Error correction 3ºe4 nov17

1. Correct the errors contained in the sentences below:
They contain of 67% Sports enthusiasts and 33% couch potatoes whom want to change
their lifestyle
They contain 67% Sports enthusiasts and 33% couch potatoes who want to change their
lifestyle
We are making a survey in order to improve our new product
We are carrying out / conducting a survey in order to improve our new product
How often do you eat healthy in a week
How often do you eat healthily / healthy food
In the end we asked them to give us a small feedback to our concept. It was
predominant positive like…
In the end we asked them to give us a small feedback on our concept. It was
predominantly positive but…
Every stakeholder is able to have an overview of attendances
This enables every stakeholder to have/get an overview of attendance patterns
In fact, we wanted to compare both of teachers and student's opinion about how
disturbing do they find attendance lists
In fact, we wanted to compare both teachers’ and students’ opinion about how disturbing
they find attendance lists
Would they welcome the digital improvement for attendance list to answer to our
hypothesis that it consists a loss of time and the disturbing step of class proceedings
Would they welcome the digital improvement for attendance lists to answer/address our
hypothesis? It consists of a loss of time and is a disturbing step in class proceedings.
If it is conclusive, in a mind of growth we will diffuse the idea of Uniscan to other
university or/and school of Madrid next year
If it is conclusive, in a spirit of growth we will diffuse/spread the Uniscan concept to other
universities and/or schools in Madrid next year
Price is also a disadvantage, following the fact that is uncomfortable to wear them and
their practicality
Another disadvantage is the price, and the fact that they are uncomfortable and
impractical to wear

2. More than 70% would like to find the brand in normal stores there is even though a
chance the idea can be sold on the Internet or our own stores
More than 70% would like to find the brand in brick-and-mortar stores there is even a
possibility the idea could be sold on the Internet or in our own stores
With this, we create a library of video games to which any subscriber can access from
his television and/or computer
We could hereby/herewith create a library of video games any subscriber can access
from their television and/or computer.
However we also intended to create a new "gamer" culture prompting with our modest
price to consumers of less usual video games. Consumers will no longer have to move
from home to get their favorite games, Downstream takes you straight home.
However, with our modest price, we also intended to create a new "gamer" culture for
consumers of niche video games. Consumers will no longer have to leave their home to
get their favorite games, Downstream brings video games straight to your place.
In one hand we want to know how big the market is, so to have an average of potential
players, on the other hand we want to know about their habits and if they use similar
platforms...
On the one hand we wanted to know how big the market was, so as to get a better
understanding of our potential customers. On the other hand we wanted to know about
their habits and if they use similar platforms...
Another important point in our strategy was to know the price per month for Downstream.
We also asked for the money people spent per year in video games in order to put a
similar or lower price.
Another important point in our strategy was to establish / set the monthly fee for
Downstream. We also asked about the money people spent per year on video games in
order to charge a similar or lower price.
If the person answers "no" he was done with the survey
If the person answered "no" they were done with the survey
76.3 answered that they will be able to pay 10 euros per month, very similar price to
Netflix, so we can tell that having Netflix as a reference when creating this app, people
directly relate the price to the Netflix one
76.3 percent answered that they would consider paying 10 euros per month, a very
similar price to Netflix. Therefore we can definitely use Netflix as a reference /
benchmark.
This confusion matches with the fact that 70% of the respondents consider sweet pizzas
to be more suited for desserts.
This confusion matches the fact that 70% of the respondents consider sweet pizzas to
be more suited for desserts.

3. There are two types of consumers, the students that share their knowledge by
uploading their notes and by getting profits of it, and the students that download these
notes and get to understand what they didn't know just by paying a low amount of
money
There are two types of consumers: the students who share their knowledge by
uploading their notes and by getting profits from it (them), and the students that
download these notes and get to understand what they didn't know just by paying a
small amount of money
Being ourselves students helps us to understand better their needs
Being students ourselves helps us to better understand their needs
This option will give us information about how and to who we should focus our app
This option will give us information about how and at whom we should aim our app
Actually, they all like to have money. Moreover when you earn it thanks to your
knowledge
Actually, we like to have money, even more so when you earn it thanks to your
knowledge