This feedback provides guidance on improving a situational writing piece proposing either a school flea market or concert. Key points include: 1) Clearly state the proposed option and reasons for having the event, rather than asking others to choose. Elaborate on the purpose and criteria rather than just listing them. 2) When discussing the advantages of the chosen option, explain why criteria like mass participation or less preparation are important. 3) Acknowledge possible problems with the option and provide feasible solutions. 4) Compare the disadvantages of the non-chosen option rather than just saying it is not preferred. 5) Restate the proposed option and summarize its main advantages in the conclusion. Avoid beginning

1. FeedbackSituational Writing(speech)

2. State the option you have chosen – do not ask your schoolmates to choose. PROPOSE your ideaLack of background information provided  PURPOSE – why are even having the flea market/ school concert in the first place? Elaborate, not lift.Recommend to you (x)  Recommend ____ to you or suggest that you OPT for this optionNo need to capitalize your events unless they are NAMESDiscuss the event; not discuss ABOUT (x) the event“I have decided..” (x)  “I propose../ I re1commend..”Introduction

3. Need to use the criteria to decide which advantages should be highlighted!Elaborate on why you think the criteria is importantE.g. mass participation  why?E.g. less preparation  why?Para 2/3 – advantages of choice

4. “I know some of you are concerned that..”Possible problemProposed solution (be feasible)Paragraph 4 – problems of choice event

5. “I do not prefer the other one” (x)  the other event is not as good/beneficial/not preferredState advantages, then move on to disadvantagesParagraph 5 – the other event

6. Restate your option clearlySummarize main advantages of optionThanksConclusion

7. Do not begin sentence withButAndAlsoSoSo as to“and”  only related ideasOthers