2nd draft of a short film about a psycho

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Dan Menear
Original Screenplay

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INT.BATHROOM.DAY
Introduce Patrick
Patrick sits on the edge of the bed, staring into camera.
Expressionless, he is wearing his boxers and holding his
hands together
It cuts to Patrick in his bathroom, he splashes some hot
water over his face, again expressionless.
PATRICK (V/O)
Every morning when i wake up i devote
my time to washing my face. I use a
deep pore scrub which i wash away with
hot water.Next I use a strip to remove
and black or whiteheads that could of
formulated. I then splash my face with
cold water to close my pores. Next i
have a clean shave followed up by some
moisturising lotion, so my skin
appears youthful and not dried out.
INT.KITCHEN.DAY
We see a montage of Patrick having a cigarette and a coffee,
whilst making & eating breakfast.
INT. BEDROOM
Patrick lies in bed whilst listening to Classical music. Eyes
open staring at the ceiling. Patrick V/O whilst lying in bed.
Feeling invisible/ His urges about killing people are
explained
INT. BEDROOM
Patrick decides to get ready for tonight, pulls out a
briefcase underneath his bed. He put in the code, and flicks
open his box of horrors. Little trinkets he would of
collected and his choice of weapons, there is a flick knife,
some rusty piano wire, a hammer and a old scalpel with dried
blood on it. Patrick picks up the scalpel and admires it
smiling
PATRICK
(V/O) I did quite like McMittens,
shame really...
EXT. GARDEN

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Cut to a low angle shot of Patrick stabbing something we
can't see, blood is spraying on to his face and we can see he
is enjoying it. The high pitch screams and squeals of a cat
is heard off screen.
INT. BEDROOM
Cut back to Patrick in his bedroom choosing his weapon, he
puts down the scalpel and picks up the hammer. He closes the
briefcase and slides it back under his bed.
INT. HALLWAY
Patrick is tucking in his laces to the side of his shoes, he
never ties them.f
EMILY
Hi Patrick! What you doing?
PATRICK
(V/O) My annoying sister is stressing
about tonight
EMILY
Are you out tonight?
PATRICK
Hey Emily, yeah just popping off now
but don't worry about it ill be back
for tea!
EMILY
Thanks Patrick, your the best, see ya
later
(V/O) I wonder what she would look
like if I kicked her teeth down her
throat.
Emily smiles and watches Patrick walk out the door.
EXT. AFT. TOP OF PRIMROSE HILL PARK
Patrick sits on a bench on Primrose Hill, he is chewing off
his finger nails to trim them and is being meticulous about
it. He lays out the strips of nails on the benches in a line.
PATRICK
(V/O) I didn't expect it to take this
long to find someone.

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Patrick observes a man walk past with a dog.
PATRICK
(V/O) I like the younger ones, there's
something about taking a life that
hasn't run it's course yet...it is so
satisfying.
We can see time passes, the lighting is now darker and the
street lamps in the park are now on.
We see a young lad walking through the park, headphones in.
He catches Patricks eye. Patrick smiles and stands. The man
stops to light a cigarette, he is lit by the street lamp.
The lighter isn't striking a flame and the man is trying
relentlessly to light his cigarette.
Patrick decides to make his move, and begins to run down the
hill towards the young man, eventually coming to a stop in a
state of panic in front of him.
Patrick comes to the door of his house, he extends his jaw as
if to stretch it out as its sore from the blow he received.
Patrick slides his key through the door, and turns it slowly.
INT. HALLWAY
We can hear some hysterics from inside the living room. It
sounds like Emily's boyfriend Daniel has arrived and is
clearly shouting about something.
EMILY
Can you calm down please!
DANIEL
I can't fucking calm down! Are you not
hearing what I said!
Patrick moves through the hallway towards the noisy living
room, there is an expression on his face that shows an
unwillingness to put up with his brother.
Patrick starts to open the door, as the arguing continues.

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INT. LIVING ROOM
EMILY
What were you doing in the park!
Daniel is sitting on the couch head in hands facing away from
Patrick, Emily is sitting on the couch arm comforting him.
Patrick slowly edges into the room, observing the situation.
Emily turns and notices Patrick, she stands up immediately
and turns to Patrick.
EMILY
Pat, where have you been?
PATRICK
I have been o-
Daniel has now turned his head towards Patrick, Patrick
clocks him immediately and realises it's the young man who
escaped his murder attempt.
They lock eyes and Daniel stares shocked, Patrick also in
shock.
Fade to black.
(ALTERNATIVE ENDING BELOW)
They lock eyes and Daniel stares shocked, Patrick also in
shock.
Fade to black.
Fade up on a CU of Patricks face, staring down, we see drips
of blood roll down his face as he pants, exhausted.
The camera begins to track out from Patrick and we see him
standing above the dead body of Daniel & his sister.
Feeling relieved and a sense of joy Patrick is left smiling.