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1. What is the primary idea of the content in the articles?



These articles are written about ban the using of cell phone in the cars. Details of
these articles are written about reason of ban the using of cell phone in the cars such
as risk of using cell phone while driving and how to ban using cell phone while driving.
Thus, primary ideas of these articles are to ban the use of cell phone in the cars.



2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document (articles)
clearlyrepresent the idea that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your
comments.



First section is written about local lows related to ban the using of cell phone that
talking or texting while driving. Also, second and third sections are written about
extent of ban using cell phone in the cars and determining specific guideline for the
use of cell phone while driving.



3. What details are included in the articles?



This article has been described about use conditions of the cellular phone.
It is explained how to use the cellular phone when is driver's driving.
It becomes a problem the rule that the cellular phone prohibits by the
region different.



4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it?



There was anything that was confusing.
As for the problem of the occurrence of the traffic accident due to driver's
carelessness, the standard is not vaguely understood easily.
5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good?
I think it is very good to prohibit the use of mobile phone while it is driving. Because
the possibility of causing the accident grows if the mobile phone is used while driving
and there is a possibility of losing the life. It is good that family can help for the
accident is prevented.



6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected?



Yes there are. First of all, yourself should change consideration before making the
family help. Next, you should think what you can. I think that it is useless to rely on the
person from the beginning. Having in a prior settlement that doesn't put the trouble on
a surrounding person.



7. What specific suggestions for improving the articles can you make?



I think that I should give the example of other countries because the example is only
the United States.
Moreover, it is necessary to enumerate the concrete example a little more.
(There was such an accident. )
The reader will understand this article more by doing so.
The reader might be interested more, too.

8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar
document and how this author authored it (as you see it in the link).



First of all, we enumerated the concrete example.
Because enumerating the concrete example also is interested the reader and
becomes comprehensible.
Next, it is likely to enumerate it as an example of not only one country but also various
regions. An idea different by the enumeration of the example of other regions will arise,
too.
Finally, the illustration will be put a little more. When it is only a character, the reader
gets tired, too.

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Peer r ex4

  • 1. 1. What is the primary idea of the content in the articles? These articles are written about ban the using of cell phone in the cars. Details of these articles are written about reason of ban the using of cell phone in the cars such as risk of using cell phone while driving and how to ban using cell phone while driving. Thus, primary ideas of these articles are to ban the use of cell phone in the cars. 2. Do you think the individual sections and headings in the document (articles) clearlyrepresent the idea that was communicated. Explain the reasons behind your comments. First section is written about local lows related to ban the using of cell phone that talking or texting while driving. Also, second and third sections are written about extent of ban using cell phone in the cars and determining specific guideline for the use of cell phone while driving. 3. What details are included in the articles? This article has been described about use conditions of the cellular phone. It is explained how to use the cellular phone when is driver's driving. It becomes a problem the rule that the cellular phone prohibits by the region different. 4. Was there anything that was confusing? If so, what is it? There was anything that was confusing. As for the problem of the occurrence of the traffic accident due to driver's carelessness, the standard is not vaguely understood easily.
  • 2. 5. What is good about the writing? Why is it good? I think it is very good to prohibit the use of mobile phone while it is driving. Because the possibility of causing the accident grows if the mobile phone is used while driving and there is a possibility of losing the life. It is good that family can help for the accident is prevented. 6. Are there any errors that need to be corrected? Yes there are. First of all, yourself should change consideration before making the family help. Next, you should think what you can. I think that it is useless to rely on the person from the beginning. Having in a prior settlement that doesn't put the trouble on a surrounding person. 7. What specific suggestions for improving the articles can you make? I think that I should give the example of other countries because the example is only the United States. Moreover, it is necessary to enumerate the concrete example a little more. (There was such an accident. ) The reader will understand this article more by doing so. The reader might be interested more, too. 8. Identify three basic differences between how your group would author a similar document and how this author authored it (as you see it in the link). First of all, we enumerated the concrete example. Because enumerating the concrete example also is interested the reader and becomes comprehensible. Next, it is likely to enumerate it as an example of not only one country but also various regions. An idea different by the enumeration of the example of other regions will arise,
  • 3. too. Finally, the illustration will be put a little more. When it is only a character, the reader gets tired, too.