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Writing Effective
Personal Statements
Professor Gary C Wood, Academic Director
Dr Sarah M C Peers, Head of Academic Skills Centre
gary.wood@nmite.ac.uk | @GC_Wood
www.garycwood.uk
What is Personal Statement?
• A self-written statement
• Articulates your skills, qualities, interests, motivations
and ambitions
• Shows and evidences your capabilities
• Explains your interest and suitability for an opportunity
• An important part of most recruitment and selection
processes – used to evaluate candidates.
Why write a Personal Statement?
• Personal statements are a common part of the
(application) process for:
• University places
• Advertised jobs
• Training programmes with companies
• Introducing yourself on social media, e.g. LinkedIn
• Or in a CV…
• An opportunity to present and ‘sell’ your profile
and to make your case for selection.
What makes a good statement?
• What do you think makes a good personal statement?
• Write down all your ideas
• Talk to the person next to you, if you possible
• 5 minutes.
Content
• What to include:
• Who you are
• Your interest in the opportunity – why this specific
opportunity?
• Your skills and experience aligned with the opportunity
• Your strengths, interests and motivations
• Your aspirations and what you can bring to the opportunity
• Relevant personal background(e.g. personal/learning
difficulties, additional responsibilities, unexpected barriers).
Content
• Start by understanding the context
• Who is the reader of your statement?
• What can you find out about them?
• What is their role within the organisation?
• What do you think the process to read your application
involves?
• What is the reader looking for? – put yourself in their
shoes (if you were them, what would you be wanting to
see?)
Content
• Look for keywords and key points to include
• Identify keywords in the advert/specification
• E.g. skills, experience, qualifications required, etc.
• Use those keywords in your statement
• This makes it easier for you reader.
Blow your own trumpet!
• “To blow your own trumpet” = to talk about yourself or your
achievements in a way that shows that you are proud
• Being asked to write a personal statement is an invitation
to blow your own trumpet!
• Nobody else will do it for you
• What you tell the reader is all they are likely to know about
you at the time they are reading
• The statement is for you to convince the reader that you
are the person he/she is looking for!
• But: avoid boasting. Giving evidence helps you do that…
Evidence
• Avoid just saying you’ve got a skill, experience or
interest
• Show the reader, by giving examples as evidence
• Imagine your reader has a stamp that says ‘So what?’,
and you are trying to avoid him/her using it
• The STAR method can help…
STAR
S Situation
When I worked on a team project to develop
and sell a new product,
T Task
my role was to work on marketing messages
and requirements for the new product.
A Action
I carried out market research, including
running focus groups to find out what
features would be useful to users.
R Result
The team was delighted with my research as
it helped to focus development on one
option.
• Tell me about a time when you had to work effectively
in a team.
S Situation
T Task
A Action
R Result
Have a go…
Structure
• Keep to the purpose
• Include what is relevant to the organisation and the
opportunity you are applying to.
• Tell a story about yourself…
• Beginning – an introduction to you
• Middle – key messages, with evidence
• End – link to the opportunity
• Write in full sentences and in a formal style
• Use your own words, weaving in the keywords
• Keep it succinct (usually 400-1000 words, maximum).
What a good statement looks like
• Well-written – grammatical, error-free
• Relevant to the opportunity (remember the keywords)
• Interesting for the reader
• Authentic, and about you (not your team)!
• Emotive, conveying your passion
• Evidenced, demonstrating:
• real interest in the opportunity – what attracts you to it?
• your strengths that makes you good for the opportunity.
The statement represents you
• Is it written sloppily?
• You are sloppy…
• Does not seem relevant to the job/application?
• You have not thought about what is relevant.
• Is it boring and too long?
• You are not interesting.
• Is it not credible and a bit too amazing?
• You are not believable.
• Does it not say much?
• You have nothing to say.
The statement represents you
• Is it carefully written and interesting?
• You are careful and interesting
• Is it to the point and relevant?
• You are relevant
• Do you sound human and likeable?
• We want you on our team
• Does it convey excitement in the opportunity?
• You will make the most of the opportunity.
• Is it about your story?
• That’s what we want to hear!
Examples
I have an good attention to detial
and I responsibility and work really
hard all all the time.
I have a good attention to detail. I
am conscientious and responsible.
I have not been able to achieve
good scores in my exams because
of the bad teaching at the school.
I was disappointed in my exam
results and have learnt that I prefer
a different way of learning.
I was the best student ever at my
school.
I have received several awards at
school for my academic
performance.
Examples
The programme at NMITE looks
very interesting to me.
I am particularly interested in the
learning by doing approach at
NMITE.
I have always liked tinkering with
building toys and taking things
apart.
One of my hobbies is Lego building
and I am currently trying to model
the perfect city in Lego. I am also
pulling apart a sewing machine to
see how it works.
My ambitions are in engineering
because I am interested in making
the world a better place.
I would like to become an engineer,
because I want to work on better
energy solutions for everyone.
Six steps to a good statement…
1. Explore and brainstorm
• Get the keywords
• Note down the key things you need to include and the
evidence for each
2. Organise your ideas into a beginning, middle and end
• Write bullet points for each section
• Check the bullets against the opportunity – is everything
covered?
3. Draft the statement into full sentences and
paragraphs.
Six steps to a good statement…
4. Check and revise the statement
• Think about your reader – is it telling them what they want
to know?
• Is it covering everything important?
• Is there anywhere that the reader could use the ‘So
what?’ stamp?
5. Get it proofread, and ask for feedback
• Ask a teacher or colleague to offer you feedback
• Get somebody to proofread for you
6. Finalise and submit the statement.
More hints and tips
• Read any directions, or the job specification carefully
• Word limits? Prompts? Keywords/points?
• Check for any other guidance:
• UCAS webpages provides a lot of guidance
• Large international companies often have guidance on
websites
• Check LinkedIn and other professional sites for ideas
• Attend open days or careers events – and ask questions
• Share your draft personal statements
• With people who know you well
• With careers advisers and mentors for guidance.
What makes a good statement?
• What do you think makes a good personal statement?
• What were your ideas earlier?
• Do you still agree with them?
• Would you add anything else?
Summary
• Be authentic – a personal statement is your story
• Be relevant – look at the context, choose keywords
and key requirements
• Be clear about your motivations – what attracts you to
the opportunity
• Give strong evidence through examples – use the
STAR technique to help you
• Check guidelines and get help from others, especially
with proofreading.
Some additional resources
• Target Careers: How to structure your UCAS personal
statement,
• UCAS: How to write a UCAS undergraduate personal
statement
• Indeed: 16 Winning Personal Statement Examples (And
Why They Work)
• Grammarly: How to Write a Powerful Personal
Statement
Writing Effective
Personal Statements
Professor Gary C Wood, Academic Director
Dr Sarah M C Peers, Head of Academic Skills Centre
gary.wood@nmite.ac.uk | @GC_Wood
www.garycwood.uk

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Writing Effective Personal Statements

  • 1. Writing Effective Personal Statements Professor Gary C Wood, Academic Director Dr Sarah M C Peers, Head of Academic Skills Centre gary.wood@nmite.ac.uk | @GC_Wood www.garycwood.uk
  • 2. What is Personal Statement? • A self-written statement • Articulates your skills, qualities, interests, motivations and ambitions • Shows and evidences your capabilities • Explains your interest and suitability for an opportunity • An important part of most recruitment and selection processes – used to evaluate candidates.
  • 3. Why write a Personal Statement? • Personal statements are a common part of the (application) process for: • University places • Advertised jobs • Training programmes with companies • Introducing yourself on social media, e.g. LinkedIn • Or in a CV… • An opportunity to present and ‘sell’ your profile and to make your case for selection.
  • 4. What makes a good statement? • What do you think makes a good personal statement? • Write down all your ideas • Talk to the person next to you, if you possible • 5 minutes.
  • 5. Content • What to include: • Who you are • Your interest in the opportunity – why this specific opportunity? • Your skills and experience aligned with the opportunity • Your strengths, interests and motivations • Your aspirations and what you can bring to the opportunity • Relevant personal background(e.g. personal/learning difficulties, additional responsibilities, unexpected barriers).
  • 6. Content • Start by understanding the context • Who is the reader of your statement? • What can you find out about them? • What is their role within the organisation? • What do you think the process to read your application involves? • What is the reader looking for? – put yourself in their shoes (if you were them, what would you be wanting to see?)
  • 7. Content • Look for keywords and key points to include • Identify keywords in the advert/specification • E.g. skills, experience, qualifications required, etc. • Use those keywords in your statement • This makes it easier for you reader.
  • 8. Blow your own trumpet! • “To blow your own trumpet” = to talk about yourself or your achievements in a way that shows that you are proud • Being asked to write a personal statement is an invitation to blow your own trumpet! • Nobody else will do it for you • What you tell the reader is all they are likely to know about you at the time they are reading • The statement is for you to convince the reader that you are the person he/she is looking for! • But: avoid boasting. Giving evidence helps you do that…
  • 9. Evidence • Avoid just saying you’ve got a skill, experience or interest • Show the reader, by giving examples as evidence • Imagine your reader has a stamp that says ‘So what?’, and you are trying to avoid him/her using it • The STAR method can help…
  • 10. STAR S Situation When I worked on a team project to develop and sell a new product, T Task my role was to work on marketing messages and requirements for the new product. A Action I carried out market research, including running focus groups to find out what features would be useful to users. R Result The team was delighted with my research as it helped to focus development on one option.
  • 11. • Tell me about a time when you had to work effectively in a team. S Situation T Task A Action R Result Have a go…
  • 12. Structure • Keep to the purpose • Include what is relevant to the organisation and the opportunity you are applying to. • Tell a story about yourself… • Beginning – an introduction to you • Middle – key messages, with evidence • End – link to the opportunity • Write in full sentences and in a formal style • Use your own words, weaving in the keywords • Keep it succinct (usually 400-1000 words, maximum).
  • 13. What a good statement looks like • Well-written – grammatical, error-free • Relevant to the opportunity (remember the keywords) • Interesting for the reader • Authentic, and about you (not your team)! • Emotive, conveying your passion • Evidenced, demonstrating: • real interest in the opportunity – what attracts you to it? • your strengths that makes you good for the opportunity.
  • 14. The statement represents you • Is it written sloppily? • You are sloppy… • Does not seem relevant to the job/application? • You have not thought about what is relevant. • Is it boring and too long? • You are not interesting. • Is it not credible and a bit too amazing? • You are not believable. • Does it not say much? • You have nothing to say.
  • 15. The statement represents you • Is it carefully written and interesting? • You are careful and interesting • Is it to the point and relevant? • You are relevant • Do you sound human and likeable? • We want you on our team • Does it convey excitement in the opportunity? • You will make the most of the opportunity. • Is it about your story? • That’s what we want to hear!
  • 16. Examples I have an good attention to detial and I responsibility and work really hard all all the time. I have a good attention to detail. I am conscientious and responsible. I have not been able to achieve good scores in my exams because of the bad teaching at the school. I was disappointed in my exam results and have learnt that I prefer a different way of learning. I was the best student ever at my school. I have received several awards at school for my academic performance.
  • 17. Examples The programme at NMITE looks very interesting to me. I am particularly interested in the learning by doing approach at NMITE. I have always liked tinkering with building toys and taking things apart. One of my hobbies is Lego building and I am currently trying to model the perfect city in Lego. I am also pulling apart a sewing machine to see how it works. My ambitions are in engineering because I am interested in making the world a better place. I would like to become an engineer, because I want to work on better energy solutions for everyone.
  • 18. Six steps to a good statement… 1. Explore and brainstorm • Get the keywords • Note down the key things you need to include and the evidence for each 2. Organise your ideas into a beginning, middle and end • Write bullet points for each section • Check the bullets against the opportunity – is everything covered? 3. Draft the statement into full sentences and paragraphs.
  • 19. Six steps to a good statement… 4. Check and revise the statement • Think about your reader – is it telling them what they want to know? • Is it covering everything important? • Is there anywhere that the reader could use the ‘So what?’ stamp? 5. Get it proofread, and ask for feedback • Ask a teacher or colleague to offer you feedback • Get somebody to proofread for you 6. Finalise and submit the statement.
  • 20. More hints and tips • Read any directions, or the job specification carefully • Word limits? Prompts? Keywords/points? • Check for any other guidance: • UCAS webpages provides a lot of guidance • Large international companies often have guidance on websites • Check LinkedIn and other professional sites for ideas • Attend open days or careers events – and ask questions • Share your draft personal statements • With people who know you well • With careers advisers and mentors for guidance.
  • 21. What makes a good statement? • What do you think makes a good personal statement? • What were your ideas earlier? • Do you still agree with them? • Would you add anything else?
  • 22. Summary • Be authentic – a personal statement is your story • Be relevant – look at the context, choose keywords and key requirements • Be clear about your motivations – what attracts you to the opportunity • Give strong evidence through examples – use the STAR technique to help you • Check guidelines and get help from others, especially with proofreading.
  • 23. Some additional resources • Target Careers: How to structure your UCAS personal statement, • UCAS: How to write a UCAS undergraduate personal statement • Indeed: 16 Winning Personal Statement Examples (And Why They Work) • Grammarly: How to Write a Powerful Personal Statement
  • 24. Writing Effective Personal Statements Professor Gary C Wood, Academic Director Dr Sarah M C Peers, Head of Academic Skills Centre gary.wood@nmite.ac.uk | @GC_Wood www.garycwood.uk