The document provides feedback on improvements that could be made to a table of contents design for a magazine. Suggestions include changing text to match the front cover more accurately, resizing pictures to be the same height, fixing typos, adding image credits, and potentially changing to a "wall of pictures" layout by finding more images. Minor layout adjustments like aligning page numbers and standardizing margins are also proposed. The feedback aims to refine and polish the table of contents design.

1. Table of contents
commentary

2. Table of contents draft one

3. PICTURES
Background picture

4. This picture wasn’t choose this picture because of the
amount of hands in the foreground. The main focus of
the picture is meant to be the artists performing and
the hands would have taken the focus away from the
artist.
The hand in the picture is covering the artist and so
are the heads in the front. I also feel I didn’t get
enough of the artist in as I wanted it to be a full body
shot. The picture is also a bit too dark to be used.
This picture isnt good enough to be used because the
artist is facing the ground and not all of the musician
can be seen because of the head in front. Also, the
‘Ibiza Rocks’ poster is in the background which can’t be
included in the picture.

5. Other Pictures

6. I chose this picture because I feel it’s a very strong picture. The lighting from behind highlights
the artist and his positioning also draws the readers attention to him. There are many things
covering the artist so I am able to put as much as the artist in as possible. Through editing it I
can also make the outline of the artist darker to make him stand out even more by changes the
colour levels.
Chosen Picture

7. PICTURES
Content pictures

8. I didn’t choose this photo because its too similar to the picture that I
used in my double page spread and I didn’t want the picture to be
completely centre. I wanted the picture to be a different height and
camera distance to the one I used in my double page spread. Also, the
costume seems a bit too similar.
This wasn’t chosen because the models face is a tiny bit
blurry. The blur is quite noticeable so it would be noticeable
on the table of contents . Although, the picture would have
been good because of the models facial expression and the
different costume to the one on my double page spread.
This picture is a little bit too close up. I wanted a close-
up picture to show a variety of images but I feel that this
picture is too close up and because I an using other
pictures on my table of contents, it may have taken too
much attention from the other images.

9. I chose this photo because it says a lot about the characteristics of the artists. The
facial expression and hand movement add to the tough persona of the musician and
this gives an insight to the audience into what the musician is like. Also, the costume
is quite different to the one used in my double page spread. The picture is a close-up
but it not too close either, this shows a variety of images in my table of contents.
Chosen Photo

10. This picture was a bit too blurry to be used, this was because the
model was moving as the same time the picture was being
taken. I also think that the models trousers don’t really match
the artists or the look of the magazine. The picture also seems a
bit too long and so it wouldn’t match the other picture I plan to
use.
The facial expression of the model in this
picture doesn’t really work. The model
looks as though she is holding back a
laugh and that wouldn’t look good in the
magazine because it seems the model
doesn’t feel comfortable.
The laugh from the model in this picture seems a bit forced. I
asked the model to look like she was laughing but in this
picture, it seems a bit fake. Also, I don’t really like the look of the
model putting her hand behind her back as it looks a bit posed.

11. Although this picture is a bit blurry, I chose it for my table of contents. The smile on the models face
isn't too much and it doesn’t looks forced as I took a picture just before the model was actually about
to laugh. Also, the white wall is just white enough, so that when I edit the picture and change the
contrast, the background will go almost completely white. The picture is also the right length and
right distance, therefore it is a mid-length shot and it shows a variety of images on my table of
contents.
Chosen Photo

12. DESIGN PROCESS

13. I experimented with different shades of red for the title of my table of contents. I didn’t want the colour to
be the same as the front cover because I wanted to make the red used on my front cover stand out more.
Also, because I was using a picture background, I had to make sure the red wouldn’t be lost in the
background. After I chose my colour, I added a triangle to one side of the box to make it seem almost 3d.
But I think I will make the colour behind a bit darker as the two colours look very similar when the page is
printed out.
Colours

14. I choose this font because it is the font that I used on my front cover. I wanted something that
wouldn’t stick out too much and because it is sans serif and not a design font it makes it
easier to read but because it was used on my front cover, that does mean it stands out from
the other fonts. This also helps with continuity.
I used Arial for my editorial pillars and contents because it’s a very simple font. This means
that the readers are able to focus on what the writing actually says rather than what the font
looks like because it isn't a design font and it is sans serif.
Font

15. IMPROVEMENTS

16. Judging by the front
cover, it is a monthly
magazine. Change this to The width of the margin is not
‘month’ the same for either side of the
Change this issue to match pictures.
the one on your cover (35)
Resize these pictures to the The page numbers need to
same height be lined up
A few typo’s/mistakes
which need to be changed.
If you can find more
pictures, you could make this
into a wall of pictures
There are no spaces in the Image credit on the side of
website address the picture