Everyone must have a dream of being a hero. No matter what kind of hero is, he or she must be sanctity in their heart. Marvel movies have abundant superheroes which give impressive memory among audiences. As a result, people began to imagine how can they have super power accidently. However, dream is still dream. Captain America and Iron man are those who become the part of my dream. They became my idol since the first time I saw them in the movie. But they have different status or powers in the movie. In order to specify the difference, I will compare them following. First of all, both heroes are normal people but they are marvelous. At the beginning, captain America is only a weak soldier. Once Iron man’s father Howard Stark inject super soldier serum into his body. He become stronger and faster. He fights with bad guy called red skull. Similarly, Iron man is faster and stronger because his powerful armor. He also fights with a lot of bad characters in the movie like aliens. Secondly, they have different kinds of weapons. Captain America holds a shield with a Vibranium which can defense all the attack from no matter the weapons are. The shield cannot be heavy weapons but can be the most useful. Captain will never to worry about the broken issues. Likewise, Iron man’s suits are made by Titanium. Although it is not as strong as Vibranium, it can defense most attack from enemy. The weapon used by Iron man are small missiles, laser light, and the electromagnetic interference. Finally, their abilities are shown in different ways. As the leader and captain of Avengers. Captain America, have to lead, to unite the whole team and to fight with enemys. Unlike Captain America, Iron man play a role as ammo provider. Also, he can help to communicate with the government people in order to help their missions. All in all, two super heroes are different. But what they give us is a sense of memory of being a hero of ourselves. Dimension 3 = excellent 2 =average/good 1 = below average 0 = poor Purpose/ task Accomplishes the task. Essay is well written using the appropriate elements of the assigned rhetoric. (narrative, argumentative, comparative, cause-effect, response, process analysis) Has 5 to 6 complete paragraphs Attempts to accomplish the task. Uses most of the elements of the assigned rhetoric. Has 4 complete paragraphs Attempts to accomplish the task using some of the elements of the assigned rhetoric. Has 3 complete paragraphs Attempts to accomplish the task. Attempts to use little to no elements of the assigned rhetoric. Introduction Paragraph Has a strong introduction paragraph. Includes a hook and background information to introduce the topic and connect the reader to the topic of the essay. Has an average introduction paragraph. Has some background or connecting information, but needs more development to help connect with the reader to the topic. Has a weak introduction paragraph. Lacks a hook or lacks needed background inform ...

1. Everyone must have a dream of being a hero. No matter what
kind of hero is, he or she must be sanctity in their heart. Marvel
movies have abundant superheroes which give impressive
memory among audiences. As a result, people began to imagine
how can they have super power accidently. However, dream is
still dream. Captain America and Iron man are those who
become the part of my dream. They became my idol since the
first time I saw them in the movie. But they have different
status or powers in the movie. In order to specify the difference,
I will compare them following.
First of all, both heroes are normal people but they are
marvelous. At the beginning, captain America is only a weak
soldier. Once Iron man’s father Howard Stark inject super
soldier serum into his body. He become stronger and faster. He
fights with bad guy called red skull. Similarly, Iron man is
faster and stronger because his powerful armor. He also fights
with a lot of bad characters in the movie like aliens.
Secondly, they have different kinds of weapons. Captain
America holds a shield with a Vibranium which can defense all
the attack from no matter the weapons are. The shield cannot be
heavy weapons but can be the most useful. Captain will never to
worry about the broken issues. Likewise, Iron man’s suits are
made by Titanium. Although it is not as strong as Vibranium, it
can defense most attack from enemy. The weapon used by Iron
man are small missiles, laser light, and the electromagnetic
interference.
Finally, their abilities are shown in different ways. As the
leader and captain of Avengers. Captain America, have to lead,
to unite the whole team and to fight with enemys. Unlike
Captain America, Iron man play a role as ammo provider. Also,
he can help to communicate with the government people in

2. order to help their missions.
All in all, two super heroes are different. But what they give us
is a sense of memory of being a hero of ourselves.
Dimension
3 = excellent
2 =average/good
1 = below average
0 = poor
Purpose/
task
Accomplishes the task. Essay is well written using the
appropriate elements of the assigned rhetoric. (narrative,
argumentative, comparative, cause-effect, response, process
analysis)
Has 5 to 6 complete paragraphs
Attempts to accomplish the task. Uses most of the elements of
the assigned rhetoric.
Has 4 complete paragraphs
Attempts to accomplish the task using some of the elements of
the assigned rhetoric.
Has 3 complete paragraphs
Attempts to accomplish the task.
Attempts to use little to no elements of the assigned rhetoric.
Introduction Paragraph
Has a strong introduction paragraph.
Includes a hook and background information to introduce the
topic and connect the reader to the topic of the essay.
Has an average introduction paragraph. Has some background or
connecting information, but needs more development to help
connect with the reader to the topic.

3. Has a weak introduction paragraph.
Lacks a hook or lacks needed background information to
understand the topic.
Lacks necessary background information about the topic.
Thesis
Statement
Has a clear thesis sentence that includes the topic and main idea
(the writer’s idea or opinion about the topic) that is appropriate
for the assigned rhetoric.
Has a thesis, but needs to be more developed. The topic or main
idea (the writer’s idea or opinion about the topic) may not be
clear.
The thesis is not clear or lacks main idea (the writer’s idea or
opinion about the topic) May not be appropriate for the
assigned rhetoric.
Lacks thesis sentence.
Unity
ALL supporting body paragraphs and sentences clearly support
or explain the topic and main idea of the essay.
Most paragraphs and sentences support topic and main idea.
Some sentences may not be necessary or don’t explain or focus
on the main idea.
Few paragraphs or sentences support the topic and main idea.
Sentences are not clear. Seems to go off into other topics. Not
focused.
Lacks unity
Coherence
All paragraphs and sentences have a logical order that is easy to
follow and understand. Paragraphs have a topic sentence,
logical supporting details and conclusion sentence. Paragraphs
are well developed.

4. Most paragraphs and sentences attempt to have some logical
order to follow and understand. They have a beginning, middle
and ending, but needs more development.
Many paragraphs and sentences are no coherent. Order of
sentences is confusing. May lack topic sentence, logical
supporting details or conclusion.
Little to no coherence.
Conclusion
Paragraph
Has a strong and clear
conclusion paragraph that supports the main idea and points in
each of the supporting paragraphs. Restates the main idea in
different words, expands on the meaning of the main idea,
offers a suggestion, or a prediction, the result, the benefit.
Attempts to have a conclusion. The paragraph tries to support
the main idea, but it is a little unclear. Usually it is confusion
about the main idea for the essay.
Conclusion paragraph is not clear. Just restates the topic
sentence and or points of the essay. Doesn’t have a solid main
idea.
Does not have a concluding paragraph. Short and blunt.
Transition Words
Uses a variety of different transition words or phrases to
introduce each paragraph. Uses appropriate connecting words in
each paragraph.
Some paragraphs have a transition word or phrase to introduce a
new paragraph topic. Paragraphs have some connecting words
through out. May lack variety of word choices.
Paragraphs use a few transition words through out the essay.
Word choices may be repetitive.

5. Paragraphs lack transition and connecting words.
Vocabulary
Uses a variety of appropriate academic vocabulary that are
accurate to their meanings.
Uses correct word choices.
Uses correct spelling.
Attempts to use academic vocabulary, but has some wrong word
choices according to their meanings.
Most words have correct spelling.
Uses some academic vocabulary words.
Many spelling errors or incorrect word choices.
May be difficult to understand due to vocabulary.
Cannot understand many words.
Uses slang or inappropriate words for academic writing.
Grammar
Readability
Demonstrates a high degree of control of grammar usage.
Uses a variety sentence types that are complete. Uses commas
correctly. Uses appropriate verb agreement and tenses. Uses
articles, adjectives and adverbs correctly.
Demonstrates some control of grammar usage.
Has some errors, but it can still be easily understood.
Demonstrates a little control of grammar usage.
Grammar errors make it difficult to read and understand.
Very difficult to read and understand. A lot of correction is
needed.
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