 Audience oriented
 Purposeful
 Economical
The Writing Process
Approximately how much time
should be spent at each stage?
Prewriting
 Analyzing the purpose and the audience
• Identifying your purpose
• Selecting the best channel
• Switching to faster channels
Factors Determining
Channel Selection
 Importance of message
 Amount and speed of feedback required
 Necessity of a permanent record
 Cost of the channel
 Degree of formality required
Choosing Best Communication Channels
Choosing Communication Channels
(continued)
Choosing Communication Channels
(concluded)
Prewriting
 Analyzing the purpose and the audience
• Identifying your purpose
• Selecting the best channel
• Switching to faster channels
 Anticipating the Audience
• Profiling the audience
• Responding to the profile
Asking the Right Questions to
Profile Your Audience
Asking the Right Questions to
Profile Your Audience
(concluded)
Prewriting
 Analyzing the purpose and the audience
• Identifying your purpose
• Selecting the best channel
• Switching to faster channels
 Anticipating the Audience
• Profiling the audience
• Responding to the profile
 Adapting to the task and audience
Seven Ways Technology Can
Improve Your Business Writing
Fighting writer’s block
Collecting information electronically
Outlining and organizing ideas
Improving correctness and precision
Adding graphics for emphasis
Designing and producing
professional-looking documents,
presentations, and Web pages
Using collaborative software for
team writing
Chapter 2, Slide 14
Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Spotlight Audience Benefits
Shape your statements to involve the
reader.
We are promoting a
new plan that we
believe has many
outstanding benefits.
You will enjoy total peace
of mind with our
affordable hospitalization
plan that meets all your
needs.
Try this:
Instead of this:
Cultivate
A “You”
View
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Cultivate a “You” View
Emphasize second-person pronouns
(you/your) instead of first-person pronouns
(I/we, us, our)
Before we can allow you to
purchase items on this new
account, we must wait two
weeks to verify your credit.
You may begin
making purchases
on your new account
in two weeks.
Try this:
Instead of this:
Quick
Check
Create audience benefits and use the
“you view.”
These are better:
You can now purchase
H-P computers at
discounted prices.
We are now offering
H-P computers at
discounted prices.
Revise these sentences:
We are pleased to
announce that you have
been approved to enroll
in our leadership
training program.
Congratulations! You
have been selected to
enter our leadership
training program!
Chapter 2, Slide 19
Sound
Conversational
Cultivate
A “You”
View
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
Sound Conversational
The undersigned takes
pleasure in . . .
I’m happy to . . .
Try this:
Instead of this:
It may be of some concern
to you to learn that your
check has been received
and your account has been
credited for $250.
We’ve credited your
account for $250.
Quick
Check
Revise to make the tone conversational,
yet professional and concise.
These are better:
We urge you to
approve the contract
by voting yes.
To facilitate contract
ratification, your negotiators
urge that the membership
respond in the affirmative.
Revise these sentences:
Kindly inform the undersigned
whether or not your
representative will be making
a visitation in the near future.
Please tell me whether
your representative will
be visiting before June
1.
Chapter 2, Slide 22
Employ
Positive
Language
Sound
Conversational
Cultivate
A “You”
View
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
Employ Positive Language
Employees may not use the
First Street entrance during
remodeling.
Employees may use
the Market Street
entrance during
remodeling.
Try this:
Instead of this:
We cannot fill your order
until we receive an exact
model number.
We can fill your order
once we receive an
exact model number.
Hidden Messages
Some words and phrases convey a
negative and unpleasant tone. They
may imply a hidden message that the
writer does not intend. Think twice
before using the following negative
expressions.
Hidden Meaning
You are careless
But I don’t believe you
You are careless
It’s probably untrue
I am right
You are not very bright
You are at fault
You are inefficient and careless
Negative Language
You overlooked
You state that
You failed to
You claim that
You are wrong
You do not understand
Your delay
You forgot to
Quick
Check
State ideas more positively.
These are better:
You will be paid
promptly once the
job is completed
satisfactorily.
We must withhold payment
until you complete the job
satisfactorily.
Revise these sentences:
If you fail to follow each
requirement, you will not
receive your $50 rebate.
By following each
requirement, you will
receive your $50
rebate.
Chapter 2, Slide 27
Use
Inclusive
Language
Employ
Positive
Language
Sound
Conversational
Cultivate
A “You”
View
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
Use Inclusive Language
Have you called a
salesman?
Have you called a
salesperson?
Try this:
Instead of this:
Every executive
has his own office.
 All executives have their own
offices.
 Every executive has an office.
 All executives have offices.
 Every executive has his or
her own office.
This alternative is
wordy and calls
attention to itself
Quick
Check
Revise to use inclusive language.
These are better:
Applicants for police
officer positions must
submit medical
reports signed by
their physicians.
Any applicant for the
position of policeman must
submit a medical report
signed by his physician.
Revise these sentences:
Every employee is entitled
to see his personnel file.
All employees are
entitled to see their
personnel files.
Chapter 2, Slide 30
Draw on
Familiar
Words
Adopt
Plain
Language
Use
Inclusive
Language
Use Positive
Language
Sound
Conversational
Cultivate
A “You”
View
Spotlight
Audience
Benefits
Create a
Message That
Suits Your
Audience
Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
Draw on Familiar Words
encounter meet
extrapolate project
obligatory required
Avoid long, difficult, and unfamiliar
words. Use short, simple, and common
words whenever possible.
Less familiar words Simple alternatives
terminate end
Quick
Check
Sample of Revisions using simpler
language.
Because we cannot
check all activities, we
must end the contract.
Because we cannot
monitor all activities, we
must terminate the
agreement.
I’ll interface with Mark to
access his people.
I’ll talk with Mark about
using his staff.

The Writing Process

  • 1.
     Audience oriented Purposeful  Economical
  • 2.
  • 3.
    Approximately how muchtime should be spent at each stage?
  • 4.
    Prewriting  Analyzing thepurpose and the audience • Identifying your purpose • Selecting the best channel • Switching to faster channels
  • 5.
    Factors Determining Channel Selection Importance of message  Amount and speed of feedback required  Necessity of a permanent record  Cost of the channel  Degree of formality required
  • 6.
  • 7.
  • 8.
  • 9.
    Prewriting  Analyzing thepurpose and the audience • Identifying your purpose • Selecting the best channel • Switching to faster channels  Anticipating the Audience • Profiling the audience • Responding to the profile
  • 10.
    Asking the RightQuestions to Profile Your Audience
  • 11.
    Asking the RightQuestions to Profile Your Audience (concluded)
  • 12.
    Prewriting  Analyzing thepurpose and the audience • Identifying your purpose • Selecting the best channel • Switching to faster channels  Anticipating the Audience • Profiling the audience • Responding to the profile  Adapting to the task and audience
  • 13.
    Seven Ways TechnologyCan Improve Your Business Writing Fighting writer’s block Collecting information electronically Outlining and organizing ideas Improving correctness and precision Adding graphics for emphasis Designing and producing professional-looking documents, presentations, and Web pages Using collaborative software for team writing
  • 14.
    Chapter 2, Slide14 Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e Spotlight Audience Benefits Create a Message That Suits Your Audience
  • 15.
    Spotlight Audience Benefits Shapeyour statements to involve the reader. We are promoting a new plan that we believe has many outstanding benefits. You will enjoy total peace of mind with our affordable hospitalization plan that meets all your needs. Try this: Instead of this:
  • 16.
  • 17.
    Cultivate a “You”View Emphasize second-person pronouns (you/your) instead of first-person pronouns (I/we, us, our) Before we can allow you to purchase items on this new account, we must wait two weeks to verify your credit. You may begin making purchases on your new account in two weeks. Try this: Instead of this:
  • 18.
    Quick Check Create audience benefitsand use the “you view.” These are better: You can now purchase H-P computers at discounted prices. We are now offering H-P computers at discounted prices. Revise these sentences: We are pleased to announce that you have been approved to enroll in our leadership training program. Congratulations! You have been selected to enter our leadership training program!
  • 19.
    Chapter 2, Slide19 Sound Conversational Cultivate A “You” View Spotlight Audience Benefits Create a Message That Suits Your Audience Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
  • 20.
    Sound Conversational The undersignedtakes pleasure in . . . I’m happy to . . . Try this: Instead of this: It may be of some concern to you to learn that your check has been received and your account has been credited for $250. We’ve credited your account for $250.
  • 21.
    Quick Check Revise to makethe tone conversational, yet professional and concise. These are better: We urge you to approve the contract by voting yes. To facilitate contract ratification, your negotiators urge that the membership respond in the affirmative. Revise these sentences: Kindly inform the undersigned whether or not your representative will be making a visitation in the near future. Please tell me whether your representative will be visiting before June 1.
  • 22.
    Chapter 2, Slide22 Employ Positive Language Sound Conversational Cultivate A “You” View Spotlight Audience Benefits Create a Message That Suits Your Audience Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
  • 23.
    Employ Positive Language Employeesmay not use the First Street entrance during remodeling. Employees may use the Market Street entrance during remodeling. Try this: Instead of this: We cannot fill your order until we receive an exact model number. We can fill your order once we receive an exact model number.
  • 24.
    Hidden Messages Some wordsand phrases convey a negative and unpleasant tone. They may imply a hidden message that the writer does not intend. Think twice before using the following negative expressions.
  • 25.
    Hidden Meaning You arecareless But I don’t believe you You are careless It’s probably untrue I am right You are not very bright You are at fault You are inefficient and careless Negative Language You overlooked You state that You failed to You claim that You are wrong You do not understand Your delay You forgot to
  • 26.
    Quick Check State ideas morepositively. These are better: You will be paid promptly once the job is completed satisfactorily. We must withhold payment until you complete the job satisfactorily. Revise these sentences: If you fail to follow each requirement, you will not receive your $50 rebate. By following each requirement, you will receive your $50 rebate.
  • 27.
    Chapter 2, Slide27 Use Inclusive Language Employ Positive Language Sound Conversational Cultivate A “You” View Spotlight Audience Benefits Create a Message That Suits Your Audience Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
  • 28.
    Use Inclusive Language Haveyou called a salesman? Have you called a salesperson? Try this: Instead of this: Every executive has his own office.  All executives have their own offices.  Every executive has an office.  All executives have offices.  Every executive has his or her own office. This alternative is wordy and calls attention to itself
  • 29.
    Quick Check Revise to useinclusive language. These are better: Applicants for police officer positions must submit medical reports signed by their physicians. Any applicant for the position of policeman must submit a medical report signed by his physician. Revise these sentences: Every employee is entitled to see his personnel file. All employees are entitled to see their personnel files.
  • 30.
    Chapter 2, Slide30 Draw on Familiar Words Adopt Plain Language Use Inclusive Language Use Positive Language Sound Conversational Cultivate A “You” View Spotlight Audience Benefits Create a Message That Suits Your Audience Mary Ellen Guffey, Essentials of Business Communication, 7e
  • 31.
    Draw on FamiliarWords encounter meet extrapolate project obligatory required Avoid long, difficult, and unfamiliar words. Use short, simple, and common words whenever possible. Less familiar words Simple alternatives terminate end
  • 32.
    Quick Check Sample of Revisionsusing simpler language. Because we cannot check all activities, we must end the contract. Because we cannot monitor all activities, we must terminate the agreement. I’ll interface with Mark to access his people. I’ll talk with Mark about using his staff.