CHAPTER ONE PART TWOChapter 1 : Reports
Starting components16 July 2009To: Mr. Low Eng Teong      The Principal      Victoria SchoolFrom: Nicholas Lim           2I Monitor           Victoria SchoolAccident at basketball court on 10 March 2009
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Paragraph OneDay and Date (When)WhoWhat did they do before the incidentWhenWhoever involved (Who)What did he/they do during the incidentHow/Why did he/they do so
Details SummaryLast Saturday, 10 March 2002, eight of us were playing a game of basketball at the basketball court when Tan Wei Mun fell over and broke his arm in the course of the game.On Monday, 28 June 2009, a group of boys were crossing Siglap Link when Derek Siou tripped over his basketball and had a head on collision when a stationary car leaving a huge dent in the car.
Paragraph TwoWhoever involved (Who)had been doing Whatwanted to do Whattime When it happenedWhat happened (? occurred when…)Sequence of events / List of events
Events leading to IncidentWe had finished our Co-Curricular Activity (CCA), the National Cadet Corps (NCC). Instead of going straight home, we decided to play basketball with some of our friends. The time was about 12.30 p.m.An altercation occurred earlier in the morning when Hanif and another boy Philip Loo, fought over one of the single chairs at the library during the reading period. Then Hanif argued with Derek Wee over borrowing of a book. Mrs Rama also remonstrated with Hanif over his failure to hand in his Reading Workbook for the sixth week.
Paragraphs ThreeSequence of EventsMore Details of Events / What actually happenedEnd at the Actual Incident
Main EventsAs we were lining up to leave the library at 10.10 a.m., Hanif pushed his way to the top of the line only to find that Philip and Derek were in front. As he approached, Philip asked him where he was going and Hanif said that he wanted to get to the Chicken rice stall first. A commotion ensued involving shoving, grunting, hissing and then a punch was thrown, causing Hanif to lose his balance and fall into the pond.
Main EventsThe game had been quite normal up to the moment when Wei Mun leaped close to the basket to try to score. However, the ball bounced off the ring and the three boys who were nearby tussled with Wei Mun to grab the ball. Tan Sin Min, John Lee and Chan CheeKuan all fell to the ground together with poor Wun. Standing about three metres away, I had a good view of what happened. No one pushed Wei Mun or deliberately tried to knock him over. One moment, they were all reaching up for the ball, the next, they were all lying on the ground. Unfortunately, Wei Mun was at the bottom of the pile.
Paragraphs FourHow everyone else reactedRealisation of the problemIntroduce the problem
Immediate Follow-upFor a second or two, a mixture of giggles and laughter mixed with groans and complains were heard. Then just when all the other voices subsided, the painful wailing continued. We all sensed immediately that something serious had happened when we saw Wei Mun still lying on the floor after the rest had gotten up.
Paragraphs FiveAssessing of the situation (Why)What is done to relieve the situation (How)Side effects of the incident (if any) (What)The success / failure of relieving the situation (What)
Actions undertakenAt first we all crowded around him. Then I realised that someone should get one of the teachers and I sent the fastest runner among us, MohdSharjun, to the office while the rest of us tried to give our injured friend what help we could. I also got everyone to move away from Wei Mun, and give him room to breathe because we all crowded too close to see what had happened.
Paragraphs SixOpinion of who was to be blamedWhat should and should not have been done
Conclusion and OpinionsI feel that we were equally at fault in that we should have gone straight home. However, I do not think any one of us in particular should be blamed for the fall as it was just an unfortunate accident.I feel that although we were all involved in playing catch, it was Derek who  recommenced the game in street, took it onto the road and dinted the man’s car with his head.
Aspects to noteEach paragraph should indicate a new idea.Use consistent past tense in report except the last paragraph.Be specific like giving full names where possible.Do not use acronyms or short form for a proper noun if you mention it for the first time.Discourse indicators must be used at the beginning of each paragraph to signal what is to follow to the reader
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Reports (Chap. 1)

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    CHAPTER ONE PARTTWOChapter 1 : Reports
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    Starting components16 July2009To: Mr. Low Eng Teong The Principal Victoria SchoolFrom: Nicholas Lim 2I Monitor Victoria SchoolAccident at basketball court on 10 March 2009
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    Paragraph OneDay andDate (When)WhoWhat did they do before the incidentWhenWhoever involved (Who)What did he/they do during the incidentHow/Why did he/they do so
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    Details SummaryLast Saturday,10 March 2002, eight of us were playing a game of basketball at the basketball court when Tan Wei Mun fell over and broke his arm in the course of the game.On Monday, 28 June 2009, a group of boys were crossing Siglap Link when Derek Siou tripped over his basketball and had a head on collision when a stationary car leaving a huge dent in the car.
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    Paragraph TwoWhoever involved(Who)had been doing Whatwanted to do Whattime When it happenedWhat happened (? occurred when…)Sequence of events / List of events
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    Events leading toIncidentWe had finished our Co-Curricular Activity (CCA), the National Cadet Corps (NCC). Instead of going straight home, we decided to play basketball with some of our friends. The time was about 12.30 p.m.An altercation occurred earlier in the morning when Hanif and another boy Philip Loo, fought over one of the single chairs at the library during the reading period. Then Hanif argued with Derek Wee over borrowing of a book. Mrs Rama also remonstrated with Hanif over his failure to hand in his Reading Workbook for the sixth week.
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    Paragraphs ThreeSequence ofEventsMore Details of Events / What actually happenedEnd at the Actual Incident
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    Main EventsAs wewere lining up to leave the library at 10.10 a.m., Hanif pushed his way to the top of the line only to find that Philip and Derek were in front. As he approached, Philip asked him where he was going and Hanif said that he wanted to get to the Chicken rice stall first. A commotion ensued involving shoving, grunting, hissing and then a punch was thrown, causing Hanif to lose his balance and fall into the pond.
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    Main EventsThe gamehad been quite normal up to the moment when Wei Mun leaped close to the basket to try to score. However, the ball bounced off the ring and the three boys who were nearby tussled with Wei Mun to grab the ball. Tan Sin Min, John Lee and Chan CheeKuan all fell to the ground together with poor Wun. Standing about three metres away, I had a good view of what happened. No one pushed Wei Mun or deliberately tried to knock him over. One moment, they were all reaching up for the ball, the next, they were all lying on the ground. Unfortunately, Wei Mun was at the bottom of the pile.
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    Paragraphs FourHow everyoneelse reactedRealisation of the problemIntroduce the problem
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    Immediate Follow-upFor asecond or two, a mixture of giggles and laughter mixed with groans and complains were heard. Then just when all the other voices subsided, the painful wailing continued. We all sensed immediately that something serious had happened when we saw Wei Mun still lying on the floor after the rest had gotten up.
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    Paragraphs FiveAssessing ofthe situation (Why)What is done to relieve the situation (How)Side effects of the incident (if any) (What)The success / failure of relieving the situation (What)
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    Actions undertakenAt firstwe all crowded around him. Then I realised that someone should get one of the teachers and I sent the fastest runner among us, MohdSharjun, to the office while the rest of us tried to give our injured friend what help we could. I also got everyone to move away from Wei Mun, and give him room to breathe because we all crowded too close to see what had happened.
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    Paragraphs SixOpinion ofwho was to be blamedWhat should and should not have been done
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    Conclusion and OpinionsIfeel that we were equally at fault in that we should have gone straight home. However, I do not think any one of us in particular should be blamed for the fall as it was just an unfortunate accident.I feel that although we were all involved in playing catch, it was Derek who recommenced the game in street, took it onto the road and dinted the man’s car with his head.
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    Aspects to noteEachparagraph should indicate a new idea.Use consistent past tense in report except the last paragraph.Be specific like giving full names where possible.Do not use acronyms or short form for a proper noun if you mention it for the first time.Discourse indicators must be used at the beginning of each paragraph to signal what is to follow to the reader
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