This document provides feedback from a teacher on a student's pre-production work for a film project. The teacher comments positively on several areas, including genre analysis, storyboards, and production schedules. Some areas needing improvement are identified, such as correctly citing director names, adding more analysis rather than description, and clarifying images. The student creates an action plan to address the feedback by making revisions like fixing director names, expanding analytical comments, reformatting a script, and enlarging unclear images. The teacher's final feedback notes the work with amendments has improved and deserves a higher mark.

1. AS Pre-production Tasks Feedback
Student Name: STREET Chloe
Task 1 – Pre-production: Research & Planning Evidence on
blog
1. Similar Products – film beginning analysis y
2. Genre Analysis y
3. Target Audience y
4. Script y
5. Storyboard y
6. Shotlist y
7. Layouts – floor plan y
8. Locations y
9. Costumes y
10.Props y
11.Actors y
12.Equipment
13.Production schedule y
Teachers comments
1. Hot Fuzz/Sixth Sense/Rear Window – some good analysis with confident
use of technical language showing at times good understanding of task.
Good detail to show how narrative/characters are introduced. Always
analyse, some parts drift into description. You need to get director names
correct – M. Night Shyamalan. In Rear Window it is the use of the
familiar, which gives the scene its tension – the murder will occur in an
average street just like the one the audience live on.
2. Some nice detail on genre, with sub-genres identified. Presentation is
good with images added. Detail on history is good but no detail on how
changes in society reflect changes in genre. Box office analysis used to
show popularity. A nice post has been added to show common
conventions in used in genre. Please read your work, you describe films
but don’t give titles (Capricorn One).
3. Some detail on target audience added to genre post. While some detail is
based on stereotype, there is evidence of primary research into
audience. Add detail on other interests – films, tv, games etch. Difficult to
read the box office figures.
4. A very effective opening to the script introducing characters and narrative
– please reformat dialogue.
5. Very good storyboard and presentation. Good technical detail throughout
and variety of shots. Well done. Repost as it is very hard to read – you
don’t need to use SlideShare for images.
6. Good detail on shots with lots of info on camera, location, sound and
description.
7. Drawing added to show camera but it is slightly confusing – where is the
camera? Where are your actors? Please add
8. Good images of locations to be used, great detail as to why they were
chosen and suitability for narrative.
9. Nice detail on costumes and how they link to characters and narrative

2. 10.Nice detail on props and how they link to characters and narrative
11.Nice detail on actors and how they link to characters and narrative
12.Missing
13.Brief detail on production schedule but all parts of production noted
This is a good piece of work. Your blog is well organised with posts clearly
labelled.
To get higher mark you need improvements - please see feedback above.
You need to add all missing parts!
 Post corrected and amended for Sixth Sense
 Rear Window posts amended to show better understanding of common
Hitchcock themes
 Some nice detail added to target audience, with evidence of primary
research
 Script reformatted
 Storyboard reposted
 Images in genre post now more clear
 Much better production schedule with very good detail for all stages
 Floor plan redone, much clearer now showing actors and camera
positions.
 Changes made to genre, show better understanding of genre and links to
society
A very good piece of work with amendments adding to mark.
Mark out of 20: 14/20
Teacher name: M Drummond Date: Jan 2017
Student action plan for improvement
 I’ve changed the name to M. Night Shyamalan in my Sixth Sense essay.
 I’ve added and changed small parts in my Rear Window essay to add
more analytical points and talked about Hitchcock’s familiar locations.
 Added a couple small more analytical parts in my Sixth Sense essay.
 Added some more about tv, video games on my target audience and
added more research to small audience questionnaire.
 Reformatted the dialogue on my script and put it in a slide share.
 Reposted storyboard.
 Target audience pictures enlarged so not blurry.
 Reposted a more detailed and thorough production schedule.
 Did a more detailed and clear floor plan (will be on blog Wed 17th
morning)
 I’ve added more about changes in society in my genre research and
mentioned Capricorn One.
Final mark out of 20: 18 Date: Feb 2017