Slides for Day 20 in EWRT 211

1. EWRT 211
Day 20
Next up… Paper 6!
Let’s finish this!

2. IF YOU SIGNED UP for the Winter EWRT 1A class,
but you have not registered for one of the sections
yet…
We will need to reserve your space by the end of this
week. In order to do so, we need you to tell me
which section you intend to register for.
We will then save you a space only in that section.
These are your options:
EWRT1A.23 CRN #00770 TTh 10:00-12:15PM Malone
EWRT1A.12 CRN #32486 TTh 7:30-9:45AM Palmore
EWRT1A.17 CRN #00756 MW 10:00-12:15PM Palmore
If you need READ 211, this is the one you must register for:
READ 80.01 CRN #35372 TTh 1:30-3:20PM Skager
Need to hear from:
Sam
Sandra
Hussein
Danielle
Eric
Owen

3. Business / Agenda
 Everyone gets 20 points for being
here on time today! Don’t forget
your ghosts!
 House Points
 Portfolio explanation
 Paper 6 overview
 Paper 6 sample essay
 Paper 6: brainstorm, outline,
writing.

4. House Points update! (Through 11/29)
House Previous Points New Points Total
Gryffindor 481 HW I forgot: 4; Bitmoji: 0; 11/20: 85;
11/22: 60; HW through today: 2
632
Huffleclaw 494 HW I forgot: 6; Bitmoji: 10; 11/20: 91;
11/22: 80; HW through today: 0
681
Hufflepuff 547 HW I forgot: 2; Bitmoji: 20; 11/20: 68;
11/22: 60; HW through today: 2
699
Ravenclaw 628 HW I forgot: 10; Bitmoji: 20; 11/20: 85;
11/22: 80; HW through today: 8
831
Ravengryff 532 HW I forgot: 8; Bitmoji: 0; 11/20: 89;
11/22: 80; HW through today: 12
721
Slytherin 501 HW I forgot: 0; Bitmoji: 6; 11/20: 90;
11/22: 60; HW through today: 6
663
BUT… it might not be over quite yet. Stay tuned...

5. EWRT 211 Portfolio
 Remember: in order to pass this
class, you must submit a portfolio
to the English Department and they
will determine whether you can
move on to EWRT 1A.
 Your portfolio is due IN CLASS on
Wednesday, December 6.
 There is no extension for this
deadline.
 Everything in your portfolio must
be submitted as a HARD COPY.
There is no submission via email or
Canvas.
 THREE COMPONENTS of your
portfolio:
1. Paper 6: The Reflective Essay
2. A clean, revised version of
EITHER Paper 2 or Paper 3. (One
take-home essay.)
3. The original version of EITHER
Paper 4 or Paper 5. No revision
allowed. (One in-class essay.)
 You should make your choices to
best illustrate your skills.

6. End-of-quarter portfolio timeline
 Wednesday, Nov 29:
Go over Paper 6 in class.
Brainstorm.
 Sunday, Dec 3:
Paper 2 and Paper 3 Revisions due
by 9 PM on Canvas.
 Monday, Dec 4:
1. Bring Paper 4 and 5 (in-class
essays) to class.
2. Discuss portfolio decisions with
Brian.
3. Discuss Paper 6 draft with Brian.
 Wednesday, Dec 6:
Portfolio due in class. THE END!

7. So let’s talk about Paper 6: The Reflective Essay.
Content:
Write an essay of at least two full pages, explaining both your progress in writing this
quarter and why you are ready to go to EWRT1A. This essay goes in the front of your
portfolio to serve as an introduction to your work for the instructors evaluating the
portfolio.
How to Proceed:
Review all the work you have done for the class. Consider why you chose the essays
in your portfolio and how they show your readiness for EWRT1A. Give specific
examples from these essays to show your improvements.
--Discuss what you have learned in LART 211 or EWRT 211. This might include, for
example, practice in organization, analysis, development, vivid examples,
construction of better sentences, or proofreading.
--Include how your writing has changed as a result of what you have learned in class.
Remember to provide specific evidence for your claims. Use examples from your
writing to support your points.
--What still needs improvement? Write about what you'd still like to work on
concerning your writing. Remember that all of us are still trying to be better writers,
so what are you going to focus on in 1A and beyond?

8. Paper 6, continued:
Audience:
De Anza English Instructors
Format: MLA style
What we're looking for in the reflective essay:
Clear organization
Well-developed, focused paragraphs
Specific examples, details
Well-constructed sentences
Correct grammar and punctuation

9. Paper 6: The Reflective Essay
 Even though it might not be
obvious, this is a thesis-driven
essay.
 What is your thesis? A more specific
version of this claim:
“I learned some things in EWRT 211
and I know I still have some things
to work on, but now I’m ready to
move on to EWRT 1A.”
 I recommend that you discuss
 THREE things you learned, and
 ONE thing that you still need to
improve (and that you will work on
in 1A).
 Things NOT to write about:
 The CONTENT of the course. The
English Department is not interested in
what you learned about Harry Potter or
Hogwarts. They just want to hear about
your writing skills.
 The instructor. Whether you want to
praise me (or criticize me), the
portfolio readers do not care. They are
interested in what you learned, not
how I taught it.
 So what might you talk about?
Let’s brainstorm.

10. Paper 5: Structure
 At least five paragraphs.
 Introduction: what might you put in
your intro? How might you start this
essay?
 Could talk about previous experience
with writing.
 Could talk about your feelings about
writing.
 Could talk about high school and your
experience with writing.
 Could talk about learning English.
 Could talk about your future plans
and how writing fits with them.
 Three body paragraphs about what
you learned.
 Additional body paragraph about
what you still need to work on
(though this could be combined with
the…)
 Conclusion
 The body paragraphs should be PIE
paragraphs.
 What is the POINT of each paragraph?
 But what is the INFORMATION?
 Examples from your own work.
 Seriously: give specific examples
from your papers—especially the
portfolio essays.
 Seriously: QUOTE YOUR OWN WORK.
 Brainstorming activity:
 How might you start your intro?
 What are three things have you
learned?
 What one thing will you work on in
1A?

11. Sample Paper 6
This is an actual student paper (with a few minor edits).
It does some things quite well, but there are some places it could be
better. Keep your eyes open for these.
It’s still Thanksgiving,
right?
As you read, circle or bracket (and label)
the following:
1. MLA style heading.
2. Interesting title.
3. The introductory material. How does the
author start?
4. The thesis. Where is it?
5. For each of the three body paragraphs,
label the
POINT
INFORMATION
EXPLANATION
6. Where does the writer mention the skill
they still want to work on?

12. What do you think of
the title here? Is it
descriptive enough?
Creative enough?
How does the author
introduce us to the topic
of their own writing?
What does she mention?

13. What is the thesis?
Based on the thesis, what do you expect the body
paragraphs to be about? Why?

14. What is the POINT of
paragraph 2?
What kind of
INFORMATION does the
author use to support
that point?
Where does the author
EXPLAIN the
connection between
point and information?
Do you see a smooth
transition from
paragraph 2 to
paragraph 3?

15. What two required
things is the author
doing in the conclusion?
Do you think it makes
sense to do both of
these things in the
same paragraph?
Why or why not?

16. Comparing Paragraph 2 to Paragraph 4
 What is the example that the author
uses to support their point in
paragraph 2?
 What example do they use in
paragraph 4?
 What is a key difference between
these examples?
 Why do you think paragraph 2 uses a
quote and paragraph 4 doesn’t?
 When it doesn’t make sense to use a
quote, what can you do instead to
provide the necessary example?

17. Brainstorm and in-class writing
 Think about your introduction.
What do you want to say about
your relationship to
writing/English? What stories do
you want to tell? You can freewrite
a bit to help you figure it out.
 Come up with a list of things that
you learned in this course. Now
come up with a list of things you
still want to work on in EWRT 1A.
 Write a basic outline of your essay.
 What will you say in your
introduction?
 What is your thesis?
 What three skills will you discuss?
 What do you want to work on?

19. Thursday Night
Evening Headliners (6-9 PM in the VPAC at De Anza)
include:
Embodiment Project!
http://www.embodimentproject.org/
Gina Rene!
https://youtu.be/InZ7o9GLodE
https://youtu.be/BkWRgw4-0aE
Ruby Ibarra!
https://youtu.be/KUXjMtNud5w
https://youtu.be/1J1xAwuwm-U
These are some big names! And the show is FREE!
Come out and enjoy!

20. Homework
 Paper 2 and 3 revisions due on
Canvas by Sunday night, 9 PM.
10 House Point for getting this in on
time.
 Bring your in-class essays to class on
Monday.
 Bring as much of a draft of Paper 6 as
possible to class on Monday.
EVERY person who brings a Paper 6
draft on Monday gets 50 House
Points!!!
 YOU ARE SO CLOSE TO DONE! One
last burst of effort and you got it!