DRAFT NUMBER 1
SCRIPT
JOHN LEGEND – UNDER THE STARS
H.L. MCDONAGH
A. A. EL-GHARBAOUI
B. J. GOLDSTONE
J. B. KABANGO
21ST NOVEMBER 2016
Eddie -(ADAM)
Conor - (CHARLES SON)
Charles - (BEN)
Malcolm - (JOEY)
Vanessa - (HANNAH)
Scene one
EXT: leading to INT:
The large front garden, dull weather, CHARLES is followed by the
camera as he walks up his driveway into the front door of his
house. He is in a neutral mood, just a normal day for him
returning home from his local shops.
CHARLES Makes his was into the living room of his house,
furnished with brown sofas and other dull colours.
CHARLES
(M.S)Walks into the living room to greet his wife.
VANESSA
(C.U)Sitting on the sofa in living room, with another man in
CHARLES house.
CHARLES
(C.U.) He has a shocked expression on his face. He looks at
KARL. Then his expression turn from shocked to angry.
KARL
Looks at VANESSA not knowing what to do. There is a sense of
tension in the room.
CHARLES
Starts shouting at VANESSA and KARL. (E.C.U)He bites his jaw
down in anger and with his arm down, (C.U)squeezes his fists
together.
VANESSA
(E.S)Gets up tries to calm CHARLES down ‘IT'S NOT WHAT IT LOOKS
LIKE’
CHARLES
Pushes off VANESSA. Starts a fight with KARL. After a short
squabble, he punches him across the face and runs out the house.
(C.U)
FADE OUT TO BLACK
SCENE 2
EXT:
FADE IN
Cold, frosty morning. (C.U) CHARLES everyday routine, he runs
round the lake with his business partner.
We'll find a love to hold our hand through the cold
We'll find an angel lying out in the snow
We'll see a light to lead us all the way home and
Wherever we go, we will know.;]
CHARLES
The first flashback comes for about 5 seconds of when they were
on the first date having a meal. Then you still see him running
for a second then another memory comes for 5 seconds when they
both walk holding hands. About to have the baby. (L.S.) ( Benji
is getting tired) Then the last memory comes when they were both
looking up at the stars together.
Here we are, under the stars
Here we are, under the stars
Heaven is not so far
Heaven is not so far
Heaven is not so far
CUT TO:
CHARLES AND MALCOLM (fairlop waters)
EXT.Charles and Malcolm go for a jog around the lake
(L.S.) (M.S.) and a (C.U.) of Charles feeling all dizzy and
they go and sit on a bench.
They both talk about what Charles is going through and you just
see a few seconds of them talking and then saying goodbye, then
it skips to the next beautiful sunny day.
CHARLES
Let's raise a toast to all the good days to come
Let's celebrate the season, come everyone
Let's save a kiss for us when the night is done
Oh my love, I'll keep you warm
Buying a gun.
CHARLES
(INT LEADING TO EXT) Charles coming home from work with his gun.
CHARLES
Says goodbye to his son. (C.U)
CHARLES
Leaves the house walks down the hill into a field.
CHARLES
Takes the gun out of his pocket
BANG - sound of the gun
CHARLES
(slow motion) he falls to the floor.
Laying there looking up at the stars. He dies.

Draft 1 scriot

  • 1.
    DRAFT NUMBER 1 SCRIPT JOHNLEGEND – UNDER THE STARS H.L. MCDONAGH A. A. EL-GHARBAOUI B. J. GOLDSTONE J. B. KABANGO 21ST NOVEMBER 2016 Eddie -(ADAM) Conor - (CHARLES SON) Charles - (BEN) Malcolm - (JOEY) Vanessa - (HANNAH)
  • 2.
    Scene one EXT: leadingto INT: The large front garden, dull weather, CHARLES is followed by the camera as he walks up his driveway into the front door of his house. He is in a neutral mood, just a normal day for him returning home from his local shops. CHARLES Makes his was into the living room of his house, furnished with brown sofas and other dull colours. CHARLES (M.S)Walks into the living room to greet his wife. VANESSA (C.U)Sitting on the sofa in living room, with another man in CHARLES house. CHARLES (C.U.) He has a shocked expression on his face. He looks at KARL. Then his expression turn from shocked to angry. KARL Looks at VANESSA not knowing what to do. There is a sense of tension in the room. CHARLES Starts shouting at VANESSA and KARL. (E.C.U)He bites his jaw down in anger and with his arm down, (C.U)squeezes his fists together. VANESSA (E.S)Gets up tries to calm CHARLES down ‘IT'S NOT WHAT IT LOOKS LIKE’ CHARLES
  • 3.
    Pushes off VANESSA.Starts a fight with KARL. After a short squabble, he punches him across the face and runs out the house. (C.U) FADE OUT TO BLACK SCENE 2 EXT: FADE IN Cold, frosty morning. (C.U) CHARLES everyday routine, he runs round the lake with his business partner. We'll find a love to hold our hand through the cold We'll find an angel lying out in the snow We'll see a light to lead us all the way home and Wherever we go, we will know.;] CHARLES The first flashback comes for about 5 seconds of when they were on the first date having a meal. Then you still see him running for a second then another memory comes for 5 seconds when they both walk holding hands. About to have the baby. (L.S.) ( Benji is getting tired) Then the last memory comes when they were both looking up at the stars together. Here we are, under the stars Here we are, under the stars Heaven is not so far Heaven is not so far Heaven is not so far CUT TO: CHARLES AND MALCOLM (fairlop waters)
  • 4.
    EXT.Charles and Malcolmgo for a jog around the lake (L.S.) (M.S.) and a (C.U.) of Charles feeling all dizzy and they go and sit on a bench. They both talk about what Charles is going through and you just see a few seconds of them talking and then saying goodbye, then it skips to the next beautiful sunny day. CHARLES Let's raise a toast to all the good days to come Let's celebrate the season, come everyone Let's save a kiss for us when the night is done Oh my love, I'll keep you warm Buying a gun. CHARLES (INT LEADING TO EXT) Charles coming home from work with his gun. CHARLES Says goodbye to his son. (C.U) CHARLES
  • 5.
    Leaves the housewalks down the hill into a field. CHARLES Takes the gun out of his pocket BANG - sound of the gun CHARLES (slow motion) he falls to the floor. Laying there looking up at the stars. He dies.