peer feedback

1. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Good amount of pages and page size
Good choice of file and good weighing up of
advantages and disadvantages.
Possibly try and put more detail into chosen
audience example class, gender and location.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Very detailed mind map and mood board had good
annotations.
Mind map could have done with having more detail
within chosen subject (Hansel and Gretel)

2. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Well explained story. Very detailed information on
production methods and audience.
Perhaps a few more examples on advantages of
PDF format.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Arrows to show the explanations of the images.
Very detailed mind map showing a clear
understanding.
Maybe adding more images and text explanations
on the mood board would improve it.

3. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
I explained everything well but I need to add more examples and on my mind map I
need to add more details about my chosen subject, Hansel and Gretel.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
That I needed to add more detail to my mood board about the chosen subject of Hansel
and Gretel. I found that I focused more on adding details about the audience than the
actual story I was using.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
“adding more images and text explanations on the mood board would improve it.”
Because I feel that I explained the images as much as I could and it was difficult
to find related images.

4. Idea Generation

5. I could look at old art
styles and renditions of
the story to see how
different people portray
different characters
House like this, more
sweet decoration, but
rotoscoped when its in
the background
I could try drawing the
characters before making them
with shapes, this can help me
create a look for the characters
and help placing the shapes
and warping them.
Background will be in this style
but will hopefully be more
detailed
Could use an old rendition
of a character in a new
illustration style.

6. Proposal
Dimensions
12 pages (not including text pages), 15x 20 cm
Story Overview
Hansel and Gretel. The family has no money and no food. The stepmother persuades their
father to leave the children deep in the forest to save food or they’ll all starve. Hansel overhears
them, fills his pockets with pebbles and leaves a trail behind him when they leave for the forest
and they return the next day. They once again get taken into the woods but he leaves crumbs
because the door was locked so he couldn’t fill his pockets with pebbles. But the birds ate the
crumbs as he left them. So they couldn’t get out of the forest. They found a house of candy.
They were invited in by a witch, given food, and a bed. She then locked up Hansel and tried to
get him fat. After a month he was still skinny, so she decided to eat him anyway. The witch
planned to make Gretel get in the oven to ‘test how hot it was’ close the door and cook her up
and eat her too, but she saw what she was doing and tricked he witch saying she didn’t know
how, as the witch demonstrated, Gretel shoved the witch into the oven and released Hansel,
they found masses of jewels and gems in the witches house and stuffed their pockets with
them. they found their way home and their stepmother was dead, and there father was relieved
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: can be edited, and saves layers
Disadvantages: need to have Photoshop to open a PSD, Large file size, not universal.

7. Deadline
Audience
(Think about who you are targeting as your audience. Consider age, gender, class, location
and other characteristics which could define your audience.)
My target audience is between the ages of five to seven years old. This is because these
books are designed to increase the child’s reading abilities, and allow for small paragraphs of
text and a different array of illustrations, I am aiming more towards the five year olds
because they will be able to read the small paragraphs but also still rely on images and
illustrations to help tell the story. I am also trying to aim this book at both boys and girls but I
think that the content of the story will appeal more towards girls.
Production Methods
The text will be layered over the image, I will ensure that it is in a visible font to make it easy
to read, I am doing this as it gives me more room for illustrations. I have also found that in
some other popular children’s books, the writing is overlaying the illustration.
Rotoscope- I think I will use the rotoscope technique for the background and scenes of the
children’s book. I will do this because it is a way of creating a quick scene for the largest part
of the project. The backgrounds will take the longest and rotoscoping is quick, while you can
still create a detailed image.
Shapes- I will use the shapes technique for the characters, it takes longer but there are less
characters in this story, this allows me to make more detailed characters