SlideShare a Scribd company logo
Here shows what I done to improve my documentary using
In the first paragraph I added synonymous making it longer but also making well-structured.
I added more connectives and more words such as short film I added /documentary to
show people who would be reading this for the first time they would know what we’re
talking about.
In the last draft I added more conventions even if I
didn’t explain them I showed we learnt quite a few
other conventions and making it a bit longer.
Here I added more adjectives to describe
more and give out the purpose of this review
of the documentary and what was the
purpose.
In the first draft there weren’t much detail and in this last
one I added extra information and more detail by adding
more sentences into it.
As you can see in my three other drafts on the blog you can clearly see the changes and all
the rest I done was mostly what I done was re-read it again proof read and see if it made
sense reading out loud so I change few words and sentences through the Review making
more sense and adding more connectives and adjectives.
This paragraph I didn’t do much changing but only re-
worded as it didn’t make sense.
I added more connectives and adjectives telling
more of a descriptive way about the sound being
muffled.
Here also I’ve used electronically gadgets to check my spelling and here I’ve used misspelling
of the word inconvenient.

More Related Content

What's hot

Week 1
Week 1Week 1
Week 1
LRIVERA
 
The Aspects to Write a Good Essay
The Aspects to Write a Good EssayThe Aspects to Write a Good Essay
The Aspects to Write a Good Essay
MilagrosReyes36
 
SW3
SW3SW3
Contents page
Contents pageContents page
Contents page
Sam Terry
 
Opm work
Opm workOpm work
Opm work
haverstockmedia
 
Academic writing-assistance-agencies
Academic writing-assistance-agenciesAcademic writing-assistance-agencies
Academic writing-assistance-agencies
1andi55
 
Concluding Sentences
Concluding SentencesConcluding Sentences
Concluding Sentences
Arkansas City High School
 
Conclusions and transitions
Conclusions and transitionsConclusions and transitions
Conclusions and transitions
umkcwritingstudio
 
Business email writing Session 1
Business email writing Session 1Business email writing Session 1
Business email writing Session 1
robcarrot
 
The components to write a good essay
The components to write a good essayThe components to write a good essay
The components to write a good essay
EduardoCortes95
 
P
PP
E- writing
E- writingE- writing
E- writing
hcanselyilmazoktem
 

What's hot (12)

Week 1
Week 1Week 1
Week 1
 
The Aspects to Write a Good Essay
The Aspects to Write a Good EssayThe Aspects to Write a Good Essay
The Aspects to Write a Good Essay
 
SW3
SW3SW3
SW3
 
Contents page
Contents pageContents page
Contents page
 
Opm work
Opm workOpm work
Opm work
 
Academic writing-assistance-agencies
Academic writing-assistance-agenciesAcademic writing-assistance-agencies
Academic writing-assistance-agencies
 
Concluding Sentences
Concluding SentencesConcluding Sentences
Concluding Sentences
 
Conclusions and transitions
Conclusions and transitionsConclusions and transitions
Conclusions and transitions
 
Business email writing Session 1
Business email writing Session 1Business email writing Session 1
Business email writing Session 1
 
The components to write a good essay
The components to write a good essayThe components to write a good essay
The components to write a good essay
 
P
PP
P
 
E- writing
E- writingE- writing
E- writing
 

Viewers also liked

Presentation1
Presentation1Presentation1
Presentation1
haverstockmedia
 
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newwwFilmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
haverstockmedia
 
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
Jesús Guerrero Villegas
 
Twitter conventions
Twitter conventionsTwitter conventions
Twitter conventions
haverstockmedia
 
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du TarnAtelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
Catherine Epstein
 
Workforce planning template
Workforce planning templateWorkforce planning template
Workforce planning template
Bekezela Dhlamini
 
Taylor swift star construction
Taylor swift star constructionTaylor swift star construction
Taylor swift star construction
haverstockmedia
 
Ratings
RatingsRatings
Mule esb stripe
Mule esb stripeMule esb stripe
Mule esb stripe
princeirfancivil
 
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin ElrayesEvaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
haverstockmedia
 
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary ReportWelland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
Michael Reles
 
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water QualityBiodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
Michael Reles
 
Media computer games
Media computer gamesMedia computer games
Media computer games
haverstockmedia
 
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunitesRéseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
Catherine Epstein
 
Preliminary task evaluation
Preliminary task evaluationPreliminary task evaluation
Preliminary task evaluation
haverstockmedia
 
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's RoleBiodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
Michael Reles
 
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
Michel GOUGOU
 
Sun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
Sun Child Sponsorship Program OverviewSun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
Sun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
dciworld
 
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi 2.0
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi  2.0Identite numerique et recherche d emploi  2.0
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi 2.0
Catherine Epstein
 

Viewers also liked (20)

Presentation1
Presentation1Presentation1
Presentation1
 
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newwwFilmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
Filmindustry 131019052154-phpapp01 irene newww
 
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
How to do the passive (by Jesús Guerrero Villegas)
 
Twitter conventions
Twitter conventionsTwitter conventions
Twitter conventions
 
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du TarnAtelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
Atelier collaboratif Viadeo CCI du Tarn
 
Workforce planning template
Workforce planning templateWorkforce planning template
Workforce planning template
 
Taylor swift star construction
Taylor swift star constructionTaylor swift star construction
Taylor swift star construction
 
Ratings
RatingsRatings
Ratings
 
Mule esb stripe
Mule esb stripeMule esb stripe
Mule esb stripe
 
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin ElrayesEvaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
Evaluation Question 1 - Hossameldin Elrayes
 
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary ReportWelland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
Welland River Floodplain Consultation Summary Report
 
Open Education
Open EducationOpen Education
Open Education
 
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water QualityBiodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
Biodiversity Offsetting - Water Quality
 
Media computer games
Media computer gamesMedia computer games
Media computer games
 
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunitesRéseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
Réseaux sociaux, enjeux pour l'entreprise - Mythes et opportunites
 
Preliminary task evaluation
Preliminary task evaluationPreliminary task evaluation
Preliminary task evaluation
 
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's RoleBiodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
Biodiversity Offsetting - Legislation and Wetlands - NPCA's Role
 
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
Apport de la communication sensible dans le processus de réconciliation en Cô...
 
Sun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
Sun Child Sponsorship Program OverviewSun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
Sun Child Sponsorship Program Overview
 
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi 2.0
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi  2.0Identite numerique et recherche d emploi  2.0
Identite numerique et recherche d emploi 2.0
 

Similar to Review of ziii documentary irene

Review edit
Review editReview edit
Review edit
haverstockmedia
 
Editing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draftEditing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draft
haverstockmedia
 
Editing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draftEditing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draft
haverstockmedia
 
Editing proccess of my documentary
Editing proccess of my documentaryEditing proccess of my documentary
Editing proccess of my documentary
haverstockmedia
 
Proof Reading Review - Bart
 Proof Reading Review - Bart Proof Reading Review - Bart
Proof Reading Review - Bart
haverstockmedia
 
Prototype
PrototypePrototype
Prototype
guestc264
 
Web series evaluation
Web series evaluationWeb series evaluation
Web series evaluation
HarryAdkinsPenningto
 
Live Brief
Live BriefLive Brief
Live Brief
FrankieHall0
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
elfiecheetham
 
Trabajo de ingles
Trabajo de inglesTrabajo de ingles
Trabajo de ingles
drivercamaro
 
Question 7
Question 7Question 7
Question 7
kezturner
 
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docxAppearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
amrit47
 
ShowReel.docx
ShowReel.docxShowReel.docx
ShowReel.docx
JasmineMcNeil1
 
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docxRevision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
ronak56
 
Fmp evaluation
Fmp evaluationFmp evaluation
Fmp evaluation
JackScott54
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
elfiecheetham
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
elfiecheetham
 
Question 3
Question 3Question 3
Question 3
LaraDobsonx
 
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
Hafiza Abas
 
Feedback Sum up Sheet
Feedback Sum up SheetFeedback Sum up Sheet
Feedback Sum up Sheet
TheJellehKed
 

Similar to Review of ziii documentary irene (20)

Review edit
Review editReview edit
Review edit
 
Editing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draftEditing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draft
 
Editing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draftEditing th review of documentary draft
Editing th review of documentary draft
 
Editing proccess of my documentary
Editing proccess of my documentaryEditing proccess of my documentary
Editing proccess of my documentary
 
Proof Reading Review - Bart
 Proof Reading Review - Bart Proof Reading Review - Bart
Proof Reading Review - Bart
 
Prototype
PrototypePrototype
Prototype
 
Web series evaluation
Web series evaluationWeb series evaluation
Web series evaluation
 
Live Brief
Live BriefLive Brief
Live Brief
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
 
Trabajo de ingles
Trabajo de inglesTrabajo de ingles
Trabajo de ingles
 
Question 7
Question 7Question 7
Question 7
 
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docxAppearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
Appearance When I watched the video of myself, I felt that my b.docx
 
ShowReel.docx
ShowReel.docxShowReel.docx
ShowReel.docx
 
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docxRevision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
Revision ChecklistYour name Simone Doyle Date11.docx
 
Fmp evaluation
Fmp evaluationFmp evaluation
Fmp evaluation
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
 
Swot analysis and evaluation
Swot analysis  and evaluationSwot analysis  and evaluation
Swot analysis and evaluation
 
Question 3
Question 3Question 3
Question 3
 
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
Chapter 3 Breaking up long sentences (ENGLISH FOR WRITING RESEARCH PAPERS)
 
Feedback Sum up Sheet
Feedback Sum up SheetFeedback Sum up Sheet
Feedback Sum up Sheet
 

More from haverstockmedia

Eval 2
Eval 2Eval 2
Eval 1
Eval 1Eval 1
Music video idea
Music video ideaMusic video idea
Music video idea
haverstockmedia
 
Video idea weeknd -Amad Islam
Video idea weeknd -Amad IslamVideo idea weeknd -Amad Islam
Video idea weeknd -Amad Islam
haverstockmedia
 
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
haverstockmedia
 
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad IslamThe weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
haverstockmedia
 
Imvdb
ImvdbImvdb
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
haverstockmedia
 
Beyonce - dance for you
Beyonce -  dance for youBeyonce -  dance for you
Beyonce - dance for you
haverstockmedia
 
British board of film classication (bbfc)
British board of film classication (bbfc)British board of film classication (bbfc)
British board of film classication (bbfc)
haverstockmedia
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
haverstockmedia
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
haverstockmedia
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
haverstockmedia
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
haverstockmedia
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
haverstockmedia
 
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
haverstockmedia
 
Unit 13 assignment 1 report
Unit 13 assignment 1 reportUnit 13 assignment 1 report
Unit 13 assignment 1 report
haverstockmedia
 
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
haverstockmedia
 
Focus Group - 4018
Focus Group - 4018Focus Group - 4018
Focus Group - 4018
haverstockmedia
 
Audience Research - 4018
Audience Research - 4018Audience Research - 4018
Audience Research - 4018
haverstockmedia
 

More from haverstockmedia (20)

Eval 2
Eval 2Eval 2
Eval 2
 
Eval 1
Eval 1Eval 1
Eval 1
 
Music video idea
Music video ideaMusic video idea
Music video idea
 
Video idea weeknd -Amad Islam
Video idea weeknd -Amad IslamVideo idea weeknd -Amad Islam
Video idea weeknd -Amad Islam
 
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
The weeknd feat ed sheeran Dark Times Lyric Analysis (Amad Islam)
 
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad IslamThe weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
The weeknd lyric analysis By Amad Islam
 
Imvdb
ImvdbImvdb
Imvdb
 
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
Analysisoflyrics 111010192016-phpapp01
 
Beyonce - dance for you
Beyonce -  dance for youBeyonce -  dance for you
Beyonce - dance for you
 
British board of film classication (bbfc)
British board of film classication (bbfc)British board of film classication (bbfc)
British board of film classication (bbfc)
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
 
3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences3 different ways of classifying audiences
3 different ways of classifying audiences
 
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
Final Sketch Evaluation - 4018
 
Unit 13 assignment 1 report
Unit 13 assignment 1 reportUnit 13 assignment 1 report
Unit 13 assignment 1 report
 
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
Analysis For Attack The Block - 4018
 
Focus Group - 4018
Focus Group - 4018Focus Group - 4018
Focus Group - 4018
 
Audience Research - 4018
Audience Research - 4018Audience Research - 4018
Audience Research - 4018
 

Recently uploaded

Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit InnovationLeveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
TechSoup
 
BBR 2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
BBR  2024 Summer Sessions Interview TrainingBBR  2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
BBR 2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
Katrina Pritchard
 
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptxSolutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
spdendr
 
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdfA Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
Jean Carlos Nunes Paixão
 
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdfB. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
BoudhayanBhattachari
 
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
PECB
 
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
Celine George
 
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
Leena Ghag-Sakpal
 
math operations ued in python and all used
math operations ued in python and all usedmath operations ued in python and all used
math operations ued in python and all used
ssuser13ffe4
 
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptxBeyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
EduSkills OECD
 
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptxPengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
Fajar Baskoro
 
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptxC1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
mulvey2
 
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdfIGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
Amin Marwan
 
Wound healing PPT
Wound healing PPTWound healing PPT
Wound healing PPT
Jyoti Chand
 
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptxNEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
iammrhaywood
 
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptxZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
dot55audits
 
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UPLAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
RAHUL
 
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docxAdvanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
adhitya5119
 
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skillsspot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
haiqairshad
 
How to deliver Powerpoint Presentations.pptx
How to deliver Powerpoint  Presentations.pptxHow to deliver Powerpoint  Presentations.pptx
How to deliver Powerpoint Presentations.pptx
HajraNaeem15
 

Recently uploaded (20)

Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit InnovationLeveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
Leveraging Generative AI to Drive Nonprofit Innovation
 
BBR 2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
BBR  2024 Summer Sessions Interview TrainingBBR  2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
BBR 2024 Summer Sessions Interview Training
 
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptxSolutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
Solutons Maths Escape Room Spatial .pptx
 
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdfA Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
A Independência da América Espanhola LAPBOOK.pdf
 
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdfB. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
B. Ed Syllabus for babasaheb ambedkar education university.pdf
 
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
ISO/IEC 27001, ISO/IEC 42001, and GDPR: Best Practices for Implementation and...
 
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
How to Make a Field Mandatory in Odoo 17
 
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
Bed Making ( Introduction, Purpose, Types, Articles, Scientific principles, N...
 
math operations ued in python and all used
math operations ued in python and all usedmath operations ued in python and all used
math operations ued in python and all used
 
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptxBeyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
Beyond Degrees - Empowering the Workforce in the Context of Skills-First.pptx
 
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptxPengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
Pengantar Penggunaan Flutter - Dart programming language1.pptx
 
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptxC1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
C1 Rubenstein AP HuG xxxxxxxxxxxxxx.pptx
 
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdfIGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
IGCSE Biology Chapter 14- Reproduction in Plants.pdf
 
Wound healing PPT
Wound healing PPTWound healing PPT
Wound healing PPT
 
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptxNEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
NEWSPAPERS - QUESTION 1 - REVISION POWERPOINT.pptx
 
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptxZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
ZK on Polkadot zero knowledge proofs - sub0.pptx
 
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UPLAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
LAND USE LAND COVER AND NDVI OF MIRZAPUR DISTRICT, UP
 
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docxAdvanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
Advanced Java[Extra Concepts, Not Difficult].docx
 
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skillsspot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
spot a liar (Haiqa 146).pptx Technical writhing and presentation skills
 
How to deliver Powerpoint Presentations.pptx
How to deliver Powerpoint  Presentations.pptxHow to deliver Powerpoint  Presentations.pptx
How to deliver Powerpoint Presentations.pptx
 

Review of ziii documentary irene

  • 1. Here shows what I done to improve my documentary using In the first paragraph I added synonymous making it longer but also making well-structured. I added more connectives and more words such as short film I added /documentary to show people who would be reading this for the first time they would know what we’re talking about. In the last draft I added more conventions even if I didn’t explain them I showed we learnt quite a few other conventions and making it a bit longer.
  • 2. Here I added more adjectives to describe more and give out the purpose of this review of the documentary and what was the purpose. In the first draft there weren’t much detail and in this last one I added extra information and more detail by adding more sentences into it.
  • 3. As you can see in my three other drafts on the blog you can clearly see the changes and all the rest I done was mostly what I done was re-read it again proof read and see if it made sense reading out loud so I change few words and sentences through the Review making more sense and adding more connectives and adjectives. This paragraph I didn’t do much changing but only re- worded as it didn’t make sense. I added more connectives and adjectives telling more of a descriptive way about the sound being muffled.
  • 4. Here also I’ve used electronically gadgets to check my spelling and here I’ve used misspelling of the word inconvenient.