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1. What is the primary idea of the content in the articles?
It is organized that headings, brief explanation of summary and instructions of five steps. Headings are
written for reader easy to understand the content. Brief explanations are explained summary of whole
idea that is brief procedures, advantages and attention when you use the cell phone in the cars. Instruction
is described the detail of each steps.
2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document (articles) clearly represent the idea
that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your comments.
I think that it is communicated to every individual section. Heading represents the way of using cell
phone when you are driving car. In instruction, every section describes procedures step by step that from
what you should do at first to what you should do finally and it is connected reasonably.
4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it?



5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good?

About the writing is good article. Because, Cell Phone use when driving is too Banning. Today, it is
under the ban in Japan. This is because of very dangerous. drivers should get a application on the cell
phone that will restrict its use while driving. I think this application reduces accident.


6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected?

I think it is not errors that need to be corrected. But, these articles are not perfect. Because
these articles is not easy to read. For example, small size character, not impact, and not line break.
These important writing article of easy reading. I think this miss is similar errors.


7. What specific suggestions for improving the articles can you make?

These articles should become clear in what they want to insist on. Because, I hard understand claim of
these articles. I think these articles advertise many people. Therefore, these articles need main assertion.
For that reason, it needs more information. I think if these articles have more information, it is better
article.


8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar document and how
this author authored it (as you see it in the link).

First, our group don’t have information of its articles yet. This author has information in America. This
is advantage. Next, we will make main topic. This topic will be top in our article. Herewith, our article
becomes better understanding. Last, we use graph. The graph will be made easy to see.
These is differences.
 I think Why must not it do with hands-free in some states. Hands-free is current in Japan. And, when
 stopped cars are admit using of Cell Phones in Cars. For example, wait traffic light  wait human and
 be on a break. We hope these thing button down. To keep the rules.

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  • 1. 1. What is the primary idea of the content in the articles? It is organized that headings, brief explanation of summary and instructions of five steps. Headings are written for reader easy to understand the content. Brief explanations are explained summary of whole idea that is brief procedures, advantages and attention when you use the cell phone in the cars. Instruction is described the detail of each steps. 2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document (articles) clearly represent the idea that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your comments. I think that it is communicated to every individual section. Heading represents the way of using cell phone when you are driving car. In instruction, every section describes procedures step by step that from what you should do at first to what you should do finally and it is connected reasonably. 4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it? 5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good? About the writing is good article. Because, Cell Phone use when driving is too Banning. Today, it is under the ban in Japan. This is because of very dangerous. drivers should get a application on the cell phone that will restrict its use while driving. I think this application reduces accident. 6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected? I think it is not errors that need to be corrected. But, these articles are not perfect. Because these articles is not easy to read. For example, small size character, not impact, and not line break. These important writing article of easy reading. I think this miss is similar errors. 7. What specific suggestions for improving the articles can you make? These articles should become clear in what they want to insist on. Because, I hard understand claim of these articles. I think these articles advertise many people. Therefore, these articles need main assertion. For that reason, it needs more information. I think if these articles have more information, it is better article. 8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar document and how this author authored it (as you see it in the link). First, our group don’t have information of its articles yet. This author has information in America. This is advantage. Next, we will make main topic. This topic will be top in our article. Herewith, our article becomes better understanding. Last, we use graph. The graph will be made easy to see. These is differences. I think Why must not it do with hands-free in some states. Hands-free is current in Japan. And, when stopped cars are admit using of Cell Phones in Cars. For example, wait traffic light  wait human and be on a break. We hope these thing button down. To keep the rules.