1. Here shows what I done to improve my documentary using
In the first paragraph I added synonymous making it longer but also making well-structured.
I added more connectives and more words such as short film I added /documentary to
show people who would be reading this for the first time they would know what we’re
talking about.
In the last draft I added more conventions even if I
didn’t explain them I showed we learnt quite a few
other conventions and making it a bit longer.

2. Here I added more adjectives to describe
more and give out the purpose of this review
of the documentary and what was the
purpose.
In the first draft there weren’t much detail and in this last
one I added extra information and more detail by adding
more sentences into it.

3. As you can see in my three other drafts on the blog you can clearly see the changes and all
the rest I done was mostly what I done was re-read it again proof read and see if it made
sense reading out loud so I change few words and sentences through the Review making
more sense and adding more connectives and adjectives.
This paragraph I didn’t do much changing but only re-
worded as it didn’t make sense.
I added more connectives and adjectives telling
more of a descriptive way about the sound being
muffled.

4. Here also I’ve used electronically gadgets to check my spelling and here I’ve used misspelling
of the word inconvenient.