates the
thesis. It also reminds us of a significant
and
ironic quality of Gregor’s transformation.
Gregor, but his family who have morphed into unfeeling
creatures, while Gregor is the most
human of them all.
References
Kafka, F. (1915). The Metamorphosis (D. Wyllie, Trans.).
Retrieved from Project Gutenberg:

https://www.gutenberg.org/files/5200/5200-h/5200-h.htm
Ryan, S. (2007) Franz Kafka’s Die Verwandlung:
Transformation, Metaphor, and the Perils of
Assimilation. Seminar: A Journal of Germanic Studies, 43(1),
1-18.
Sokel, W.H. (1983). From Marx to Myth: The Structure and
Function of Self-Alienation in
Kafka’s Metamorphosis. Literary Review, 26(4), 485-496.

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