The document provides guidance on how to add more descriptive details to sentences to make writing more vivid and engaging. It encourages using a broader range of vocabulary and sensory details. It then provides examples of plain sentences and suggests how they could be improved by making them more descriptive.

1. The art of writing
descriptive
sentences
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2. GOAL
 To
add more description to lackluster
sentences
 To use a broader range of vocab and
sensory details to make our writing come
alive

3. I gave a spine tingling shriek.
I was filled with anxiety and worry as to why this island only cost me $5.00
I exclaimed as I touched the middle and the pearl began to glow.
We saw a dreadful spirit looking over him, the ancient god of chaos and anger. We
interrupted his eternal resting place.
“Silence!” the spirit boomed as loud as thunder.
I would panic and crawl into a ball.
It can change into a big black bat that feasts on your soul with a blood screaming
cry.
I was in a factory with my brothers and sisters, and now I’m in some dumb basket
after these kids came and abducted us. Ack! Help!
“Why have you trespassed in my ruins?” he boomed.
She is a lot of work. It’s almost like taking care of a little baby.

4. Example:
I am not a morning person.

5. He was nice.
Did he speak kindly? Offer assistance?
Praise me? Did he smile?

6. My room is messy.

7. Cells are cool.

8. Multiplying fractions is hard.

9. Go grab your autobiographical incident or your essay
from Comp. Unit 1.
Find 1 (just one) lackluster boring sentence you wrote.
Using what we learned today, MAKE IT BETTER. Fill out the
Google doc to show us your improved sentence.