Written Treatment - Evie

1. MUSIC VIDEO
TREATMENT
STARS AND SHARDS
LOYLE CARNER

2. Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle”
“I
used
to
know
this
ni**a
Sonny
who
was
ironically
dark
Never
consumed
by
the
money but
selling
dro
in
the
park
Became
a
main
habit
of
his,
bagging
the
piff
Cornucopias
quoting
the
man,
he
was
blagging
the
piff
It
wasn't
simple
Simpler
than
the
previous
maturity,
he
was
lacking
it
He
was
never
mischievous,
devious
was
closer
Only
relevant
if
leaving
us
He
was
too
afraid
so
he
stayed,
forced
to
believe
in
trust
Honesty
was
the
commodity
he
never
possessed
Nevertheless,
manipulate
a
woman
beating
his
chest
Reaping
the
stress,
seeking
the
breast, wreaking
assess
Hear
the
pitter-­‐patter,
missing
the
latter,
weeping
to
death
Without
a
shoulder
to
cry
on,
no
one
left
to
rely
on
He
was
followed
by
some
men
in
black like
the
belt
of
orion
In
the
report,
said
he
was
caught
dead
in
the
snort
And
was
shredded, he
never
even
embedded
a
thought
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
So
let
me
start
from
the
beginning,
I’ll
pad
the
middle
with
simple
Cutest
of
the
children
always
displaying
a
dimple
Never
talking
out
of
line
or
defined
as
he
fought
the
vine
But
an
awkward
spine
left
him
severed
over
single
Proud
in
the
corridors,
a
wrong
in
yours
While
the
janitor
was
mopping
floors
He
was
dropping
whores
on
all
fours,
left
her
begging
for
a
reason
Treason
left
him
cold,
never
froze
for
an
evening
But
the
body
heat
never
seemed
to
keep
his
body
sweet
On
another
meat,
looking
for
another
blonde
to
beat
Now
the
streets
became
his
mistress, turning
his
witness
'Cause
when
a
weak
spits,
you
don’t
know
who
be
holding
hit
list
Switch
shift,
he’s
stumbling
on
the
war
path
Whores
bark, meditating
up
in
the
raw
dark
For
more
dark,
he’s
knowing
that’s
when
the
war
starts
Cutting
more
lines
than
disabled
kids
up
in
Thorpe
Park
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
Stars
and
shards
of
glass
will
harm
if
they
meddle
So
I
said
the
life
that
you’re
living
don’t
seem
to
be
making
sense
Shaking
pence
out
the
cookie
jar,
looking
hook
on
the
bends
Losing
friends, rookie,
he
spends
all
of
his
tens
On
the
little
bit
of
leaf
that
will
leave
him
stuck
in
the
ends
He
started
to
shot,
losing
the
plot,
itching
his
scrot
Little
street
corner
located,
dropping
his
crop
Others
would
watch,
smother
the
block
under
the
spot
'Til
he
found
himself
surrounded
by
brothers
robbing
his
gwap
Didn’t
seem
to
be
the
average
type,
caught
a
badge
in
sight
Coppers
turning
foxes
and
it
just
wasn’t
the
rabbits'
night
He
wasn’t
known
for
just
a
couple
of
minutes
Scrolling
through
his
phone
trying
to
bell
a
couple
of
digits
But
nobody
would
answer
Chancer
who
took
his
last
chance
at
a
glance
In
the
drug
deal
stance
And
now
he
dance
with
the
devil
in
the
park
by
the
treble
LYRICS:
STARS & SHARDS
LOYLE CARNER

3. INITIAL IDEAS:
Stars and Shards is an upbeat UK hip-hop style song, about
a boy who has gone down the wrong path. The song is
slightly different to others in the same genre, with a guitar
being used within the music, something that hip-hop doesn’t
usually feature. For my video, I visualise a mainly muted
colour scheme to help epitomise the gritty nature of the
song. I want to use mainly outdoor locations for my video,
with estates, streets and a local park being the main ones.
This conforms to the stereotypical videos for this genre of
music. I also want to use woodland in my video to create
something different to what hip-hop music videos are
usually like- focusing on trees and clouds and playing
around with time-lapse. My video doesn’t follow a strict
narrative, however it does follow a very loose one, with a
young man being the main character within the video (hence
the song being about a boy going down the wrong path) and
I will also include a girl who is represented as the boy’s
friend. In my video I am going to edit to the beat, to follow
Goodwin’s theory that there is a ‘relationship between the
music and the visuals’. I’m not going to include any
performance in my video because the character featured in
the video is going to be who the song is about, and this is
not the artist.

4. NARRATIVE & REPRESENTATION
My music video doesn’t follow a strict narrative,
however there is a very loose narrative through
following the main character throughout the video.
As said before, the song is about a boy going down
the wrong path, so I am conveying this in the video. I
am doing this by showing the boy not ever getting
anywhere and still doing the same bad things that
he got into, in all the same places. The use of the
urban street locations help to emphasise this and
highlight the dark side of what has happened to
him. Having a loose narrative such as this will
engage the audience and give the video purpose.
The deep red lighting will help to connote danger
and these shots will be interspersed with the
woodland location that I have talked about.
Through my audience research, I found that viewers like
to watch videos for personal identity purposes, which
means that they can relate to what is happening. The
typical fan of this genre of music will be normal working
class people, so having a video in familiar urban
locations will ensure that the video is easily relatable. As
many of the audience may participate in alcohol/drug
use, seeing a by going down the wrong path will be very
familiar to some of them which helps to give them a
sense of identity. The characters in the video will be
wearing the stereotypical outfits of those of hip-hop
fans, for example hoodies and sports brands and may
be riding about on bikes which will be appealing to the
typical viewer of this genre. This video will represent
adolescence in today’s society.

5. LOCATIONS:
URBAN STREET/HOUSING ESTATES:
This location is very typical of the genre that I am using
for my music video. Many UK hip-hop artists started off
living in built up urban areas on housing estates, making
music in their bedrooms so these locations are ideal for
this type of music. I will film the main characters going
about their day to day life within these locations, outside
corner shops and in the local park and play with angles
when they are higher up e.g. on steps. I am also going to
film part of the video through a fence to really capture
the park location within the video. I want to use the skills
I learned in my test footage and play with extreme close-
ups and close-up of the characters to really convey what
the video is about.
WOODLAND AREA:
Using a woodland area in my video
gives contrast to the other urban
locations that I have used. It goes
against the stereotypical locations
that you might see in a hip-hop
video, and I feel that this works
because the actual song isn’t that
typical of hip-hop songs itself. I want
the lighting to be quite dull in these
scenes, with not too many bright
colours. I might also do some shots
at dusk, to create different lighting
styles. I will follow the main
characters in the film through the
woods and also use shots without
them. I will play with time-lapse when
filming clouds and focus on the trees
within the woods. I’d also like to play
with deep red lighting in some of
these shots, which I talk about
further within the next slide.
Using the urban locations such
as the park (swings etc.) and
having the main character as a
boy, means that the video will
follow Goodwin’s theory that
there is a ‘relationship between
the lyrics and the visuals’. For
example, when the lyric ‘corridor’
is said, the image on the screen
will be of a corridor etc.

6. FURTHER IDEAS:
When researching other music videos, I found an effect I really
liked in the Mura Masa song ‘What If I Go?’. A red lighting was
used which I thought was really effective in the video as it
contrasted well with the other shots. In order to achieve this I am
going to place some red acetate over the lens of the camera to get
a deep red glow effect on the image. With the song being about a
boy going down the wrong path, the colour red helps to connote
danger which I think fits well with the lyrics. This will help to keep
the audience interested. I am going to use this effect in the
woodland shots and also through empty underpasses with the
main character being the only person there. This will create
contrast with the main colour scheme throughout the video,
keeping the audience more interested.