Feedback developed by Estee Beck, PhD General strategies for peer response attribution to an unknown author The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly of Peer Feedback Research in writing studies show evidence that undergraduate student writers are not familiar with providing adequate peer feedback, and instead rely upon mildly pleasant comments as a way to not offend a fellow student. At the same time, getting feedback is a crucial step in writing. Feedback provides insight from a detached reader, who may provide overall direction for the works-in-progress. Learning how to give feedback requires practice, patience, good reading skills, and sensitivity toward relations. But, students need training with how to give good peer feedback. How to give not-so-great feedback: Here’s a sample paragraph from a friend who has asked for some feedback on the scope of the paragraph. He’s concerned that the summary paragraph does not provide enough detail to conclude a section of the paper. for working within electronic computer Although computers & writing and digital rhetoric employ different methodologies benefits apply to classroom based writing practices along with research and scholarship, the ultimate quest provides insight into a knowledge and information exchange economy through and with digital technologies. As people make -mediated spaces, both fields form around a sense of searching for how people and machines interact with each other. While the advancements with digital technologies, especially with movement in the multi- million dollar Internet of Things industry, the relationship of not just human-to- machine interaction, but also machine-to-machine interaction will become important for rhetoricians to address. Again, understanding the function of rhetoric in algorithmic processes is just one step in support of positioning a rhetorical code studies as central to rhetorical scholarship. Comment [BE1]: I have no idea what this means! Comment [BE2]: Long Comment [BE3]: Who cares? Comment [BE4]: This is a horrible paragraph. The comments in the margins show a few traits: An uncaring critique, ignorance, inadequate explanation, and a final comment that’s not too pleasant to read. What’s missing from the four comments? Here’s the same paragraph, with some alterations: Although computers & writing and digital rhetoric employ diferent methodologies Comment [BE6]: Punctuation Comment [BE5]: Spelling error for working with electronic computer mediated spaces both fields form a sense of searching for people and machines interact with each other. While the benefits apply to classroom based writing practices along with research and scholarship, the ultimate quest provides insight into a knowledge and information exchange economy through and with digital technologies. As people mke advancements with Comment [BE7]: Spelling error digital technologies, especially with mov.

1. Feedback developed by Estee Beck, PhD
General strategies for peer response attribution to an unknown

2. author
The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly of Peer Feedback
Research in writing studies show evidence that
undergraduate student writers are not familiar
with providing adequate peer feedback, and instead rely upon
mildly pleasant comments as a
way to not offend a fellow student. At the same time,
getting feedback is a crucial step in
writing. Feedback provides insight from a detached reader,
who may provide overall direction
for the works-in-progress. Learning how to give feedback
requires practice, patience, good
reading skills, and sensitivity toward relations. But, students
need training with how to give
good peer feedback.
How to give not-so-great feedback:
Here’s a sample paragraph from a friend who has asked for
some feedback on the scope of the
paragraph. He’s concerned that the summary paragraph
does not provide enough detail to
conclude a section of the paper.
for working within electronic computer
Although computers & writing and digital rhetoric employ
different methodologies
benefits apply to classroom based writing practices along
with research and
scholarship, the ultimate quest provides insight into a
knowledge and information
exchange economy through and with digital technologies. As
people make

3. -mediated spaces, both fields form around a
sense of searching for how people and machines
interact with each other. While the
advancements with digital technologies, especially with
movement in the multi-
million dollar Internet of Things industry, the relationship of
not just human-to-
machine interaction, but also machine-to-machine interaction
will become
important for rhetoricians to address. Again, understanding the
function of rhetoric
in algorithmic processes is just one step in support of
positioning a rhetorical code
studies as central to rhetorical scholarship.
Comment [BE1]: I have no idea what this means!
Comment [BE2]: Long
Comment [BE3]: Who cares?
Comment [BE4]: This is a horrible paragraph.
The comments in the margins show a few traits: An
uncaring critique, ignorance, inadequate
explanation, and a final comment that’s not too pleasant to
read. What’s missing from the four
comments?
Here’s the same paragraph, with some alterations:
Although computers & writing and digital rhetoric employ
diferent methodologies
Comment [BE6]: Punctuation

4. Comment [BE5]: Spelling error
for working with electronic computer mediated spaces
both fields form a sense of
searching for people and machines interact with each other.
While the benefits
apply to classroom based writing practices along with
research and scholarship, the
ultimate quest provides insight into a knowledge and
information exchange
economy through and with digital technologies. As people mke
advancements with Comment [BE7]: Spelling error
digital technologies, especially with movement in the multi-
million dollar Internet of
Things industry, the relationship of not just human-to-mahine
interaction, but also Comment [BE8]: Spelling error
machine-to-machine interaction will become important for
rhetoricians to address.

5. Feedback developed by Estee Beck, PhD
General strategies for peer response attribution to an unknown
author
Again, understanding the function of rhetoric in algorithmic
processes is just one
step in support of positioning a rhetorical code
studies as central to rhetorical
scholarship.
Now, this isn’t necessarily “bad” feedback. Instead, it’s a
type of feedback called ‘local’ issues
(or the details like grammar, punctuation, usage, and
mechanics) or editing the paper. The
focus is on the small items, but not the overall larger
concerns the writer wanted the reader to
address.
Commenting and correct grammar, punctuation, usage, and
mechanics is not good peer review
feedback.

6. How to give good feedback:
Although computers & writing and digital rhetoric employ
different methodologies
for working within electronic computer-mediated spaces, both
fields form around a
sense of searching for how people and machines interact
with each other. While the
benefits apply to classroom based writing practices along
with research and
scholarship, the ultimate quest provides insight into a
knowledge and information
exchange economy through and with digital technologies. As
people make
advancements with digital technologies, especially with
movement in the multi-
million dollar Internet of Things industry, the relationship of
not just human
machine interaction, but also machine-to-machine interaction
will become
-to-
important for rhetoricians to address. Again, understanding the
function of rhetoric
in algorithmic processes is just one step in support of
positioning a rhetorical code
studies as central to rhetorical scholarship.
Notice three things about the comments in the margin: 1) There
are only two comments that
address larger issues of the paragraph that the writer needs
to focus on in revision; 2) There’s
positive language at the start of the first comment showing an
interest in maintaining the

7. relationship with the author, but also telling the author he
did something well in his writing;
and, 3) They are longer comments that ask questions and use
“hedge” language like ‘might’ and
‘consider’ to provide the author with the opportunity to consider
the feedback without a
directive of what to do.
Comment [BE9]: This is a great transitional sentence
from the previous paragraph. And, as a curious reader,
how do people and machines interact with each
other?
Would another sentence or two help readers with that
answer?
Comment [BE10]: This seems to be the key point in
this paragraph. Why do rhetoricians need to address this
topic? Might you consider adding a sentence why directly
afterward so readers have a rationale? I see this is
explained later in the paper, but maybe a hint of the
position will help give readers a sign about what is to
come.

8. Feedback developed by Estee Beck, PhD
General strategies for peer response attribution to an unknown
author
General Strategies for Peer Response
When providing feedback to peers, use of the below template
responses and fill in the blank
with your comment. You will find after a few times giving this
kind of feedback you will become
stronger with giving good feedback.
Types of responses writers want to hear:
Summarizing/Saying Back: Here is what I see this saying . .
.
Glossing: Here is a word or phrase that condenses this
paragraph or section as I understand it . .

9. Responding: As I read this paragraph, I . . .
Pointing: What seems most important here is . . . What
seems to be missing here is . . .
Extending: You could also apply this to . . . What would happen
if you . . .
Encouraging: This works well for me because . . .
Suggesting: If I were you, I might add . . . You
could move that paragraph . . .
Soliciting: Could you say more about this . . . ?
Connecting: In my experience, this . . . That’s like what x says
. . . I saw some research on this . .
Evaluating: This opening is focused and well-developed . .
.
Counterarguing: Another way to look at this is . . .
Questioning: Why do you say . . .

10. Responses writers don’t want to hear:
“I like it.” (nice but useless)
“I hate it.” (insulting and useless)
“It’s ok.” (boring and useless)
“I wouldn’t change a thing.” (boring and useless)
“How could you actually believe this crap?” (insulting, boring,
and useless)
“This has nothing to do with your project, but this reminds me
of when I . . .” (insulting, boring,
useless, and annoying)
Audience
Analysis Peer
Review
Date
Assessment Completed by

11. Your first name Your last name
Peer Review of
Peer's first name Peer's last name
Instructions: Open the audience analysis assignment to be
familiar with
the assignment and criteria while responding to these questions.
On another tab, have the "peer review sample.docx" (available
via Unit
1 Peer Review and Final Draft Submission Folder) document
open to help
guide your responses.
Your narrative responses must be in complete sentences and
must use
language found in "peer review sample.docx"
The analysis addresses all questions for analysis. If not, then
list
all of the missing responses to questions for your peer.
The analysis is well organized. It has a clear structure with an
introduction, a body, and a conclusion. If there is not a clear
structure, provide a comment about how to make the structure
clearer.
Use the template language from the peer review worksheet to
guide your
response.
The memo includes a clear analysis of the two web sites,

12. including
comparison and contrast of the sites themselves and their target
audiences. It does not just describe. If there is not a clear
analysis
of a technical and non-technical website, provide feedback to
your
peer on where the analysis needs to be in the document. Point
out any
areas where there is description.
The analysis is concrete in that it uses examples from the
Websites to
support major points. The use of examples is selective and to-
the-
point. The examples are included in order to illustrate the
analysis
point and not to fill the page with words. There are no long
direct
quotations (defined as more than 3 lines) from the analyzed
Websites.
The student explains how the examples relate back to the
analysis. If
there are any deviations to this criteria, provide your peer with
feedback using the peer review worksheet templates to guide
your
responses.
The memo is formatted correctly following the specified
guidelines for
memos from Chapter 11. APA citation style is used when
needed. If
there are errors, point those out to your peer.
Spelling, grammar, and punctuation are correct. Minimum word

13. requirement is met. If there are errors, point those out to your
peer.
Rate how well the paper aligns with the assignment guidelines
(minimal = does not meet assignment guidelines; medium =
meets about
75% of the assignment guidelines; very high = meets 95% or
above of
the assignment guidelines)
Minimal
Low
Medium
High
Very high
Suggestions for meeting the assignment guidelines
Write a final comment to your peer about two of the overall
strengths
and one overall weakness of the of first draft
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all que_mL5zKeLhToYv7B93hwQUTg: Peer_s last
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Enclosed I will discuss the comparison and contrasting views of
two websites regarding Electroconvulsive therapy (ECT) and
how it is utilized in the present day. Electroconvulsive therapy
is a treatment that involves applying a brief electrical
conduction to areas of the brain while the patient is under
anesthesia.
The first website I located was www.psychiatry.org and it
goes into detail what ECT is and how it is utilized in the
treatment of major depressive disorders. Clinical evidence
indicates that for individuals with uncomplicated, but severe
major depression, ECT will produce substantial improvement in
approximately 80% of patients. (APS, 2019). This website
explains the use of ECT in other severe mental illnesses as well
including bipolar disorder and schizophrenia. Another
condition that ECT is used for includes the state of catatonia,
which is described as a state in which the person can become
unresponsive or very agitated, often becoming a severe threat to
themselves or become very sick due to no oral intake of food or
water possibly leading to malnutrition and/or dehydration.
According to this website, ECT is a last resort type of treatment
due to its extensive and risky administration process in which
the patient is anesthetized, which in itself is a risk. It is often
put in place when the patient has not seen progression with
psychotherapy or medications. This website was thorough and
direct on what ECT is and how its delivered to patients
The second website I referred to was the Cleveland Clinic

15. Journal of Medicine , www.mdedge.com and it offered a more in
depth look at ECT and its controversial highlights. This website
explains how the procedure is generally safe and patients will
need pre-op testing prior to getting the treatment. Although
first used in schizophrenic patients it is more widely used in
other mental health disorders now. The article explains how
ECT gets a bad reputation due to its history and misuse (this
article goes into depth of the specific tortures noted in years
past and also the lack of medical intervention and anesthesia
available at the time). Information was also available about
new treatments on the horizon to better treat long-term
psychiatric disorders and provide neuromodulator techniques.,
including vagus nerve and deep brain stimulation, and
transcranial magnetic brain stimulation.
Between these two websites the information was plentiful, but
each website offered different views of ECT. While the basics
of the therapy were addressed, www.psychiatry.com provided
just the overview of what ECT is and how it is utilized. The
second website, www.mdedge.com took a more alternative
approach and offered more in-depth information on ECT
including its history, more present uses, and future goals of
ECT and related treatment modalities that could possibly take
its place.