Who said “Our greatest weakness lies in
giving up. The most certain way to
succeed is always to try just one more
time”?

A.
B.
C.
D.
E.

C.S. Lewis
Eleanor Roosevelt
Thomas Jefferson
Walt Disney
Thomas Edison
Remember these
points when selecting
and integrating
quotations in your
essay.
It is rarely effective to use an entire quoted
sentence. Long quotations tend to put your
reader to sleep. Your prose is far more
interesting and important. So use part of an
effective quotation as part of one of your
sentences.
Boring Example: According to Stoll, “Television
and computing make us more passive…and
passivity feeds into shyness” (395).
Better Example: Unfortunately, those who are
already shy may compound their problem
further as “[t]elevision and computing make us
more passive…and passivity feeds into
shyness” (Stoll 395).
After the sentence that contains the quotation,
you should have a space, parentheses, the
author’s last name, the page number,
parentheses, and a period.

Unfortunately, those who are already
shy may compound their problem
further as “[t]elevision and
computing make us more
passive…and passivity feeds into
shyness” (Stoll 395).
If you used the author’s name to introduce the
quotation, you should only put the page
number in the citation.

Stoll points out that those who are
already shy may compound their
problem further as “[t]elevision and
computing make us more
passive…and passivity feeds into
shyness” (395).
Boring Example: Stoll says, “Deep social ties are
relationships with frequent contact, deep feelings
of involvement, and broad content…[they] buffer
us from stress and lead to better social interaction”
(393).
Better Example: Stoll suggests we should look for
“deep social ties” because these bonds have
“frequent contact, deep feelings of involvement,
and broad content” that help to “buffer us from
stress and lead to better social interaction” (393).
To integrate a quotation properly within a
paragraph, a good writer usually has
(1) One sentence to introduce the quotation,
(2) a second sentence that includes the quotation,
and
(3) at least one sentence to comment on the
quotation.
Meat:
sentence
that
contains
the
quotation

Top piece of
bread: at least
one sentence
to introduce
the quotation

Bottom piece of bread: at least one
sentence to explain or comment
on the quotation (usually the
majority of the paragraph)
ORIGINAL: However, the cloning protocol does not
tamper with embryos; it tampers only with unfertilized
eggs and adult cells like those we scratch off our arms
without a second thought. Only after the fact does an
embryo emerge (which could be treated with the
utmost respect if one so chooses).
SMOOTHLY INTEGRATED QUOTATION:
Silver argues that reproductive cloning does not violate
human embryos.
He asserts that the “[cloning protocol] tampers only with
unfertilized eggs and adult cells like those we scratch off our
arms without a second thought” (343).
While Silver makes a good point, reproductive cloning is
still unnatural. The embryo is created in a laboratory by
scientists.
Silver argues that reproductive cloning does not
violate human embryos. He asserts that the
“[cloning protocol] tampers only with
unfertilized eggs and adult cells like those we
scratch off our arms without a second thought”
(343). While Silver makes a good point,
reproductive cloning is still unnatural. The
embryo is created in a laboratory by scientists.
ORIGINAL: Although their genetically determined
inclinations may be the same, [the original person and the
clone] may choose to follow those inclinations in different
ways, or not at all.
SMOOTHLY INTEGRATED QUOTATION:
The environment in which people are raised affects them more
than their genetic code.
Though the original person and his clone may share “genetically
determined inclinations,” they have the choice “to follow those
inclinations in different ways, or not all” (Silver 343).
Michael Jordan was not born a great basketball player. Though
he may have some natural ability, he became great through hard
work, perseverance, and practice. Cloning Jordan would not
guarantee a great basketball star; on the contrary, the child
would have only the raw athletic talent and would lack the
circumstances and events that made Jordan who he is.
The environment in which people are raised affects
them more than their genetic code. Though the
original person and his clone may share “genetically
determined inclinations,” they have the choice “to
follow those inclinations in different ways, or not all”
(Silver 343). Michael Jordan was not born a great
basketball player. Though he may have some natural
ability, he became great through hard work,
perseverance, and practice. Cloning Jordan would not
guarantee a great basketball star; on the contrary, the
child would have only the raw athletic talent and
would lack the circumstances and events that made
Jordan who he is.
A “dropped quotation” has the same effect on
your paper that a blob of bird poop has on
your car windshield; it’s just splattered there
with no connection to anything else, and no
one knows what to do with it.
So, whenever you use a quotation, you must
integrate the material into your text.
Though many jobs require long hours on a
computer everyday, studies have shown that
staring at a monitor screen for extended
periods of time can cause depression. “After
following the study group, the psychologists
found an average increase in depression by
about one percent for every hour spent online
per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes
isolated from the outside world and though he
or she may be social in an online setting, there
is no true human contact.
Though many jobs require long hours on a
computer everyday, studies have shown that
staring at a monitor screen for extended
periods of time can cause depression. “After
following the study group, the psychologists
found an average increase in depression by
about one percent for every hour spent online
per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes
isolated from the outside world and though he
or she may be social in an online setting, there
is no true human contact.
Though many jobs require long hours on a
computer everyday, studies have shown that
staring at a monitor screen for extended
periods of time can cause depression: “After
following the study group, the psychologists
found an average increase in depression by
about one percent for every hour spent online
per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes
isolated from the outside world and though he
or she may be social in an online setting, there
is no true human contact.
Though many jobs require long hours on a
computer everyday, studies have shown that
staring at a monitor screen for extended
periods of time can cause depression. Stoll
states, “After following the study group, the
psychologists found an average increase in
depression by about one percent for every hour
spent online per week” (393). The individual
becomes isolated from the outside world and
though he or she may be social in an online
setting, there is no true human contact.
Though many jobs require long hours on a
computer everyday, studies have shown that
staring at a monitor screen for extended
periods of time can cause depression. In a
UCLA study, psychologists determined “an
average increase in depression by about one
percent for every hour spent online per week”
(Stoll 393). The individual becomes isolated
from the outside world and though he or she
may be social in an online setting, there is no
true human contact.
People all over the world are making connections
with other people online, and though this seems
like a positive step in expanding our network of
friends, we can forget that these people in the
online world are strangers. “Online friends can’t
be depended on for help with tangible favors:
small loans, baby-sitting, help with shopping, or
advice about jobs and careers ” (Stoll 394). Though
many people find help in online support groups,
the members of the group should not be
considered true friends. They may be able to offer
advice or commiserate with an individual, but they
do not offer the human connection one finds with a
person face to face.
People all over the world are making connections
with other people online, and though this seems
like a positive step in expanding our network of
friends, we can forget that these people in the
online world are strangers. “Online friends can’t
be depended on for help with tangible favors:
small loans, baby-sitting, help with shopping, or
advice about jobs and careers ” (Stoll 394). Though
many people find help in online support groups,
the members of the group should not be
considered true friends. They may be able to offer
advice or commiserate with an individual, but they
do not offer the human connection one finds with a
person face to face.
People all over the world are making connections
with other people online. People all over the world
are making connections with other people online,
and though this seems like a positive step in
expanding our network of friends, we can forget
that these people in the online world are strangers.
Stoll states, “Online friends can’t be depended on
for help with tangible favors: small loans, babysitting, help with shopping, or advice about jobs
and careers ” (394). Though many people find
help in online support groups, the members of the
group should not be considered true friends. They
may be able to offer advice or commiserate with an
individual, but they do not offer the human
connection one finds with a person face to face.
People all over the world are making connections
with other people online. People all over the world
are making connections with other people online,
and though this seems like a positive step in
expanding our network of friends, we can forget
that these people in the online world are strangers.
These so-called friends cannot “be depended on
for help with tangible favors” (Stoll 394). Though
many people find help in online support groups,
the members of the group should not be
considered true friends. They may be able to offer
advice or commiserate with an individual, but they
do not offer the human connection one finds with a
person face to face.
Meat:
sentence
that
contains
the
quotation

Top piece of
bread: at least
one sentence
to introduce
the quotation

Bottom piece of bread: at least one
sentence to explain or comment
on the quotation (usually the
majority of the paragraph)
Ellipses (three dots) indicate that some unnecessary
words have been left out of a quotation. When
using ellipses, remember:
 When you quote just a word or short phrase, no
ellipsis is necessary.
 You do not use an ellipsis to indicate that you have
left something out of the beginning of a sentence.
 Missing words from the end or somewhere in the
middle of a sentence need to be indicated with
ellipses.
 When you quote parts of more than one sentence,
you need four dots instead of three.




Use brackets to indicate any changes you make
to quotations while fitting them into your
sentence. See the example under “Maintaining
a Smooth Sentence Style.”
Remember, rather than changing more than
two items in a short quotation, find a better
way of integrating the quotation.
Fess up!




Write an open-ended, interesting question for
discussion about “Monkey Love”
Get into groups of five
A.

B.
C.
D.
E.

Before 5:00 a.m.
Between 5:00 a.m. and 6:00 a.m.
Between 6:00 a.m. and 7:00 a.m.
Between 7:00 a.m. and 9:00 a.m.
After 9:00 a.m.













Write an open-ended, interesting question for
discussion about “Monkey Love”
Get into groups of five
Decide who woke up the earliest in your group
That person is the dealer
The dealer should take all of the cards and mix them
up face down
The dealer should deal one card to the first group
member
He or she has a minute or two to answer the question
The rest of the group should then discuss the question
for four minutes
When the four minutes are up, the dealer should deal
one card to the next group member and repeat the
same answering process
The last card is the dealer’s!


Find a short section in “Monkey Love” that is
quotable






Write the first word, ellipsis (…), the last word,
and the page number
Compare yours with the person next to you




Decide whose selection is better/more interesting

As a pair, compare your selection with another
pair




Said so well that you can’t paraphrase
Slater (or another figure) makes a point (is not telling a
story or giving an example)

Decide whose selection is better/more interesting

As a group of four, compare your selection with
another group of four


Decide whose selection is better/more interesting


What do you want to say about that quotation?
Do you have an example? Do you agree or
disagree? Do you want to elaborate?







In your group of four, brainstorm ideas.
Write notes, not complete sentences.

Now, look at the your paragraph and the
quotation.
In one sentence, what connection do you see
between the two?


Come up with at least three possible sentences.




S-E-E Paragraph
 Statement
 Evidence (quotation)
 Explanation
How can we modify the quotation to fit
our paragraph?







Choose one of the selections from your group
of eight (not the one we used as a class and not
the one you used in pairs) or find a new point
you would like to quote
Write your explanation paragraph
Look at the quotation and the explanation
paragraph and make connections between the
two in one sentence
Adjust the quotation to fit your paragraph (and
make sure it is not dropped!)
Write your one-sentence thesis statement
for Essay #2. When you have your thesis
statement and your SEE paragraph
checked off by me, you are free to go!
A.
B.
C.
D.

Using quotations
“Monkey Love”
Practice using quotations
Thesis for Essay #2
A.
B.
C.
D.

Using quotations
“Monkey Love”
Practice using quotations
Thesis for Essay #2
 Bring

two copies of your
rough draft of Essay #2
 Bring your highlighters
 Participate in the weekly
discussion (post due
Thursday and replies due
Sunday)

February 18 (101A)

  • 1.
    Who said “Ourgreatest weakness lies in giving up. The most certain way to succeed is always to try just one more time”? A. B. C. D. E. C.S. Lewis Eleanor Roosevelt Thomas Jefferson Walt Disney Thomas Edison
  • 4.
    Remember these points whenselecting and integrating quotations in your essay.
  • 5.
    It is rarelyeffective to use an entire quoted sentence. Long quotations tend to put your reader to sleep. Your prose is far more interesting and important. So use part of an effective quotation as part of one of your sentences.
  • 6.
    Boring Example: Accordingto Stoll, “Television and computing make us more passive…and passivity feeds into shyness” (395). Better Example: Unfortunately, those who are already shy may compound their problem further as “[t]elevision and computing make us more passive…and passivity feeds into shyness” (Stoll 395).
  • 7.
    After the sentencethat contains the quotation, you should have a space, parentheses, the author’s last name, the page number, parentheses, and a period. Unfortunately, those who are already shy may compound their problem further as “[t]elevision and computing make us more passive…and passivity feeds into shyness” (Stoll 395).
  • 8.
    If you usedthe author’s name to introduce the quotation, you should only put the page number in the citation. Stoll points out that those who are already shy may compound their problem further as “[t]elevision and computing make us more passive…and passivity feeds into shyness” (395).
  • 9.
    Boring Example: Stollsays, “Deep social ties are relationships with frequent contact, deep feelings of involvement, and broad content…[they] buffer us from stress and lead to better social interaction” (393). Better Example: Stoll suggests we should look for “deep social ties” because these bonds have “frequent contact, deep feelings of involvement, and broad content” that help to “buffer us from stress and lead to better social interaction” (393).
  • 10.
    To integrate aquotation properly within a paragraph, a good writer usually has (1) One sentence to introduce the quotation, (2) a second sentence that includes the quotation, and (3) at least one sentence to comment on the quotation.
  • 11.
    Meat: sentence that contains the quotation Top piece of bread:at least one sentence to introduce the quotation Bottom piece of bread: at least one sentence to explain or comment on the quotation (usually the majority of the paragraph)
  • 12.
    ORIGINAL: However, thecloning protocol does not tamper with embryos; it tampers only with unfertilized eggs and adult cells like those we scratch off our arms without a second thought. Only after the fact does an embryo emerge (which could be treated with the utmost respect if one so chooses). SMOOTHLY INTEGRATED QUOTATION: Silver argues that reproductive cloning does not violate human embryos. He asserts that the “[cloning protocol] tampers only with unfertilized eggs and adult cells like those we scratch off our arms without a second thought” (343). While Silver makes a good point, reproductive cloning is still unnatural. The embryo is created in a laboratory by scientists.
  • 13.
    Silver argues thatreproductive cloning does not violate human embryos. He asserts that the “[cloning protocol] tampers only with unfertilized eggs and adult cells like those we scratch off our arms without a second thought” (343). While Silver makes a good point, reproductive cloning is still unnatural. The embryo is created in a laboratory by scientists.
  • 14.
    ORIGINAL: Although theirgenetically determined inclinations may be the same, [the original person and the clone] may choose to follow those inclinations in different ways, or not at all. SMOOTHLY INTEGRATED QUOTATION: The environment in which people are raised affects them more than their genetic code. Though the original person and his clone may share “genetically determined inclinations,” they have the choice “to follow those inclinations in different ways, or not all” (Silver 343). Michael Jordan was not born a great basketball player. Though he may have some natural ability, he became great through hard work, perseverance, and practice. Cloning Jordan would not guarantee a great basketball star; on the contrary, the child would have only the raw athletic talent and would lack the circumstances and events that made Jordan who he is.
  • 15.
    The environment inwhich people are raised affects them more than their genetic code. Though the original person and his clone may share “genetically determined inclinations,” they have the choice “to follow those inclinations in different ways, or not all” (Silver 343). Michael Jordan was not born a great basketball player. Though he may have some natural ability, he became great through hard work, perseverance, and practice. Cloning Jordan would not guarantee a great basketball star; on the contrary, the child would have only the raw athletic talent and would lack the circumstances and events that made Jordan who he is.
  • 16.
    A “dropped quotation”has the same effect on your paper that a blob of bird poop has on your car windshield; it’s just splattered there with no connection to anything else, and no one knows what to do with it. So, whenever you use a quotation, you must integrate the material into your text.
  • 17.
    Though many jobsrequire long hours on a computer everyday, studies have shown that staring at a monitor screen for extended periods of time can cause depression. “After following the study group, the psychologists found an average increase in depression by about one percent for every hour spent online per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes isolated from the outside world and though he or she may be social in an online setting, there is no true human contact.
  • 18.
    Though many jobsrequire long hours on a computer everyday, studies have shown that staring at a monitor screen for extended periods of time can cause depression. “After following the study group, the psychologists found an average increase in depression by about one percent for every hour spent online per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes isolated from the outside world and though he or she may be social in an online setting, there is no true human contact.
  • 19.
    Though many jobsrequire long hours on a computer everyday, studies have shown that staring at a monitor screen for extended periods of time can cause depression: “After following the study group, the psychologists found an average increase in depression by about one percent for every hour spent online per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes isolated from the outside world and though he or she may be social in an online setting, there is no true human contact.
  • 20.
    Though many jobsrequire long hours on a computer everyday, studies have shown that staring at a monitor screen for extended periods of time can cause depression. Stoll states, “After following the study group, the psychologists found an average increase in depression by about one percent for every hour spent online per week” (393). The individual becomes isolated from the outside world and though he or she may be social in an online setting, there is no true human contact.
  • 21.
    Though many jobsrequire long hours on a computer everyday, studies have shown that staring at a monitor screen for extended periods of time can cause depression. In a UCLA study, psychologists determined “an average increase in depression by about one percent for every hour spent online per week” (Stoll 393). The individual becomes isolated from the outside world and though he or she may be social in an online setting, there is no true human contact.
  • 22.
    People all overthe world are making connections with other people online, and though this seems like a positive step in expanding our network of friends, we can forget that these people in the online world are strangers. “Online friends can’t be depended on for help with tangible favors: small loans, baby-sitting, help with shopping, or advice about jobs and careers ” (Stoll 394). Though many people find help in online support groups, the members of the group should not be considered true friends. They may be able to offer advice or commiserate with an individual, but they do not offer the human connection one finds with a person face to face.
  • 23.
    People all overthe world are making connections with other people online, and though this seems like a positive step in expanding our network of friends, we can forget that these people in the online world are strangers. “Online friends can’t be depended on for help with tangible favors: small loans, baby-sitting, help with shopping, or advice about jobs and careers ” (Stoll 394). Though many people find help in online support groups, the members of the group should not be considered true friends. They may be able to offer advice or commiserate with an individual, but they do not offer the human connection one finds with a person face to face.
  • 24.
    People all overthe world are making connections with other people online. People all over the world are making connections with other people online, and though this seems like a positive step in expanding our network of friends, we can forget that these people in the online world are strangers. Stoll states, “Online friends can’t be depended on for help with tangible favors: small loans, babysitting, help with shopping, or advice about jobs and careers ” (394). Though many people find help in online support groups, the members of the group should not be considered true friends. They may be able to offer advice or commiserate with an individual, but they do not offer the human connection one finds with a person face to face.
  • 25.
    People all overthe world are making connections with other people online. People all over the world are making connections with other people online, and though this seems like a positive step in expanding our network of friends, we can forget that these people in the online world are strangers. These so-called friends cannot “be depended on for help with tangible favors” (Stoll 394). Though many people find help in online support groups, the members of the group should not be considered true friends. They may be able to offer advice or commiserate with an individual, but they do not offer the human connection one finds with a person face to face.
  • 26.
    Meat: sentence that contains the quotation Top piece of bread:at least one sentence to introduce the quotation Bottom piece of bread: at least one sentence to explain or comment on the quotation (usually the majority of the paragraph)
  • 27.
    Ellipses (three dots)indicate that some unnecessary words have been left out of a quotation. When using ellipses, remember:  When you quote just a word or short phrase, no ellipsis is necessary.  You do not use an ellipsis to indicate that you have left something out of the beginning of a sentence.  Missing words from the end or somewhere in the middle of a sentence need to be indicated with ellipses.  When you quote parts of more than one sentence, you need four dots instead of three.
  • 28.
      Use brackets toindicate any changes you make to quotations while fitting them into your sentence. See the example under “Maintaining a Smooth Sentence Style.” Remember, rather than changing more than two items in a short quotation, find a better way of integrating the quotation.
  • 29.
  • 30.
      Write an open-ended,interesting question for discussion about “Monkey Love” Get into groups of five
  • 31.
    A. B. C. D. E. Before 5:00 a.m. Between5:00 a.m. and 6:00 a.m. Between 6:00 a.m. and 7:00 a.m. Between 7:00 a.m. and 9:00 a.m. After 9:00 a.m.
  • 32.
              Write an open-ended,interesting question for discussion about “Monkey Love” Get into groups of five Decide who woke up the earliest in your group That person is the dealer The dealer should take all of the cards and mix them up face down The dealer should deal one card to the first group member He or she has a minute or two to answer the question The rest of the group should then discuss the question for four minutes When the four minutes are up, the dealer should deal one card to the next group member and repeat the same answering process The last card is the dealer’s!
  • 34.
     Find a shortsection in “Monkey Love” that is quotable     Write the first word, ellipsis (…), the last word, and the page number Compare yours with the person next to you   Decide whose selection is better/more interesting As a pair, compare your selection with another pair   Said so well that you can’t paraphrase Slater (or another figure) makes a point (is not telling a story or giving an example) Decide whose selection is better/more interesting As a group of four, compare your selection with another group of four  Decide whose selection is better/more interesting
  • 35.
     What do youwant to say about that quotation? Do you have an example? Do you agree or disagree? Do you want to elaborate?     In your group of four, brainstorm ideas. Write notes, not complete sentences. Now, look at the your paragraph and the quotation. In one sentence, what connection do you see between the two?  Come up with at least three possible sentences.
  • 36.
      S-E-E Paragraph  Statement Evidence (quotation)  Explanation How can we modify the quotation to fit our paragraph?
  • 37.
        Choose one ofthe selections from your group of eight (not the one we used as a class and not the one you used in pairs) or find a new point you would like to quote Write your explanation paragraph Look at the quotation and the explanation paragraph and make connections between the two in one sentence Adjust the quotation to fit your paragraph (and make sure it is not dropped!)
  • 38.
    Write your one-sentencethesis statement for Essay #2. When you have your thesis statement and your SEE paragraph checked off by me, you are free to go!
  • 39.
    A. B. C. D. Using quotations “Monkey Love” Practiceusing quotations Thesis for Essay #2
  • 40.
    A. B. C. D. Using quotations “Monkey Love” Practiceusing quotations Thesis for Essay #2
  • 41.
     Bring two copiesof your rough draft of Essay #2  Bring your highlighters  Participate in the weekly discussion (post due Thursday and replies due Sunday)