Slides for Day 4 in CREM EWRT 1A

1. CREM EWRT 1A
Day 4

2. Reading Quiz #3: Parable Chs. 4-6
 1. Why does Lauren have to kill the dog? (It was going to
die anyway. Why does she have to shoot it again?)
 2. What happens to little Amy Dunn?
 3. How does Joanne betray Lauren?

3. Agenda / Participation for today
 Quiz
 Review: P1 and Basic Features
 Vivid descriptions: writing and
discussion.
 Review: Autobiographical
significance
 MLA Essay Formatting
 Intentional Plagiarism
 Parable Discussion
 HW for Wednesday
 One point for every contribution
you make to the full class
discussion (asking/answering
questions or sharing discussion
responses). Limit 3.
 Two points for talking during EACH
small group activity (total of 4
pts).
 Why are there only three people
who’ve sent me a bitmoji? I don’t
know. But you get participation
points for doing so.

4. Paper 1 FULL DRAFT due
in class on Wednesday for Writing Workshop
 Paper 1 Basic Requirements:
 At least 4 full pages.
 MLA format (see later slides from
today).
 An interesting title.
 Bring two copies: ONE hard copy
and the second can be electronic.
 Arriving on time with one hard
copy of a full draft will get you 25
participation points!!

5. Basic Features of a
“Remembering An
Event” Essay

6. What makes a “vivid” description?
 Specific, concrete details.
 “I wanted a button.”
 “I wanted a Snoopy button—the
one where he was wearing
sunglasses and looking cool.”
 Sensory details: not just sight, but
use multiple senses.
 “He seemed tired.”
 ”His eyes were red-rimmed and his
voice was a bit hoarse. He smelled
like he had been up all night
without a shower.”
 Figurative language: similes,
metaphors.
 “She caught me.”
 “She was like a cat who swipes at a
fly and then is surprised to catch
it.”
 Active (not passive) verbs.
 “I was told that I was fired.”
 “My boss tore up my ID card, flung
the pieces at me, and walked
away.”
 Dialogue!
 We exchanged vows.
 “I love you.”
“I know.”

7. Freewrite and Discussion
 Write at least one paragraph (5-6
sentences) that describes something
that happened to you or that you did
this morning.
 It could be as simple as brushing your
teeth or it could be as interesting as
getting a speeding ticket on the way
to school. The point is NOT how
interesting the event is.
 Rather, I want you to try to describe
the event in a vivid way, using most
or all of the strategies on the
previous slide.
 Strategies:
 Specific, concrete details.
 Sensory details: not just sight, but
use multiple senses.
 Figurative language: similes,
metaphors.
 Active (not passive) verbs.
 Dialogue (if possible).
 When you are finished, I want you to
underline and annotate all of the
strategies that you used.
 Then, be prepared to read this out
loud in your small group. Discuss:
 Which parts of each description were
especially effective?
 What could you have described more
vividly?

8. More on “Autobiographical Significance"
 What is autobiographical
significance?
 Questions to ask yourself:
 How can you help your readers
understand the significance of your
story?
 What lesson did you learn about the
world from this event?
 How did it change your worldview?
 What effect did this story have on the
person you are today?
 In all likelihood, the significance is
complicated. How did it change you
in multiple, possibly conflicting,
ways?
 (Remember: this is missing from the
Brandt essay we read.)

9. MLA Essay Formatting

10. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8xAc4yZ8VSA

11. Margins and Formatting
 1” all around
 Go to “Layout” and
adjust margins or use
custom settings
 Times New Roman 12
 Indent body paragraphs
½ inch from the margin
Header: Last Name 1
 Double Click in
Header Area
 Type your last name
 Align right
 Go to “insert” and
click on “page
number”

12. Heading: Double Spaced
Your Name
Dr. Brian Malone
EWRT 1A
21 January 2018
Title
 Original Title (not the
number of the essay)
 No italics, bold, underline,
or quotation marks
 Centered on the page
 No extra spaces (just
double spaced after your
heading and before the
body of your text)

13. .5 inch

14. Avoiding Plagiarism
 When we work on citing sources (for
the next three papers), we will talk
about how to avoid unintentional
plagiarism.
 Today, I just need to say a couple
words about intentional plagiarism.
 Some people plagiarize intentionally
because they feel intimidated by the
writing task or the deadline. If you
experience this anxiety about your
work, speak to me. Do not run the
risk of failing the course or being
expelled from school because of
plagiarism.
 Taking words from someone or
somewhere else and then changing
some of them is still plagiarism.
 All of your essays will be checked by
Turnitin.com and their algorithm
catches this type of plagiarism quite
easily.

15. Parable of the Sower
Small Group Discussion
 1. Who is the narrator? Name five
things you know about her. What
you do think about her?
 2. It's the year 2024 and things are
slightly different from our world.
Name at least three differences.
Does it seem possible that our
world may become like that world?
How might that happen?
 3. What is "hyperempathy
syndrome"? What causes it? Why
might this be a good thing? Why a
bad thing?
 4. The narrator describes a number
of different versions of God. List
them. How is the narrator's version
of God different?
 5. Why does Lauren think that the
adults are not prepared for the
worst? What do you think of her
plan?
 6. What do these first 6 chapters
make you think will happen in the
rest of the novel?

16. HW for Wednesday
 Read: Parable Chs. 7-8
 Post Discussion #5 on Canvas before
class starts.
 BRING two copies of your full essay
(one hard copy, one can be
electronic). You will get participation
points for doing this!
 Reminder: Participation for today.
 One point for every contribution you
make to the full class discussion
(asking/answering questions or
sharing discussion responses). Limit
3.
 Two points for talking during EACH
small group activity (total of 4 pts).