SpringBoard Lesson on Figurative Language and revising the body of a narrative

1. Revision of Narrative Lead
● Effective writers also reflect upon the changes they make in order to
become more aware of specific techniques they use during the writing
process.
● Describe how you changed your opening. How did your change make your
opening more engaging for the reader?
Kind of Lead:
Changes I made:
Revision Reflection:

2. Can You Sense It?
Revising the Middle

3. Learning Targets
● Identify effective use of sensory details
and figurative language.
● Revise a narrative draft by adding
descriptive language.

4. Before Reading
“Show Don’t Tell”
“Don’t tell me the moon is shining, show me
the glint of the light on broken glass”
-Anton Chekhov

5. About the Author
Imma Achilike is a student writer. She
wrote this story as a student at
Naaman Forest High School in Garland,
Texas!

6. Metacognitive Markers
Use metacognitive markers to make mental notes as you read. Pay particular attention to
any words or phrases that stand out to you as confusing, powerful, or interesting.

7. Personal Narrative

8. Personal Narrative

9. Personal Narrative

10. After Reading
Complete the
Graphic
Organizer to
analyze the
organization and
use of language
in “Why Couldn’t
I Have Been
Named Ashley?”

11. After Reading
Complete the
Graphic
Organizer to
analyze the
organization and
use of language
in “Why Couldn’t
I Have Been
Named Ashley?”
Record textual
evidence of
language use in
each part of the
narrative (sensory
details, figurative
language, precise
words or phrases).

12. Learning Targets
● Identify effective use of sensory details
and figurative language.
● Revise a narrative draft by adding
descriptive language.

13. After Reading
Use Language
that ‘shows’ by
describing the
photographs
that follow,
both literally
and figuratively.

14. After Reading
Use Language
that ‘shows’ by
describing the
photographs
that follow,
both literally
and figuratively.

15. After Reading
Use Language
that ‘shows’ by
describing the
photographs
that follow,
both literally
and figuratively.

16. After Reading
Use Language
that ‘shows’ by
describing the
photographs
that follow,
both literally
and figuratively.

17. Looping

18. Language and Writer’s Craft: Punctuating
Coordinate Adjectives
Coordinate adjectives are two or more words that equally modify the same object. Use commas to
separate coordinate adjectives in a sentence.
Example: The pulsing, bass-heavy beat of the music flowed from the speakers.
In this sentence, pulsing and bass-heavy are coordinate adjectives. You can identify coordinate
adjectives with a simple test. Try to:
● reverse the order of the adjectives, and
● put and between the adjectives.
If you can do both of these things, the adjectives are coordinate and require a comma. Adjectives that
give information about size, shape, age, color, material, religion, or nationality are not coordinate
adjectives and need not be separated with commas.

19. Coordinate Adjectives
Which of the sentences below have coordinate adjectives? Add commas where
necessary.
1. Our internship program accepts only ambitious dedicated students.
2. My little French music box now lay smashed on the floor.
3. The rolling pitching tossing motion of the ship quickly made Elsie seasick.
4. New York City’s bustling teeming sidewalks and streets were unlike any in
the small town Gary had come from.
5. Grandma knitted the baby a blue wool sweater for her birthday.

20. Can You Sense It?
Review your draft and add sensory details
and figurative language. Look for
opportunities to replace non descriptive
words more precise diction. Then, check
that you have properly added commas to
coordinate adjectives.

21. Check For Understanding
Describe how you changed the
middle of your draft.