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- 1. Draft 1 The whitefish is a good source of lean protein being very low in saturated fats. It’s a great source of Vitamin B6 , Vitamin D and Magnesium. Vitamin B6 is very useful in helping our enzymes work well, and it is thought to reduce the risk of Cardio Vascular disease. Like B6, magnesium also helps our enzymes work and has a major role in muscle and nerve function and the regulation of blood pressure. Vitamin D may have benefits in reducing the risk of cancer, although high doses of can lead to problems with the liver and the kidneys.
- 2. White fish isa great source of Vitamin B6, Vitamin D and the mineral Magnesium. Vitamin B6 is critical for enzyme function, and is thought to reduce the risk of Cardio Vascular disease. Like Vitamin B6, Magnesium aids enzyme function. Furthermore it has a major role in muscle and nerve function, and in the regulation of blood pressure. Scientists are considering the role Vitamin D has in reducing cancer risk. However, high doses can lead to liver and kidney problems. Draft 4
- 3. Read the twodrafts. • Why is the second better than the first? • Why was the first sentence removed?
- 4. The first sentenceforegrounds the rest of the paragraph. It tells you what it is going to tell you about. ( Topic) . Vitamin B6 is critical for enzyme function, and is thought to reduce the risk of Cardio Vascular disease. Like Vitamin B6, Magnesium aids enzyme function. Furthermore it has a major role in muscle and nerve function, and in the regulation of blood pressure. Scientists are considering the role Vitamin D has in reducing cancer risk.
- 6. The next sentencesdescribe what the nutrients do, says how important it is and/ or how likely it is. White fish is a great source of Vitamin B6, Vitamin D and the mineral Magnesium. Like Vitamin B6, Magnesium aids enzyme function. Furthermore it has a major role in muscle and nerve function, and in the regulation of blood pressure. Scientists are considering the role Vitamin D has in reducing cancer risk. However, high doses can lead to liver and kidney problems.
- 7. Nominalisation is • Verbscan be turned into nouns, which changes the word from an action to a thing • A noun that is formed from a verb is called a nominalisation. • Nominalisations are nouns that contain a hidden action.
- 8. Science examples anduseful others Process Nominalisation Resist Resistance Process Nominalisation Distill Distillation permit permission Evaporate Evaporation force force Magnetic Magnetism act action Conducting Conduction writing writing Insulating Insulation define definition Move Motion add addition Orbit Orbit occur occurrence
- 9. Vitamin B6 isvery useful in helping our enzymes work well (draft 1)
- 10. Drafts of thissentence.
- 11. Can you spot: Theaction verb/ casual verb the nominalisation the object Causal/ main action verb Nominalisation Object
- 12. What do yourecognise about this sentence structure? White fish is a great source of Vitamin B6, Vitamin D and the mineral Magnesium. Vitamin B6 is critical for enzyme function, and is thought to reduce the risk of Cardio Vascular disease. Like Vitamin B6, Magnesium aids enzyme function. . Scientists are considering the role Vitamin D has in reducing cancer risk. Draft 4 However, high doses can lead to liver and kidney
- 13. White fish isa great source of Vitamin B6, Vitamin D and the mineral Magnesium. Vitamin B6 is critical for enzyme function, and is thought to reduce the risk of Cardio Vascular disease. Like Vitamin B6, Magnesium aids enzyme function. Furthermore it has a major role in muscle and nerve function, and in the regulation of blood pressure. Draft 4
- 14. Why is thesentence better than the simplified one? more simply put “Vitamin D may stop you from getting cancer”
- 15. So how isthis sentence written that tells you this? We don’t know yet? It is still being researched? Tells us that other factors are involved too
- 16. So how isthis sentence written that tells you this? Tells us that other factors are involved too Action verb. The main action. Therefore not nominalised to reduction. It is also more honest than “stops.” as more factors are involved.
- 17. muscle and nervefunction, and in the regulation of blood pressure. Scientists are considering the role Vitamin D has in reducing cancer risk. Why is this connective useful? What does the word “can” tell us about this relationship? How would the meaning of the sentence “high doses lead to liver and kidney problems.” be different? Draft 4
- 18. Information Peaches have alot of dietary fibre in them. People who eat lots of fibre have a lower chance of heart disease, diabetes and some cancers. Should eat 18g of fibre every day, but people on average eat 14g every day. One peach would give you 7% of your daily need. Apples have more fibre (17% per apple) Foregrounding S-V-O? What the nutrient does for health or the body? New subject? Main idea? Connective. Truth about data?
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- #5 Ask “what is it about” and how do you know? Make it obvious that the food needs to be near the start of the paragraph.Ask if they can spot a sentence structure the next slide will help. But its basically a Subject- verb- Object structure.Ask why the word great is important? What must the “data” be like about these micronutrients?
- #7 What has the subject changed to? Where has it come from? ( the previous sentence)Ask what two Vitamin B6 does? Ask which one is most likely to be completely trueHighlight Vital and thought to
- #10 Make it clear that the scientific “verb” here is the “work of the enzyme”The first sentence has two verbs where only one is needed so “vitamin B6 helps our enzymes work well would be better.”the helps verb does not need to be nominalised as it says what the main action is of the subject (vitamin b6)
- #12 Point out the use of causal verbs, it will be useful to highlight that the first half of the sentence does not have thisMake clear that the word reduce does not need to be nominalised as it is the main action.And that risk is already a verb and a noun.
- #13 Is a comma needed after furthermore?Hopefully the students can spot the nominalisation of function and regulation Ask them what connectives have been used? And what does it tell them/ ask them for alternatives
- #14 Could this be one sentence?Does however need a comma after it?ASK What does this tell you? Paraphrased on next slide for comparison
- #19 Co construct with class. Ask questions think out loud, redraft as you go. Eg peaches contain a lot of dietary fibrePeaches are a great source of fibrePeachers are a good source of dietary fibre.This sentence needs to be about peaches and the fibre (SVO)Next sectionWhat is the new subject? ( it the object from the previous sentence)What does fibre do?Fibre lowers the chance of you getting heart disease, diabetes and some cancers. Fibre lowers the chance of heart disease, diabetes and some cancers. Review this structure it matches previous exampleThe next sentence we should eat 18g of fibre, but we only eat 14g, can be written in this style.People eat less fibre than they should, Fibre intake is usually lower than the recommended 18g per day.