The client liked the student's script concept and execution, finding it thought-provoking in its exploration of themes like gender equality and mental health issues. The client's main feedback was to improve the script structure and clarity of some sections. The student made revisions based on this feedback. The student feels they met the expectations of the client and competition brief by creating an industry-standard script that sparks important conversations and allows audiences to relate to the main character's struggles. The student learned more about the scriptwriting process through completing this project.

1. Lucy Pratt 13u 10/12/18
Unit 11 Evaluation
Overall the Clientlikedthe conceptandthe wayIexecutedthe ideasIhadinmy treatment.My
realisticsettingand themesintriguedthe clientandsparkedconversationsintogenderandsexual
equality,due tomyuse of the word‘they’insteadof usinggenderspecificpronouns. The voice overs
to showanxietyanddepressionalsosparkedthe conversationaboutmentalhealth,especiallyin
teens.The clientmade positive comments aboutthe factthat myscript wasthought-provokingand
was veryrelevanttonow.The maincorrectionsformy scriptfromthe clientwere the wordingand
overall structure of the script.Thisistherefore aweaknesswhenIcame towritingthe script.The
clientsuggested thatthe wordingof some sectionsof myscript couldbe made clearer,forexample
‘boredthensuddenlyremembering’.Ithenchangedthese sectionsusingsuggestionsfromthe
client,forexample,Itookoutthe word‘bored’andusedlanguage inthe stage directionsbeforethis
to suggestboredom,suchasdescriptionsof bodylanguage andfacial expressions. Opposingthis,the
clientlovedthe detailwithinthe descriptioninthe stage directions,throughoutthe scriptalongwith
the use of a voice overto enhance the themesof anxietyanddepression.
I feel thatI have met the expectationsof the client,thisisdue tothe fact that theyexpectedme to
produce an industrystandardscriptfora 10 minute filmtouchingoncorrectandrelevantissueswith
teenagers.ThisiswhatI toldthe clientduringthe pitchandI feel Ihave metthisdue to the fact the
client,duringthe 1:1 meetings,saidthatthe filmisextremelythought-provokinginseveraldifferent
ways. I metthe expectationsandneedsof the brief asonthe ‘Shortof the Week’websitethey
specifythattheylookforfilmsthatmake people think‘aboutsomethinginanew way’,‘stirus
emotionally’andshowgreat‘craftsmanship’.These are all relevanttomyfilm.Myfilmsparks
conversationsaboutpersonal andemotional issues,suchasidentityandmental health,itshowsthe
path an everydayteenagergoesdownwheneffectedbymental healthmakingothersseethe
struggle theycango through,and the use of a naturalisticsettingandthenthe stylisticuse of a voice
overof the character’sthoughtsput togethertwodifferentstylesof filmmaking.Thirdly,Ifeel Ihave
metthe needsof my chosentargetaudience asmyclientmentionedhow itletsthe audience see
howthe character feelsandhowshe dealswitheverydaylife.Mypeers,whoreadthe script,agree
that thisisveryaccurate in termsof the differentcharacters,Samisopposite toStudent1,2 and 3
whichisrealistic,andthe thoughtsSamis havingasmy peerscan relate well tothis.Thisthenmeans
that my targetaudience of strugglersandfamilyandfriendsof thesestrugglerscaneitherrelate to
or learnhowmore about the anxietyanddepressiontheirfamily/friendisdealingwith.
I produced a fullyformattedscript keepinginline withindustry
standards,whichthe client,duringthe third1:1 meetingsuggested
improvementstocomplete.Thiscoupledwiththe shootingscriptI
createdwill assistme whenfilmingandputtingtogethermyfilm.
My scriptisnot referencing/Iam notintendingtouse anything
that isnot my own.Thisisdue to the fact thatI don’twant to have
any copyrightclaimsonmy film.Anexample of myavoidance of
thiswouldbe myuse of ‘newfilm’insteadof namingaspecificfilm.
My intendedfootage,mystudioandfilmlogosare all myownso
these wouldnotbe subjectof copyright. Thisisalsothe case whenitcomesto SlanderandLibel and
RoyaltiesasIwill notuse anything,suchas music,unlessitiscopyrightandroyaltyfree.Ethically,
due to the use of the word‘they’insteadof specificgenderpronouns, Iam notdiscriminating
againstany gender,race or sexuality.The onlyviolence Icouldhave putinmyfilmwouldbe verbal
abuse and if the filmwaslonger/more intenseIwouldalsoconsiderself-harminordertoincrease
awarenessof the people thatdogetto that pointandwho needthe helpbefore theydoso.Children
below10 wouldnotunderstandthe themeswithinthe filmsothisethical issue wouldbe avoidedby
targetingteensandyoungadultsif I wasgoingto marketthisfilm. The onlymajorlegal aspectof my

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Unit 11 Evaluation
filmIwill needtoconsiderwill be the permissionof the actorswithinthe film.If underthe age of
18, whichistrue to the age of mycharacters, I will needtohave the actor andtheirparentssigna
formthat statesthat theyagree to allowforthe childto be filmedandforthe footage tobe usedif it
isto be sentto ‘Shortof the Week’orotherplaces.
In Conclusion,Iamverypleasedwiththe waymyinitial ideasturnedout.Thisisdue tothe fact the
clientcouldclearlysee myintentionsandmyeducational ideasof thisfilmassoonastheyhad read
the script,the clientfeltthatitwasa great way of makingpeople aware of these issues.Thiswasmy
intentionfromthe startwhichisthe biggestreasonwhyIfeel thiswasa success. To improve thisI
fell thatI shouldhave hadformal interviewswiththe peopleIwastakinginspirationfrominorderto
getmore insight,howeverIdo feel myfilmisstill veryaccurate.ThroughoutthisunitIhave learnt
more about the scriptwritingprocessandhow longit actuallytakestoget the initial ideadownon
paperand thenfinalised.Thisisanaspect of filmIdidnot know a lotabout sothishas reallyhelped
me learnmore about thisside of film.
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