“CONSCIOUS”
By
Josie Waddington
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FADE IN:
SCENE 1:INT. ERYN’S ROOM. EARLY EVENING.
Eryn Miller, 15, sits on her bed deep in thought. She is
dressed up in make-up and a pretty dress, yet the bags
beneath her eyes are visible.
ERYN (V.O)
“Sometimes it feels like my eyelids are
waves. Pulling away from the shore only to
be sucked back onto the sand. Or like
biceps, rippling under weights tied to my
eyelashes crumbling back to black. Or like
magnets, you get the idea.”
Eryn glances at the time on her phone. 10:58.
(CONT)
“Time at this time goes much quicker, when
I’m watching the clock. Oh I wish I could
skip it, cut my life in two, I would do it
in a heartbeat! No more visions or dreams,
no more 10 kilo bags under my eyes, they
look like those craters on the moon now,
except probably deeper and-
A voice interrupts her thoughts.
ERYN’S MUM (SHOUTS)
“ERYN? ARE YOU GETTING READY FOR BED?”
Heels are heard approaching the door. Eryn quickly rolls
off her bed. Eryn’s mum pokes her head around the door.
(CONT)
“DARLING?”
ERYN
“I’m doing it.”
She wipes a cotton pad harshly over her eyes in the mirror
and traces her under eye gently, staring.
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ERYN’S MUM
“It’s getting later and later Eryn, it’s
not healthy.”
Eryn doesn’t respond as she continues to look at her
reflection, entranced.
(CONT)
“Come on darling, I want you asleep by 11.
You don’t want to be tired for tomorrow.”
Eryn snaps out of it and wipes the rest of her face
quickly. She throws her cotton pad and it lands next
to the bin where many others lie. She takes some
pajamas out from under her pillow.
ERYN
“I will be Mum I always am, it doesn’t
make a difference how early I try.”
ERYN’S MUM
(sighs)”Goodnight my little 15 year old,
that’s the last time I’ll be able to say
that!”
Her voice trails off as she turns off the light and walks
down the hall.
Eryn rolls her eyes and lies back on her pillows, looking
up at the ceiling. Her eyes begin to close.
ERYN (V.O)
(Fades out) “Please, please, please…”
(CUT TO)
EXT. ERYN’S DOORSTEP.
SCENE 2
Robber #1’s eyes open from his balaclava clad
face and he looks to his right to Robber #2 in
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an identical get up.
ROBBER #1
(whispers in Robber #2’s ear)”Let’s go”
Robber #2 nods and montage of the robbers trying to find a
way in ensues.
Robber #2 tests a window and it pushes open slightly. They
enter through the window and creep into the hall.
CUT TO:
At the sound of the window opening, shot cuts to Eryn
opening her eyes in bed with a shocked expression. She
looks to the side and stares back at the ceiling breathing
heavily.
CUT TO:
ROBBER #2
(Mouths to Robber #1)”This way…”
Robber #2 points to Eryn’s bedroom door and Robber #1
follows his arm. They creep to the door and Robber #1 gets
ready to open it.
CUT TO:
INT. ERYNS ROOM.DIMLY LIT FROM BEDSIDE LAMP.
SCENE 3
As the door opens Eryn turns over and the robbers creep
into her room. Robber #2 motions to Eryn’s shape under the
duvet and clasps his hands next to his head, showing that
she is asleep.
They then begin to search the room as Eryn listens
intently.
ERYN (V.O)
(Heavy breathing)”Here we are again. At
least I hope we are-“
Stubs his toe on the edge of the bed and grabs his foot in
pain
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ROBBER #1
(Muffled moan)”Ahhhh-ha-ah-ah”
Eryn frowns and tries to look round.
ERYN (V.O)
“Oh God I don’t know! I need to see.”
She closes her eyes tight, slows her breathing and turns
over, as if she was sleeping. The robbers freeze and stare
at her with worried expressions.
ROBBER #2
(Motioning wildly at Robber #1 in a hushed
tone)”Shut up! That was you and your ruddy
toe now shut up!”
ROBBER #1
“I think my toe is broken, I wacked it
straight onto this great metal bloody
bedpost!”
ROBBER #2
“I don’t care if your whole foot is
hanging off, keep your mouth shut! You
could have woken her”
ROBBER #1
“You’re making more noise than me now-
ROBBER #2
“I am not”
ROBBER #1
“You definitely are-“
Robber #2 motions violently for silence with a swift cut
along his neck with his hand. Robber #1 stops and closes
his mouth tightly.
CUT TO:
Eryn holds her mouth tightly closed and breaths deeply,
keeping her eyes shut.
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ERYN (V.O)
“They’ve definitely just walked into my
bed.”
She peeks out from the duvet quickly.
(CONT)
“Yep, poor thing. I’ve done it a million
times.”
Robber #1 stares down at his toe with a pained expression
as Robber #2 rolls his eyes.
(CONT)
“Ugh, I can’t figure it out, how could
they be real? What are they here for?”
Robber #2 ushers Robber #1 along and montage ensues as they
both begin to move items around the room, looking for
something.
Eryn watches with confusion.
Robber #2 draws back the curtain and a ring is sat on the
windowsill. His eyes widen, as do Robber #1’s and Eryn’s at
the sight of it.
ROBBER #2
“This is it!”
ERYN (V.O)
“What is that?”
Robber #1 swipes it out from under Robber #2’s gaze and
puts it in his pocket.
ROBBER #1
“Let’s get out of here…”
He turns and walks into the bedpost once again.
ROBBER #2
“Watch out for the bed son!”
Robber #2 winces and limps out, followed by Robber #1.
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Eryn lies in bed, her face confused and body paralyzed.
Once she hears the door slam she jumps out of bed and
stares at the empty windowsill. It is empty.
ERYN
“That wasn’t mine...”
She holds her head and suddenly feels dizzy as she sways
from side to side falling onto her bed.
(CONT)
(eyes closing)”That ring wasn’t mine.”
INT. ERYNS ROOM. SUN COMING THROUGH THE GAP IN THE
CURTAINS.
SCENE 4
Eryn’s eyes slowly open and she sees the open curtains. She
hears the sound of a shrill happy birthday candle, one of
the ones that sings the song when it is lit, and boots
along the hallway.
ERYN’S MUM
“DARLING! ITS YOUR BIRTHDAY!”
She bursts into the room and Eryn is still looking around,
perplexed.
(CONT)
“Happy Birthday my beautiful Eryn! My
beautiful 16 year old-“
She shoves a large tray with a cake, presents and various
breakfast items on, into Eryn’s lap.
ERYN
“Mum, what happened? Is everything gone?”
Eryn’s mum strokes her cheek gently and chuckles.
ERYN’S MUM
“I’m sure it’s just another dream darling,
forget it. Now open your presents!”
Eryn casts her eyes down, still half asleep.
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ERYN
(muttering)”But it was so real…”
ERYN’S MUM
(pushing a present into Eryn’s hands)”This
one, open this one, I spent so long
choosing it!”
Eryn takes the present and unwraps it slowly, smiling
slightly. She rips off the wrapping to expose a black box.
Eryn’s mum smiles largely.
ERYN
“Here we go…”
She opens the box to see the ring she had seen on her
windowsill the night before, sat in the box in front of
her. Her face goes wide and she gasps. The ring glints in
the sunlight of the open curtain.
FADE OUT.
THE END

Conscious script 1

  • 1.
  • 2.
    2 FADE IN: SCENE 1:INT.ERYN’S ROOM. EARLY EVENING. Eryn Miller, 15, sits on her bed deep in thought. She is dressed up in make-up and a pretty dress, yet the bags beneath her eyes are visible. ERYN (V.O) “Sometimes it feels like my eyelids are waves. Pulling away from the shore only to be sucked back onto the sand. Or like biceps, rippling under weights tied to my eyelashes crumbling back to black. Or like magnets, you get the idea.” Eryn glances at the time on her phone. 10:58. (CONT) “Time at this time goes much quicker, when I’m watching the clock. Oh I wish I could skip it, cut my life in two, I would do it in a heartbeat! No more visions or dreams, no more 10 kilo bags under my eyes, they look like those craters on the moon now, except probably deeper and- A voice interrupts her thoughts. ERYN’S MUM (SHOUTS) “ERYN? ARE YOU GETTING READY FOR BED?” Heels are heard approaching the door. Eryn quickly rolls off her bed. Eryn’s mum pokes her head around the door. (CONT) “DARLING?” ERYN “I’m doing it.” She wipes a cotton pad harshly over her eyes in the mirror and traces her under eye gently, staring.
  • 3.
    3 ERYN’S MUM “It’s gettinglater and later Eryn, it’s not healthy.” Eryn doesn’t respond as she continues to look at her reflection, entranced. (CONT) “Come on darling, I want you asleep by 11. You don’t want to be tired for tomorrow.” Eryn snaps out of it and wipes the rest of her face quickly. She throws her cotton pad and it lands next to the bin where many others lie. She takes some pajamas out from under her pillow. ERYN “I will be Mum I always am, it doesn’t make a difference how early I try.” ERYN’S MUM (sighs)”Goodnight my little 15 year old, that’s the last time I’ll be able to say that!” Her voice trails off as she turns off the light and walks down the hall. Eryn rolls her eyes and lies back on her pillows, looking up at the ceiling. Her eyes begin to close. ERYN (V.O) (Fades out) “Please, please, please…” (CUT TO) EXT. ERYN’S DOORSTEP. SCENE 2 Robber #1’s eyes open from his balaclava clad face and he looks to his right to Robber #2 in
  • 4.
    4 an identical getup. ROBBER #1 (whispers in Robber #2’s ear)”Let’s go” Robber #2 nods and montage of the robbers trying to find a way in ensues. Robber #2 tests a window and it pushes open slightly. They enter through the window and creep into the hall. CUT TO: At the sound of the window opening, shot cuts to Eryn opening her eyes in bed with a shocked expression. She looks to the side and stares back at the ceiling breathing heavily. CUT TO: ROBBER #2 (Mouths to Robber #1)”This way…” Robber #2 points to Eryn’s bedroom door and Robber #1 follows his arm. They creep to the door and Robber #1 gets ready to open it. CUT TO: INT. ERYNS ROOM.DIMLY LIT FROM BEDSIDE LAMP. SCENE 3 As the door opens Eryn turns over and the robbers creep into her room. Robber #2 motions to Eryn’s shape under the duvet and clasps his hands next to his head, showing that she is asleep. They then begin to search the room as Eryn listens intently. ERYN (V.O) (Heavy breathing)”Here we are again. At least I hope we are-“ Stubs his toe on the edge of the bed and grabs his foot in pain
  • 5.
    5 ROBBER #1 (Muffled moan)”Ahhhh-ha-ah-ah” Erynfrowns and tries to look round. ERYN (V.O) “Oh God I don’t know! I need to see.” She closes her eyes tight, slows her breathing and turns over, as if she was sleeping. The robbers freeze and stare at her with worried expressions. ROBBER #2 (Motioning wildly at Robber #1 in a hushed tone)”Shut up! That was you and your ruddy toe now shut up!” ROBBER #1 “I think my toe is broken, I wacked it straight onto this great metal bloody bedpost!” ROBBER #2 “I don’t care if your whole foot is hanging off, keep your mouth shut! You could have woken her” ROBBER #1 “You’re making more noise than me now- ROBBER #2 “I am not” ROBBER #1 “You definitely are-“ Robber #2 motions violently for silence with a swift cut along his neck with his hand. Robber #1 stops and closes his mouth tightly. CUT TO: Eryn holds her mouth tightly closed and breaths deeply, keeping her eyes shut.
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    6 ERYN (V.O) “They’ve definitelyjust walked into my bed.” She peeks out from the duvet quickly. (CONT) “Yep, poor thing. I’ve done it a million times.” Robber #1 stares down at his toe with a pained expression as Robber #2 rolls his eyes. (CONT) “Ugh, I can’t figure it out, how could they be real? What are they here for?” Robber #2 ushers Robber #1 along and montage ensues as they both begin to move items around the room, looking for something. Eryn watches with confusion. Robber #2 draws back the curtain and a ring is sat on the windowsill. His eyes widen, as do Robber #1’s and Eryn’s at the sight of it. ROBBER #2 “This is it!” ERYN (V.O) “What is that?” Robber #1 swipes it out from under Robber #2’s gaze and puts it in his pocket. ROBBER #1 “Let’s get out of here…” He turns and walks into the bedpost once again. ROBBER #2 “Watch out for the bed son!” Robber #2 winces and limps out, followed by Robber #1.
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    7 Eryn lies inbed, her face confused and body paralyzed. Once she hears the door slam she jumps out of bed and stares at the empty windowsill. It is empty. ERYN “That wasn’t mine...” She holds her head and suddenly feels dizzy as she sways from side to side falling onto her bed. (CONT) (eyes closing)”That ring wasn’t mine.” INT. ERYNS ROOM. SUN COMING THROUGH THE GAP IN THE CURTAINS. SCENE 4 Eryn’s eyes slowly open and she sees the open curtains. She hears the sound of a shrill happy birthday candle, one of the ones that sings the song when it is lit, and boots along the hallway. ERYN’S MUM “DARLING! ITS YOUR BIRTHDAY!” She bursts into the room and Eryn is still looking around, perplexed. (CONT) “Happy Birthday my beautiful Eryn! My beautiful 16 year old-“ She shoves a large tray with a cake, presents and various breakfast items on, into Eryn’s lap. ERYN “Mum, what happened? Is everything gone?” Eryn’s mum strokes her cheek gently and chuckles. ERYN’S MUM “I’m sure it’s just another dream darling, forget it. Now open your presents!” Eryn casts her eyes down, still half asleep.
  • 8.
    8 ERYN (muttering)”But it wasso real…” ERYN’S MUM (pushing a present into Eryn’s hands)”This one, open this one, I spent so long choosing it!” Eryn takes the present and unwraps it slowly, smiling slightly. She rips off the wrapping to expose a black box. Eryn’s mum smiles largely. ERYN “Here we go…” She opens the box to see the ring she had seen on her windowsill the night before, sat in the box in front of her. Her face goes wide and she gasps. The ring glints in the sunlight of the open curtain. FADE OUT. THE END