analysis based on First Assessment of English Paper 1 for 5SF and 5SK 2017

2. Form 5
FIRST ASSESSMENT 2017
An analysis of common errors
PAPER 1
*Based on 5SF and 5SK papers

3. SECTION A
Who are you writing as?
Concerned ABOUT?
Write to OCPD of YOUR town
Write a FORMAL letter on the
rise in the crime rate in Taman
Sena Indah

4. FORMAT
Aina Solehah bt Amin,
No 3 Taman Sena Indah,
01000 Kangar,
Perlis.
_________________________________________
OCPD
Kangar District Police Station
01000 Kangar,
Perlis. 12 Mac 2017
F1: writer and receiver’s
addresses
F2: appropriate salutation
F3: appropriate closing
F1 = 0

5. FORMAT
• INAPPROPRIATEClosing – I want you to settle
this problem quickly.
• APPROPRIATE Closing
 I hope we can cooperate to deal with this
problem
I hope the police will take measurable action
to settle this problem as soon as possible

6. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
x First, many cases of burglary. (STRINGING)
x The burglary was a few cases every night.
(INCORRECT VERB)
x Many cases of burglary which a few cases
every night. (COMBINED CONTENTS)
Taman Sena Indah was shocked by many cases
of burglary since last week.
There were many cases of burglary reported
this month.

7. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
x Wild parties at night. (STRINGING/SIMPLY
COPYING)
x Also, we need for more police patrols. (WORD
DOES NOT FIT IN)
Many residents has reported that there were wild
parties at night. In fact, the parties usually end
very late at four to five o clock in the morning.
We need more police patrols to ensure the
residents’ safety.
There is the need to have more police patrols to
work together with the residents.
Besides, I suggest that mobile police vehicles to
be sent to monitor the area.

8. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
X It is so sad, you know. Pity the victim. I really
angry at the burglars. It was so bad of him. He
did not have sympathy.. (TOO EMOTIONAL)
X You know what? If you are the resident here,
will you feel comfortable when it is noisy at
night? You will help us to settle this problem,
rite? (QUESTIONING/ASKING ARE NEVER
ALLOWED)

9. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
X SUGGESTION: REPEATED SUGGESTION
- I suggest the police should go around
the neighbourhood to monitor the area
police who go around to monitor
= police patrol

10. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
X SUGGESTION: IRRELEVANT SUGGESTIONS
-Suggestions that are not related to the police authority
x Parents should send their teenage children to tuition class
on weekend and not let them go out and race.
x Teachers should teach the students good manners because it
is not good to disturb people.
x The chairman of Taman Sena Indah should make a time
table for the residents to take turn in monitoring the area at
night.

11. CONTENTS AND LANGUAGE
X We have asked them to lower the volume of
the music. But they did not listen to us. And I
suggest you to come and see with your own
eyes
= improper language, informal language
= grammar: never start sentences with AND,
BUT
= CORRECTION??

12. SECTION B
• QUESTION 1
• Describe your dream job
Keyword: job
DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep
repeating the same point;
Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of
work and too much focusing on feelings

13. SECTION B
• QUESTION 1
• Describe your dream job
Keyword: job
DO NOT: Just write about the job and keep
repeating the same point;
Only few descriptions of the job; the scope of
work and too much focusing on feelings

14. SECTION B
• QUESTION 1
• Describe your dream job
Keyword: job
DO NOT: Start writing with
Everyone/Everybody in this world has a
dream job. Same like me.
So do I.

15. SECTION B
• QUESTION 1
• Describe your dream job
Keyword: job
Good one: She writes about a specific job (a
pastry chef); from how she first decided to
become one, the descriptions of the job, the
place, the people, the scope of work and
reasons why she chooses the job

16. SECTION B
• QUESTION
- A story about your friend who never gives
up
- End your story with the given line
NOT
…and I said, “I am proud of you’’. After the
day, I am motivated to follow her footstep
and I will make sure…..

17. SECTION B
• QUESTION 4
- A story about your friend who never gives
up
- Explain the problems/challenges
- Elaborate the struggles/efforts
- - State the name clearly; be
consistent

18. SECTION B
• QUESTION 4
- A story about your friend who never gives
up
- She never gives up in anything she does.
- She never gives up in searching for her
mother.
- She never gives up in taking care of her
siblings.

19. SECTION B
• QUESTION 4
- A story about your friend who never gives
up
- She never gives up in anything she does.
- She put all her heart and soul into
searching for her mother .
- She was consistently patient and
responsible in taking care of her siblings.

20. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
more healthier healthier
more easy easier
more happy happier

21. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
The place has a beach
that makes me calm.
There is a beach at the
place that makes me
calm.
The place has not many
people who come.
There are not many
people come to the
place

22. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
You cannot spend too much time
on social networks. We have to
make time for your family too.
You cannot spend too much time
on social networks. You have to
make time for your family too.
We cannot spend too much time
on social networks. We have to
make time for our family too.
We need to be determined to
achieve your dreams.
We need to be determined to
achieve our dreams.
You need to be determined to
achieve your dreams.

23. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
Most youngsters have
their own social
networks such as
facebook, twitter,
instagram and
others/many
others/another.
Most youngsters have
their own social
networks accounts such
as on Facebook, Twitter
and Instagram.

24. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
A shoes A pair of shoes
A shoe
An enemies An enemy
A new friends A new friend
As a teenagers As a teenager
As teenagers
One of the student One of the students
A lots of problems A lot of problems
Lots of problems

25. Common Grammatical Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
His father was proud
with him.
His father was proud of
him
The teacher was angry
to me.
The teacher was angry
with me.
The teacher was angry
at me.

26. *angry at

27. Common Vocabulary Errors / Choice of
word
ERROR CORRECTION
Make revision Do revision
Make an action Take an action
You have to practise to do the
questions.
You have to practise to answer
the questions.
I would like to story about my
successful friend.
I would like to tell about my
successful friend.
I would like to tell a story about
my successful friend.
I very like / I very very love I really like / I extremely love

28. Common Spelling Errors
ERROR CORRECTION
Succesful
Successful
?
Untill ?
Good morning to our
principle, Pn. Aminah
?
Smilling ?
Peoples ?
Futhermre ?
Dissapointed
Dissappointed
?
Affect vs effect ?

29. PLEASE..
1. READ the questions extra carefully
2. WRITE the Question No. in your
answer sheet

30. SEE YOU IN YOUR
NEXT WRITING
GOOD LUCK!