This document provides feedback on a group assignment to create an opening sequence for a thriller. It discusses how the group improved their fourth draft based on feedback, including changing the ending to make it more exciting and climactic. It then outlines the group's new idea and storyboard for their opening sequence, focusing on building suspense and scaring the audience. Finally, it discusses conventions of thrillers like stalkers, ghosts, and mysteries that were used, developed or challenged in the new sequence.

1. Assignment 11:
Getting Into Groups.
Opening Sequence – Final Draft
Key Code:
Abigail:
Gledis:
Joanne:
Vera:
Group Work:

2. Teacher Assessment – Draft Four Opening
sequence:

3. Peer Assessment of Draft Four - Opening
Sequence:

4. Peer Assessment of Draft Four - Opening
Sequence:

5. Self Assessment of Draft Four - Opening
Sequence:

6. Feedback of our forth opening
sequence:
•We definitely
succeeded in scaring
our audience which
was one of our main
aims.

7. Feedback of our forth opening
sequence:
•All of our
audience feedback
was very positive
and many enjoyed
our opening
sequence.

8. • From draft four to our final draft, we made a
few amendments to our opening sequence
idea.
• For this, we had to change the ending as we
received feedback stating that it wasn’t exciting
and that there wasn’t a good climax.
• This is essential for a thriller opening sequence.

9. c
• This was a challenge, as we were limited for
time, however we were able to justify going
over 2 minuets as we had to create suspense.
• This change helped us to improve overall
because it made our opening sequence more
appealing to our target audience, as it
became more exciting and scary.

10. New Idea.
• Drew sits at her desk uploading a video she recorded onto her blog of when books were
falling from her shelf. She has a flashback of this event. Suddenly the door opens slowly.
• Drew gets up to look if there's someone there but there isn't so she closes it. As she walks
away it open again more violently and drew shuts it in fright. As she stands against the door
the TV turns on by itself, Drew grabs her camera to record this.
• She tries to switch it off with the remote, then she presses the button on the screen but it
doesn’t turn off. Suddenly the TV witches off and Drew sees a dark figure walk behind her in
the screen reflection.
• She turns to record this but nothing is there. Out of nowhere the closet doors start
aggressively moving and banging. She walks towards them still recording. She quickly opens
the doors and finds nothing but cloths.
• While filming inside of the closet she hear her necklaces jingle. She turns with her camera
and sees them moving. She backs away and runs to the door in an attempt to leave the room
but it wont open. Struggling to open the door she feels something behind her and turns
quickly in horror and gasps.

11. New Storyboard.

15. Slide shot
• The close up/Extreme close shots we use are
to highlight importance or clearly show
emotions
• Ariel shots used are to give a clear view of the
area so you can make connections to reactions
• Long shots are again the same as Ariel but
with long shots we show the audience what
the character doesn't see

16. New Script.

17. New Script.

18. New Script.

19. Conventions of Thrillers...
Conventions Example Image Use/Develop/
Challenge
Fatal Use- Someone
Attraction becoming obsessed
after a relationship
Challenge – using a
female as the stalker
instead of a male.
Stalkers/
Obsession
The Fan Develop – Instead of
being obsessed with a
woman and or a
family, De Niro is
obsessed with his
favourite sports star
and stalks him.

20. D
Conventions of Thrillers...
Conventions Example Image Use/Develop/
Challenge
The Hand Challenge- it does it
That Rocks through using a
The Cradle women as the crazy
killer stalker who
seeks revenge instead
of the normal use of a
male
Stalkers/
Obsession
Stir of Develop – Its more
echoes obsession as Kevin
Bacon tries to find
the answers to an
ever haunting
mystery

21. D
Conventions of Thrillers...
Conventions Example Image Use/Develop/
Challenge
Eye For An Eye Develop – A woman
is used as the
person seeking
revenge for the
crime rather than
the typical use of a
male character.
Crime The Ambulance Develop – Not
giving the audience
a clear
understanding of
what the crime
actually is at first.

22. D
(Possible) Conventions of Thrillers...
Conventions Example Image Use/Challenge/
Develop
The Others Challenge – In this film
they made you aware
of the wrong
ghost, whereas in
regular horrors, the
ghostly figure is clear.
Ghosts
House On A Use/Challenge – They
Haunted Hill used the ghost to
create fear amongst the
audience and for the
characters.
They challenged it by
making the ghost
physically scary.

23. Conventions of Thrillers...
Conventions Example Image Use/Develop/
Challenge
Use/Develop.
The common feature of
wrongful accusation was
Primal used and it was
developed because the
Fear
character accused was
religious, young and
didn’t fit the stereotype
Misidentification of who would be
or Wrongful accused.
Accusation.
Challenge – It seems
to the audience like
there has been a
The wrongful
Usual accusation, as the
Suspects only survivor is then
questioned about the
incident that occurred
and this typically
doesn’t happen.

24. Convention Explanation Use/Develop/
Challenge
Our character is Using – We’re using
haunted by a ghost this as we are doing
Ghosts/Spirits in her home. possession which
can be quite a
typical feature.
Mysterious things Using– We’re are
keep on happening using this
to the character, and convention by
Mystery as she becomes included mystery all
aware of this, these the way through the
happenings get plot.
worse.
At the end of film, Developing – We’re
our character is fully developing this
possessed. But because our
Possession during the opening character is
sequence, the possessed slowly
character has a close and is aware of this
encounter with the possession.
ghost.

25. Inspirational Films E
What I found
Inspirational about this
scene is the kind of
lighting they used
through out the more
dark scenes
emphasises the
emotions of the actor
/actress

26. E
Inspirational Films
Black Swan
What I found inspirational
from this movie is the use
of close up shots which was
clearly present in this film
It gives a clear picture of
the characters emotions
and helps the audience to
connect with the character
by seeing their emotions so
closely.