3. THE TREATMENT
1. The Working Title.
3. Tagline.
2. Length of film.
4. Introduction to key
characters.
5. Synopsis.
7. Form and style.
6. Target Audience.
8. Marketplace.
4. (STORYBOARD)KEY
SCENES
Scene 3:
This scene is about Abbie, our protagonist, at
work, as a office-supply sales-woman.
She is declined by her clients, she is feeling
ineffective, as her job is doing nothing for her
life.
Scene 7:
This scene is about Abbie receiving her acceptance letter from
a theatre that she auditioned for. She is overwhelmed as her
roommate mistook her post for her own, so Abbie was
surprised to have this letter.
5. (SCRIPT)KEY SCENES
Scene 2:
• Roommate: Hello
• Abbie: (takes out headphone) Morning
• Roommate: (Getting some breakfast) what are you doing
today?
• Abbie: Working (pause) Roommate I hate it, I’m going to
quit.
• Roommate: NO!!! Abbie no don’t quit, what about mate’s
rates?
• Abbie: You have everything I sell and you never use them,
you don’t even have an office job.
• Roommate: …..
• Abbie: I need to get a proper, well-paid job, something that
challenges me. And so should you.
• Roommate: (in shock) I have a real job, Abbie.
• Abbie: Freelance piano playing to old people, doesn’t
count.
• Roommate: (long pause) I know you’re right, but John
Williams hasn’t got in touch yet.
• Abbie: You need to build up your CV. Even your piano
repertoire is just Jurassic Park.
• Roommate: Just Jurassic Park! Film music composition is
lost and forgotten art.
• Abbie: Update your CV. John Williams is more likely to get
in touch with someone who hasn’t had a year in … training
five years ago.
Scene 7:
Possibly an add on, to when she opened her letter.
• Roommate: So, what happens now? Do you have to re-audition?
• Abbie: No, why would I have to re-audition?
• Roommate: To get a role.
• Abbie: I have a role.
• Roommate: *reads letter*, ‘we are delighted to offer you the part of dancer #29’.
• Abbie: Yes, you’re right that’s what my part is (sarcastically), I have quit my job on the whim
that maybe Broadway might pick me up on that. No, the main role is real.
• Roommate: When do you start?
• Abbie: Soon for rehearsing, it’s a tour of the show, so it’ll run for a while. (contemplates)
Hopefully.
• Roommate: A new show is it?
• Abbie: No, it started a few months back in London, but this is the tour, it’s travelling over
Europe first. *reads letter*, ‘if successful, is due to tour around the United States in 2020.’ So,
a couple years till I hit the big states, but I guess Europe will do (sarcastically).’
• Roommate: Yeah right, so when do you move out.
• Abbie: When the tour starts, a few months yet.
• Roommate: I have already rented your room out though… (Joking)
• Abbie: …
6. SAMPLE FOOTAGE
Scene 5:
This is a basic sample of my idea for how I would want Abbie to
enter her audition. This scene would be a montage of Abbie
walking up the stairs, entering the room and performing her
audition.
I want to film her feet so that the suspense is built up, and so we
can see her nervousness through her body language.
8. THE TREATMENT
1. The Working Title.
3. Tagline.
2. Length of film.
4. Introduction to key
characters.
5. Synopsis.
7. Form and style.
6. Target Audience.
8. Marketplace.
9. (STORYBOARD)KEY
SCENES
Scene 4:
This is a short scene which is about Abbie
getting held behind in class for not completing
her work. This scene is significant because I
want the audience to understand that this is
not what she would normally do because he is
principal student and contrast her normal
behaviour.
Scene 6:
This scene is about Abbie’s new friends influencing her to
spread a rumour about Abbie’s old friend. She goes through
with it and then find Anna, crying in the corridor. She explains
to Anna what’s she done and they get in an argument about
everything that’s happened.
10. (SCRIPT)KEY SCENES
Scene 1 (b):
• Abbie: (looks in mirror to
see new hairstyle)
• Anna: Right…
• Abbie: Um…
• Anna: Well…
• Abbie: Right…
• Anna: At least you’ve got
me a distinction in my
coursework.
• Abbie: It’s curly.
• Anna: do you know what
we should do know…
• Abbie: you’re not giving me
a makeover.
• Anna: I am
• (Makeover montage
begins.)
Scene 5:
• Dad: Abbie (to get attention)
• Abbie: (Ignores him)
• Dad: So, I got a call today.
• Abbie: Yeah? (in anticipation)
• Dad: It was the school, they said that you haven’t been handing work in on time,
and your work effort has been (sarcastically tries to remember exactly what the
call said) less than adequate, so you have been given a NUMBER, of detentions.
Care to explain…?
• Abbie: I have fallen a bit behind recently, because of… (trying to think of an
excuse) stuff, you know boyfriends, (looking at him in hope that he would let it
go) Uneven eyeliner (scatters eyesight around the floor to think of something
else) Periods. (squints eyes in anticipation) I don’t want to bore you.
• Dad: Abbie, tell me if there’s a problem, don’t just let it affect your school work.
• Abbie: I don’t have to tell you everything.
• Dad: Not everything. I just…
• Abbie: No dad you don’t understand.
• Dad: understand what you don’t tell me anything. All I know about you is you
come home at stupid o’clock and that you’re failing all your subjects.
• Abbie: I’m not failing.
• Dad: I’m really disappointed.
Scene 1:
• Anna: Do you ever wash your hair?
• Abbie: Anna (in offense)
• Anna: (continues styling hair, getting out scissors)
• Abbie: (in panic) No don’t, I’m not even joking.
• Anna: You have to be a little adventurous, the
more unearthly it looks, the better grades I’ll get.
• Abbie: What, is outlandish in the official criteria?
You’ll get a pass if you do something remotely
regular and nice?
• Anna: (Pause) Yes. (In embarrassment and
seriously). Can you move…?
• Abbie: (moves over to get hair washed out with
her head over the baths and Anna get the shower
head)
• Abbie: Aren’t you supposed to ask me if the
temperature is okay, because it’s not.
• Anna: Only paying customers get that.
• Abbie: Do you want to be a hairdresser Anna?
• Anna: (pause) no. Do you actually want to be a
loser?
• Abbie: What?
• Anna: What?
• Abbie: you know perfectly well that I’m training to
be an accountant.
• Anna: OMG! You should so be an accountant. You
are an ‘A’ star student, nearly got head girl, you
are a shining light in our community.
11. SAMPLE FOOTAGE
Scene 3:
Here is similar to Idea 1.
It’s going to be a scene where we build up the introduction of
‘new’ Abbie. She is going to look different than usual.
I’ve again, video her feet so that her image isn’t given away to
quickly. Also, this shot is trying to develop some interest in the
audience, as they are going to want to see what happens next.
