The document provides feedback from multiple meetings with a client on drafts of a script. It includes notes on removing technical film terms, adding more character descriptions, correcting grammatical errors, rewording or moving certain actions and details for clarity, and removing brackets from music cues in the final draft. The client was pleased with the overall script once these changes were made.

1.  First script draft feedback:20/11/2018: 14:30
I metwiththe clienttodayand the general feedbackwasthatI needtoremove the media
technical terms(i.e.the shottypesandcameramovements)inordertomake my script
more descriptive soitisclearfor the actors to know whatto do.
 Secondscript draft feedback:22/11/2018: 12:50
In mysecondmeetingthe clientsuggestedIshouldremove the words “cutto” as thisshould
be specifiedinmyshootingscript.Ishouldalso make sure there isenoughdetail,e.g.
describe the charactersmore by includingwhatthey’rewearing,etc.
 Third script draft feedback:23/11/2018: 10:30
For my thirdmeetingthe clientgave me feedbackperindividual scene:
- In scene 1 “Chloe beginstoeagerlyplaywiththe TOY”was spottedbythe clientasa
grammatical errorthat shouldbe rectified.
- In scene 2 the quote aboutthe Christmastree beingundecoratedneededtobe
changed,due to a grammatical errorspottedbythe client.
- Must move scene 3 onto a new page.
- In scene 3 change the word “shit”by puttingitontoa new line, alsochange the word
“mouths”to “mimes”as thisismore conventional of ascript.
- In scene 3, mustchange the word“paper”to “letter”to make thisdetail more specific.
- Do not use the word“cut” as thisisto be clarifiedinthe shootingscript.
- In scene 3, the clientwantsme to re-wordthe actionof Paul readingthe lettersothat it
isclearer.
- Scene 4 needsmore descriptionaboutwhere,specifically, Chloeiswalking.
- In scene 5, considerhow,specifically,Paul will treatthe toyinthe car.
 Fourth script draft feedback:03/12/2018: 13:40
The clientadvisedthatIremove the bracketsonthe Christmasmusicaudioasit ismore
grammaticallycorrectto nothave brackets. Apart fromthisthe clientwaspleasedwithmy
overall scriptandadvisedthatit needednomore changesapart fromthe bracketsspecified.