rationale feeback

1. My pitch and feedback

2. How can this
relate to
mind
• I am going to make my advert relate to
mental health as it is going to spread
awareness to mental health for people who
are in college who are struggling with the
work load and then therefor they may be
struggling with poor mental health.

3. My pitch
My advertisement is going to set in a college and feature people who are
between the ages of 16-18 (this is also the age range for my target audience).
my advertisement will involve two students who will listen to music to improve
their mental health
I am going incorporate music into my advertisement as when I done my
research into my target audience, I found that many people use music to
destress

4. Evidence to support my pitch

5. 1st Feedback

6. I showed my rational
to two people and
asked their
opinions on it. The
first question I
asked was what
did you think of my
advert?
The first person I asked said that they liked the
idea of my advert however it is lacking detail.
It was suggested by this person that one of
the students should be struggling with mental
health and the second student can help him.
The second person the suggest that their
should be more detail they said “why is the
student suffering with mental health, is it
college related ?”

7. Changes to my
advert
• After receiving feedback I decided to
change my advert slightly.
• In my original plan I was going to have
two students who where suffering
with mental health. In the second plan
for my advert it shows one student
who is struggling with college work
and that’s is why they haver poor
mental health. Then their friend will
suggest that the listen to music and
this will improve their mental health.

8. 2nd feedback

9. After showing
people what I
was going to
change about
my advert this
is what they
had to add.
• The first person said how they liked it better
than the first draft and it also. One of the
improvements that they liked the idea you
will be able to tell who is struggling with
mental health ass this will help the story of
advert flow better.
• The second person liked how it was now
spreading awareness for people who suffer
with mental health who are of a younger age
as the majority of adverts she sees about
mental health are aimed at adults.