This one page pitch proposes a crime thriller film titled "PAYBACK" about a detective investigating the murder of a girl by a mysterious killer known as "The Lady Killer". The film would center on themes of bullying, redemption, and vengeance, showing the consequences of bullying in an attempt to scare people. It would be 120 minutes long and target audiences who enjoy crime thrillers. The story would start slowly but build tension and speed, showing a juxtaposition between normality and darkness. Like similar films, it would involve an unfolding investigation and metaphorical clock counting down as the detective tries to catch the murderer before more people die.

1. Alex HunterandDaniel Haywood
One Page Pitch
Workingtitle:PAYBACK
Tag Line:‘Sticksand stonesbreakmore thanbones’ (howeverstill workinprogress)
FilmGenre(s):Crime Thriller
Approximate lengthof time:120 minutes
Target Audience:15 – 34, fansof Crime-thrillers,suchas JackReacher and Taken.
‘What if’premise:What if a vulnerable boythathadexperiencedaneternityof cyberbullying
decided tostandup ina sadisticway,gainingvengeance onthe girlsthatoppressedhim.
The Story Synopsis:(workin progress).A girl isfoundmurdered atherhome by a mysterious
wantedmanin townonlyreferredtoas‘The LadyKiller’.RecentlypromotedDetective David
Monroe is lefttotackle the case on hisown – whoisthismurderer?What ishismotive?Onlytime
will tell.
Statementof Intent: We have decidedtocentre our filmonthe themesof bullying,redemption,
vengeance and revenge.The purpose of ourfilmistoultimatelyconveythe effectsof bullying.This
howeverextreme scale isamodernwayof ‘scaring’people intoconsideringthe consequences.
Secondly,we decidedoncreatingthisplotasa filmratherthan a TV series.Thisisbecause the
pressure of a metaphorical countdownwouldbe lostinaTV seriesasthiswouldspanovera longer
periodof time thana film.Forexample,aTV seriescouldbe 20 hourswhereasafilmcouldbe
merely2 hours.
Visual Realisation:Starts out witha slow pace,howevergraduallyspeedsuplateroninthe film. The
openingtothe filmisquite warm andoverall appearsnormalised.However, soonthere isadescent
intodarkness,showing ajuxtaposition.
Audience Appeal:I believe thatourtargetaudience will enjoy the finalpiece asitconveysmany
similaritiesinplottootherfilms. JackReacher,forexample,acrime-thriller,consistsof amurder
that sparksan overall investigationonalargerscale.Our plotsimilarlyunravelsasthe Detective
realisesthe purpose behindthese tragicacts.Secondly,like Taken,there isametaphorical clock
countingdownas the detective istryingtocatch the murdererbefore more people die.
Ending: Thisisjust an ideathatwe had if the filmwasactuallymade infull ratherthanjustan
openingsequence.
Aftera dramaticend,such as the deathof The Lady Killeroreventheirvictory,there isarapid
reverse tothe beginningof the filmwherewe see the victimfromthe opening sequence issatalive
and well athercomputer.She isabout to senda meancommentbutthensuddenlycomestoa form
of realisation.She deletesthe message andablackscreenwipesacrossthe screen,followingthe
cursor deletingletters.The creditsstart.