Slides for Day 13 in EWRT 211

1. EWRT 211
Day 13
Paper 3: Conclusion and Peer Review

2. Business / Agenda
 Paper 3 is due on Canvas Thursday night (by
midnight).
 Everyone who is here (including ghosts) gets 13
points!
 Everyone in your House who has a complete draft
gets 5 more House Points!
 (We’ll do a House Point check-in on Weds.)
 What does the word “convene” mean?
 Agenda:
 Writing your Conclusion
 Peer Review Activity
 Evaluation

3. Sample Paper 3 Conclusion

4. 1. Re-emphasize the important of the
thesis statement.

5. 2. Explain the “So What?”
Why does this matter?

6. 3. Propose a course of action

7. In your own conclusion, you should:
 1. Re-emphasize the importance of your thesis.
 And then you can choose to do either (or both):
 2. Explain why this matters. The “So What?”
 3. Propose a course of action to the reader.
 You will need a conclusion for your draft on Thursday.

8. Preparation for Peer Review
1. Everyone should have two hard (paper)
copies of his or her draft. Please get
them out.
2. If you don’t have two copies of your
essay, please go and make them. If you
don’t have your essay finished, please
see me after we get started.
3. Everyone will receive a copy of the
peer review worksheet.

9. Mark the following parts of one copy of your essay,
using brackets to designate the beginning and ending
of each section:
1. Your MLA formatted header and heading
2. Your original title
3. Your introduction to the essay
4. Your thesis
5. Your conclusion

10. Title
Intro:
three
paragraphs
Thesis
Header
Heading
Student 1
Pretty Good Student
Really Good Instructor
EWRT 211
22 October 2017
Self-Confidence and Its Relation to Reality
Self-confidence seems like the key to success, or, at least, the first step to success.
If a person has self-confidence, he or she has won half the battle. Those people
who have self-confidence at work, school, and in their daily life always appear on
top of world. Life seems to go right for these people, and they always seem to
present themselves as calm, collected, and successful in their endeavors.
According to Merriam-Webster, self-confidence is “confidence in oneself and in
one's powers and abilities” (“self-confidence”).
In Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets, Gilderoy Lockhart illustrates
both the positive and negative consequences of high self-confidence.

11. Using the same copy, underline or bracket the following parts in
your Introduction:
6. A properly integrated and cited quotation from a dictionary or
encyclopedia.
7. Where you have explained the definition of the trait in your
own words.
8. A properly integrated and cited quotation from a secondary
source.
9. Where you have used an example of your own.
10. Where you have divided your trait into parts (positive and
negative or types)
11. Introduced the novel and your character

13. In your first body paragraph after the thesis, delineate the
following characteristics:
12.Your topic sentence (POINT)
13.Context (background information that explains the situation)
14.At least one example (INFORMATION)
15.At least one EXPLANATION (of your INFORMATION).
16.Your Transition

14. One of the clearest cases of Lockhart’s overconfidence in
his knowledge is when he tries to fix Harry’s broken arm. In this
scene, Harry has won the Quidditch game, but has crashed into
the ground, dazed, with his left arm broken. Although Harry
demands to be taken to the school infirmary, Lockhart steps in
and insists on fixing his arm. However, what Lockhart manages
to do instead is to remove all of the bones from Harry’s arm!
Even worse, after he has done so, Lockhart is unable to admit
that he should not have tried to help. He tells Harry that, “Well,
that can sometimes happen. But the point is, the bones are no
longer broken. That’s the thing to bear in mind” (173). Not only
has Lockhart failed to solve the problem, but he has actually
made matters worse. His self-confidence led him to take a risk,
but it was a risk that he shouldn’t have taken. And, even worse,
this quotation makes it clear that he does not recognize this.
Not only is Lockhart wrong about his abilities,
Context
Illustration
Explanation
Explanation
Illustration

15. This session is geared toward revision—not editing. While you
may circle errors you notice in the text, refrain from making
editing suggestions, that is spelling, grammar, and word choice
suggestions.
Your job as a reader is to answer the questions on the handout.
These questions will help you help the writer to improve the
paper in terms of organization, content, integrating quotations,
and MLA style.
If you don’t know the answer to a question, ask me. I will be
happy to help you.
This is not an editing exercise;
it is a revision process.

16. When you are done thoroughly responding to
the revision questions.
1. Bring the paper and your notes to me so I
can record your work.
2. Return the paper and your notes to the
author.
3. Work on your own paper until we end the
writing workshop.
4. When you are both finished, you may ask
and answer questions together.

17. Follow the directions on the handout. Respond to
each six parts carefully and completely.
A good critical reading does three things: It lets the writer know how the reader
understands the point of the story, praises what works best, and indicates where the
draft could be improved.
1. Evaluate how effectively the trait is introduced.
Summarize: Tell the writer what you understand from reading the introduction:
definition of character trait? Division of the trait into to two or three parts? How it
applies or is related to a character from Chamber of Secrets?
Praise: Point to the place where the trait is defined and described the most
effectively — for example, where it is described clearly, vividly and convincingly,
where there is a good example, or where it is clearly applied or related to a specific
Chamber of Secrets character.
Critique: Tell the writer where readers might need more information about character
trait, positive and negative aspects of the trait, or how it applies or is related to a
specific character. Note whether any information about it seems inaccurate or
possibly only partly true. Suggest how the writer could clarify the introduction.

18. Get into pairs: You can work in or out of your house

19. The Process
• Exchange papers so that your partner can follow along as
you read.
• Each person will read his or her own essay aloud.
EVERYONE SHOULD FINISH READING BEFORE ANYONE
BEGINS RESPONDING.
• Readers will follow along as the writer presents his or her
work; readers may circle obvious errors.
• If you cannot decide reading order, the youngest reads
first.
• When you finish reading, each person should begin a
written response to the prompts on the handout!

20. HOMEWORK
 Vocabulary: Vocab 22-27
 Revise Paper 3 and
submit it through Canvas
before the due date:
November 9th 11:59 pm
 Read Essay #4 Prompt
(This is an in-class
essay)