The document provides assessment feedback on improving writing skills related to analyzing a relationship in a story. It includes tips on embedding quotes with context, using different word classes, writing more in-depth analysis, and analyzing a specific quote about a character telling another it will be unpleasant and disturbing to go through an interrogation. Students are instructed to write down areas for improvement and discuss a quote in pairs before writing an improved paragraph using the feedback.

1. Assessment Feedback
WRITE ABOUT THE RELATIONSHIP BETWEEN GERALD AND SHEILA IN PAGES 27 – 28

3. Write down what you think you need to improve
on in your PEELA writing
On your post-it note…

4. 1. Embedding quotes
 Make sure you include context and background information when
embedding quotes
 E.g. ‘she’s had a long, exciting and tiring day’
 Embedded: Gerald asks the Inspector to excuse Sheila from the
room as ‘she’s had a long, exciting and tiring day’.

5. 2. Word classes
 Noun
 Pronoun
 Verb
 Adverb
 Adjective
‘I must obviously be a selfish, vindictive creature’
‘It’s bound to be unpleasant and disturbing’

6. 3. Write more…
 At least 2 and a half sides of A4

7. 4. In-depth analysis of the quote
‘It’s bound to be unpleasant and disturbing’
Gerald tells Sheila this when she insists on staying when the Inspector
interrogates him about Eva Smith.

8. In your pairs, analyse this quote
Gerald responds to Sheila
‘You’ve been through it – and now you want to see somebody
else put through it.’

9. Write your improvements paragraph
Using your feedback and what we have been
through, choose one paragraph to improve