Smarthinking Tutor Response Form Your tutor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your tutor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] within your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking to help you improve your writing! Hello, Nelson! My name is Christina S., and I look forward to working with you on this Essay Center Reviewto improve your writing today. Let's get started! *Writing Strength: You have separate body paragraphs for each discussion point/each ethical issue (privacy, safety, and noise)! This will help keep your ideas focused. Well done! :) Now, let’s work on improving your essay. Main Idea/Thesis: First off, the thesis statement states your paper’s main idea/claim, but it does not outline the key points of your paper. You write, Drone technology has been characterized by ethical challenges. ( MAIN IDEA) The reader then won’t know what those ethical challenges are until he finishes reading the paper. To prepare the reader for the discussion, outline those key points/ethical challenges in your thesis statement. For your key points, based on your body paragraphs, what are the main ethical challenges arising from drones?Writing the key points in your thesis statement will give the reader a roadmap of the discussion which will help the reader follow the discussion better. Your revised thesis statement might look something like this: Drone technology has been characterized by ethical challenges, ( MAIN IDEA) namely _______________, _______________, and _______________. ( ethical challenges/key points 1, 2, & 3) Using this guide, what should your new thesis statement be? To learn more about this topic, you may visit this link: . Content Development: Moving on, you identify 2 ethical theories, but you do not apply them to the ethical challenges that you have identified. It is then unclear how these theories support the discussion. For example, in the 3rd paragraph under the section “Ethical theories,” you write, Last, utilitarianism ethical theories are based on individual ability to predict the consequences of an action. In this case, a person makes choices based on their benefit to the society. The decisions which are more beneficial to the society are considered to be ethical. (description of utilitarianism) This theory can benefit policy makers and lawmakers. They can make decisions and laws that are considerate to the members of public, (Custers, 2016). Above, you just describe what Utilitarianism is, but you do not apply this theory to the ethical issues at hand. To fix this, apply the ethical theories to the ethical challenges that you have identified. For example, let’s apply Utilitarianism to the ethical challenge related to safety. What are the benefits of using drones? Do these benefits outweigh the safety concerns related to drones or not? Based on this, what is the ethical thing to do? For example, should people be allowed to operate drones or not? To learn more abou.