2. ‘MOBILE HOME’ EVALUATION.
We presented ‘Mobile Home’ to our peers in
the class in order to receive feedback on
our documentary.
We received a range of positive and
negative feedback and now we are aware of
how to improve and make our final
documentary better.
3. POSITIVE FEEDBACK.
“Good use of archive footage” – The use of our
archive footage was good because it linked to our
documentary topic of ‘mobile phones.’
4. POSITIVE FEEDBACK.
“Good music choice.”
“The soundtrack worked.” – Our music choice of
Telephone by Lady Gaga ft Beyonce was a good
decision because the song is about telephones
which are the topic of our documentary.
5. POSITIVE FEEDBACK.
“The intro and credits were original” – Our intro and
credits were good because they fitted into the mise-
en-scene of mobile phones and matched the
documentary topic well. They were also unique as
none of the other groups did their intro and credits
this way.
6. POSITIVE FEEDBACK.
“Good use of cutaways.” – Our cutaways were
good because they matched the documentary topic
and demonstrated how people use their mobile
phones daily.
7. CRITICISM/HOW TO IMPROVE.
“Fade the music in and out.”
“Adjust the volume so that everything can be heard.”
“The music was very loud compared to the
interviewee.”
We had a lot of problems with the volume/music in our
documentary. The cuts from the music to the audio of
the interviewee did not flow because the music was
very loud in comparison to the volume of the
interviewee. Also, sometimes you could not hear the
interviewee as she was too quiet.
In order to improve this for my final documentary I will
ensure the interviewee speaks clear and loud and I
will make the background music quiet and I will fade it
in and out instead of cutting it off/on.
8. CRITICISM/HOW TO IMPROVE.
“The mise-en-scene did not work, it was irrelevant.”
“The art in the background may be distracting the
audience from the interviewee.”
The art we decided to do our interview in front of
did not fit in with the documentaries mise-en-scene.
It had nothing to do with mobile phones and
possibly distracted audience members from
focusing on the interviewee because it stood out so
much.
In order to improve this, when I film my final
documentary I will ensure my interview mise-en-
scene links with my documentary topic.
9. CRITICISM/HOW TO IMPROVE.
“The interview angles aren’t correct.”
“The interviewee’s answers don’t fully explain the
question.”
There was a few problems with our interview such
as the camera angles not being correct and the
questions not being fully answered.
To ensure I improve this, when it comes to my final
documentary I will make sure I position my camera
correctly and make sure the interviewee repeats the
question in their answer.
10. CRITICISM/HOW TO IMPROVE.
“It would be even better if it was longer.”
My documentary was only a minute long. To
improve this, when I film my final documentary I will
capture more footage to ensure that it is longer.
