Guided inquiry: process marking

Year 11 Ancient History Preliminary Course 2011: Historical investigation.

Process marks: 10 marks altogether.

Name and Development of Notetaking grids/3 Reflection sheets/ Use Bibliography and Essay and comment, including Final mark:
final enquiry question/2 of comment function footnotes/3 research process. Essay and
question /2 process/
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Hannah B: Hannah grappled with Sources: Used the logs well, shows I’m surprised there This is quite a good essay, marred 8+14 =
Cleopatra: enquiry question Cleopatra movie, grappling with topic and aren’t more sources by a few expression errors, and 22/35
relating to Cleo’s Rehabilitating Cleo and many drafts of the essay. in your reference possibly also by your decision to
portrayal in media Plutarch, Susan Walker , Not much use of the list, as you certainly only use these writers on Cleo,
Schiff, and the primary comment function. looked at more. which you don’t evaluate in terms
Final question: sources at British Reflection sheets show You’ve omitted of reliability and background, when
Throughout history Museum. Movie her struggling with some bibliographic you clearly had researched others.
there have been many Cleopatra as well. Mixed information overload, as details as well, It achieves what you set out to do
portrayals of notetaking grids, very well as structuring the place published, in the first paragraph, but could
Cleopatra’s life, but brief at times, movie one essay. publisher etc. have done with your own
which portrayal of good. Plutarch one very Footnotes are conclusion on who Cleopatra was.
Cleopatra is accurate? good. Schiff good. She 2 similarly sparse and 14
Or are none accurate? didn’t use them all in the omit bibliographic
2 essay. details. Some
2 footnoting errors.
2
Lucy C: Looked at .Brennan, Herald Sun, Independent researcher Uses her deep Very strong conclusion to a very 10 +23 –
Cannibalism Mayan/Aztec; Stone Macrae, in earlier grids, who organized herself research to cull well reasoned essay about a 33/35
in the ancient age England and and began with Wikipedia well in the logs, and did down to a short and complex topic. You’ve used
world: Germany, leading her Bahn, Bower, Cannibals not seem to need the very pertinent evidence very well to support your
to consider of the Stone Age doco, interaction available via reference list. arguments. This is an essay of
Mayans/Aztecs’ Boyes, Goldman, Turner comment function. Footnotes are which you should be proud, and is
comparison? in final grid. Very Reflection sheets very outstanding. probably a result of your strong
Final question: analytical. Has done thoughtful and used in a 3 writing and reasoning skills, your
Did Ancient Civilisations excellent synthesized useful way for her deep research, and your fascination
Practice Cannibalism. If notes. research process. 2 with your (grizzly!) topic. Very well
So Why, and What 3 done!
Evidence Is There To 23
Support This?
Shows evidence of
thoughtful narrowing of
topic 2

Phoebe C: Phoebe seems well Womenintheancientworl Independent researcher Good reference list, This is a competent essay, which 9+19= 28/35
Spartan organized. Her topic d, McDonald, Hibbison, who wrote very good essentially the same could have had a tighter structure,
women: Role grew from Spartan legion14, BBC, Fantham – logs, and did not use sources as in your outlining the main points you make
in society. women, to Spartan notetaking grids very well comment function much. notetaking grids. in the introductory paragraph. It is
women and Athenian synthesized, and are Maybe does not need it, Good attempt at at times a little on the narrative
*** also women to come to final mostly the same sources and prefers verbal footnoting. side, though you make excellent
Modern enquiry question: as used in reference list. interaction. Reflection 2 use of primary sources.
‘Spartan women in 5th 3 sheets very well used, to 19/25
Century BC had far develop and fine tune her
greater freedom than question and structure
their Athenian the essay. 2
counterparts’. To what
extent is this an
accurate statement. 2
Celeste de C: Measured, rational Notetaking grids Very competent, Bibliography is There was a need for a tighter 9+19= 29/35
Hanging approach to organized, pertinent, organized process with pertinent and structure to this essay. I think you
Gardens of development of enquiry perhaps not synthesized no fuss approach well consists of material needed an introduction that
Babylon question, dictated by enough, perhaps not logged and described. in your notetaking directed your essay more tightly, as
growth in information. enough information to Reflection sheets very grids. Footnotes it was, the intro was a page long,
Final question: account for the Ongoing clear and reflect the good. and left the reader searching for
Account for the historical significance of development of her 3 ensuing structure. Additionally you
ongoing historical the gardens, and are the thought and research needed to proof read your writing
significance of the myth same sources as appear very clearly. 2 for expression errors, and for
of the Hanging Gardens in reference list. keeping to the point, and for
of Babylon Competent switch mid picking up repetitive material and
stream to Noodlebib. removing it. A difficult topic, and
2 an excellent research process, let
2 down a little in the end by
roundabout expression. Your
ancient sources needed some
background and information about
reliability. 19
Kelsey E: Early focus on reliability Lanciani, Pomeroy, Baker, Reasonably thoughtful Well chosen This is an excellent essay which 9+20 =
Vestal Virgins of information around Ramsey, Parker,Staples. use of the logs and reference list, with gives a reasoned explanation of 29/35
VVs’ Early question: Very well organized and comment function. Bit only what she Vestals as sign, stranger and
Why were the vestals synthesized notetaking. 2 brief. Reflection sheets needed for her scapegoat. It is well supported by
virgins? And what affect very honest and show her argument. your thorough research. The only
did their virginity have grappling with the Accurately thing I’d criticize is that the
on the ability for them reliability of information presented, same question allowed more of a
to be sacrificed? in this topic area. sources as her narrative than a debate. But well
Final question: Who Reflection on learning notes. Well done. 20.
were the Vestal Virgins was very honest and constructed

and what role did they detailed. 2 footnotes.
play in the Ancient 3
Roman society? 2

Caitlin F: Question development Web Greece, wikpedia. Good use of comment Reference list This is a very well written essay, 19 + 7 =
Greek myths led her to the myth of Bullfinch, Grade saver. function for feedback and contains much that Caitlin, which gives a very good 26/35
and legends – Theseus and the Not very synthesized. brief but useful logs. she made notes on, picture of the ways in which
Theseus and Minotaur. Lots of time wasted at Useful reflection sheets but some new Suzanne Collins has employed the
the Minotaur. Final question: To what beginning with too big a where she documents her sources. Not v Theseus and the Minotaur myth in
extent has author topic. The Hunger games, frustrations and academic. The Hunger Games. You’ve used
Suzanne Collins Margolis, Myths and achievements in Good job on your research well, and made a
reflected the well- Legends, Oliver. Level of narrowing down such a footnotes. good job of your footnotes. My
known Greek myth synthesis of notes huge topic. Did she in the only reservations lie with the
Theseus and the improved towards the end write an English 2 question really, and whether it
Minotaur in her novel end when she knew what essay? allowed you to identify an area of
The Hunger Games? her question was, but still 2 debate, as well as whether this
Breadth of the area of not v deep. 2 essay would be a better English
inquiry was a problem essay than an Ancient History one.
for Caitlin, though she 19
managed to narrow it
down to a very specific
question. But was it
Ancient History? 1
Sophie H: Final question: Assess Stanley and Sheng; Thoughtful and reflective Reference list This is an excellent essay, Sophie. 10 +24 =
Atlantis – the likelihood of the Stewart, Mansfield, researcher, very fulsome accurately You have a scientific, analytical 34/35
Thera/Crete Ancient Minoan Govan, Wheeler, Krystek, about her process. presented, and had approach to history, and put up
Civilization, based on Kemp, Wilson – all very Reflection sheets show most of the sources such an excellent case for Atlantis
the islands of Crete and synthesized. Excellent her grappling very deeply in her notetaking being Thira. Your extensive
Thira, as the source of notes. 3 with the topic and grids plus a few research, and long sustained
Plato’s story of Atlantis. moving early to Plato as more. Lot of interest in this topic has led you to
Showed intense original source. 2 Clickview. Excellent write a sound piece of historical
interest and footnotes, including research, which could have been
commitment from the explanatory ones – edited further, as it was over the
beginning in developing A couple of word limit by 400 words.
her question. 2 footnoting
omissions. 24
3

Sally H: Growth of enquiry Has not detailed which Has kept a reasonable log Footnotes good – This essay is well structured, well- 7+16 =
Spartacus – question clear from Questia sources she uses of her process, does not an ibid error and an written, as was your Modern 23/35
*** general topic of in notetaking grids. use comment function. unnecessary essay, with only a few omissions of
Spartacus to portrayals Notes better than for Reflection sheets a bit common citations. I think you needed to
over time, with final Modern, but still pretty brief, but quite useful to knowledge citation. define the terms of the question.
question being: brief to start off with. her. Bibliography very You’ve contained your argument
Examine the Portrayal Livius, Wesscholar, 1 good, most of very well, relating it to a
of Spartacus as a Hoffman. Better in final which come from manageable number of ancient and
courageous grid. her notes. modern portrayals, in an ordered
revolutionist and a 2 fashion. This time your notetaking
fighter for social justice. 2 grids are better, but I still think that
2 they are not the ideal way for you
to take notes. Take a look at
Easybib. It’s easier than Noodlebib,
and may be just what you need.
Essay: 16.
Olivia-Jane H: Assess the significance Wikipedia, Sewell Ward, Appeared to be a very Reference list uses Good conclusion. While this essay 7+19 =
Lost library of of the Pharos text book, newsnational, competent and same sources, not presents your arguments well, if a 26/35
Alexandria? Lighthouse and the www.king-tut.org.uk, independent researcher, scholarly enough. little slowly, it suffers from the
Great Library of loveegypt.com, aware of process and Some footnoting level of the sources you used. They
Alexandria in www.fortunecity. Not gaps. Some use of errors, and they are were all open internet sources, and
establishing Alexandria very scholarly. comment function, but a little on the scarce I believe you could have used more
as a cultural centre of Notetaking shows effort does not appear to need side to support an scholarly ones, including books and
the Ancient World. at synthesizing. it. Reflection sheets show argument. 2 Questia and State Library articles.
her grappling with You took quite a while to get into
I think she put in the 2 information overload, the significance of the lighthouse
two buildings because gradually narrowing her and library, but did so competently
she hadn’t done focus from Alexandria to later in the essay. Your essay at
enough research to the lost library. Reflection times reads more as a narrative
support just one of sheets are very useful to than an argument, and I think this
them. her. 2 goes back to your sources again.
1 There are some footnoting errors.
19
Amelia H: Amelia stuck with Same sources in Use of comment function Excellent use of Strong conclusion to a very 10 +20 = 30
Masada Masada right from the Reference list: Excellent and daily logs show clear footnotes, with interesting essay. You’ve written a
beginning, and research, useful notes, all growth of focus towards some errors over well argued essay which uses your
narrowed it to Josephus used in reference list and enquiry question. ibid and op cit. rigorous research very well, and
and Yadin. Had essay. Sources not Reflection sheets were Bibliography very appears to have arrived at the nub
difficulties with evaluated. useful to her process. pertinent. of the debate on Masada. You
assessing reliability of 2 2 3 might have evaluated the writers
information, but you used for reliability and context.
persevered through this Congratulations on your very

to arrive at an excellent committed research process and a
enquiry question. sound essay. 18
Assess the
archaeological and
written evidence in
relation to Masada.
***
2
Rose J: To what extent was the www.cartage.org; Competent researcher, Only two sources This is a well argued essay, which is 7+ 18=25
Ancient Carthaginian siege of www.tourspain.org, who logged her process on her reference quite a bit under the word count.
Spain/Punic Saguntum responsible www.phoenicia.org None well, did not do much list, reflecting her However, you structure it very well,
wars? for the outbreak of the of these useful to her in with the comment difficulties with the use the minimal sources you have
Siege of Second Punic War? the end, because her function. Reflection too broad question. very well, and have presented a
Saguntum She began too broadly topic went off in another sheets mirror the She uses them to very balanced argument about
with a wish to explore direction. Very general difficulties of starting too very good effect, your topic of the Siege of
Ancient Spain because notes, not enough of broadly, and therefore however. Footnotes Saguntum. 18
she was going there! them. In final grid, uses losing research time. But very good, though
This led to difficulties in Bradley, which is what she reflects very honestly scarce. 2
early information she needed. This is a very on her process. 2
gathering and question good grid.
making. 2 www.historyofwar
Vessey,
pages.uoregon.edu
These ones which looked
good, she didn’t use. 2
Emma K: How Sheba is portrayed www.scribd.com, an Logs show intense Reference list has This is a sudden and not very 6 +17=
Queen of in Koran, Bible and unnamed source, Negast engagement with the many errors in it. illuminating ending. The essay 23/35
Sheba Jewish sources. Final and The Queen of Sheba research, but not much in But it is extensive, probably suffers from trying to
question is: Who was (movie) She lists some the way of interaction contains some of answer too many questions. I think
the Queen of Sheba? books, but takes no notes using the comment those in her you’ve pretty much left the third
How has she been on them. Also Solomon function. Reflection notetaking grids. one unanswered, why has she been
represented and Sheba film. sheets show her Footnotes ok. portrayed in the ways she was?
throughout history and Books by Cole, Wadud, grappling with Quotes too long. 1 The other two are answered
why has she been Williams, information underload in satisfactorily. 17
represented in these Kitchen.jbq.jewishbible.or some cases. 2
ways? Essay suffered g
from having so much to 2
answer. 1

Yolana K: Question troubles: Too Lendering, Library of Record of progress using Long reference list This is a very good essay, in which 8 + 22 =
Alexander the much info. Can’t decide Hellas, Livius, McCarty, the comment function is with repeated you do what you set out to do: 30/35
Great * on direction. Is Macedonia.org, very informative and entries for same Account for the influences and
Alexander great? ancientsites.com, Holt. All reflective. Reflection source. Would motivations that led Alexander to
Account for the brief. Reference list on sheets reflected her have been better create the Macedonian empire. I
greatness of Alexander/ essay included many difficulty with the with fewer sources, think your first paragraph might
What influences shaped more sources than those overwhelming amount of as you describe the have been stronger, and more
him? How successful in the notetaking grids, information available on experience in your directive of your argument, and
was he in spreading which look as if they were Alexander the Great - reflection sheets of that some later sections needed
Greek Culture? of not much use to her. one missing (2) extreme some editing to stick to your
Struggled with question 2 information arguments. Your footnotes are
development. 2 overload. Excellent FANTASTIC! Well done. . 22
Final question: footnotes. Needs to
Investigate Alexander find a way of
the Great’s influences notetaking that is
and motives that led to useful to her, as the
the creation of the notetaking grids
Macedonian Empire were clearly not
2 very useful, and she
drowned in
information
anyway.
Advice for future:
Choose a topic with
less written about
it? 2
Emma L: Began with Vespasian. Castleden,Michailidou, Stressed, highly Reference list very This is a very competent essay 9 + 22 =
*** Emma has stalled on Burrows, Romer, BBC, competent and pertinent to essay, which might have benefited from 31/35
this because she is McNeal, Waldman, EB, idiosyncratic researcher. and same sources further editing, as there are places
finding it difficult to Macgillivrary. Very Does not know how good as in notetaking where you repeat yourself a bit,
assess which thorough notes on she is. Is very critical of document. Some e.g. about encyclopedias still taking
archaeologist was Noodlebib. Same sources her own research errors in citation of Evans’ work as gospel. But you’ve
correct. How true were appear in essay. process, which appears to common persuaded me that Evans did not
Evan’s ideas to the work well in the end! knowledge do much of a job on Knossos. I
actual culture of the 3 Interesting and interested examples, and wonder if you could have found
Minoans? reflection sheets. some confusion some positives about his work,
Assess the usefulness of Not much use of over op.cit. which was done after all when
Arthur Evans’s comment function, but 2 modern archaeological methods
“reconstruction” of the very vocal about her own were unheard of. But you’ve
court-complex at needs during the process. written a mature essay on a fairly
Knossos. Final question: 2 vexed area. 22
Assess the usefulness of

the work of Arthur
Evans to our
understanding of the
Minoan civilisation.
Clear grappling with
development of enquiry
question. 2/2

Isabella M: Validity of the Hope, Brumbaugh, Levy, Very competent Accurately This is a very well constructed and 10 + 19 =
Atlantis – Thera/Minoan culture Lost Worlds, researcher, self aware in presented supported essay. You write very 29/35
Plato and explanation of Atlantis atlantisarchives.org, logs. Does not use reference list, well, in a reasoned and direct way,
legend. as portrayed in Plato. ancient-greece.org well comment function much. containing the same with a few expression errors that
Final question: Despite synthesized, using Question: Do these sources as her re-reading would have picked up.
our modern-day Noodlbib. She’s clearly students prefer to talk notes. Footnotes Well done. Your essay shows your
fascination with this got to grips with some rather than use wiki for very well done. thorough research process. You
legend, it seems clear scholarly writers in this interaction? Shows Check for common were a bit below the word count
that the Atlantis Plato topic. herself a reflective knowledge citation. Background on sources? Are they
described never 3 researcher in her 3 reliable? 19
existed. Assess the reflection sheets. 2
various concepts/
constructions of the
Atlantis story.
2
Sophie Mc: Sophie is doing Henry’s www.elizabethean- Does not show evidence Quite a good This essay answers your question 5 + 14 =
Henry V111 decision to separate era.org, Wikipedia, of much engagement reference list. You satisfactorily, but just does not 19/35
and lord from the Pope, Cheshire, Randell Later with the topic in the logs clearly got more grapple with the historians who
chancellors’ although up till now notetaking grid with the or in using the comment involved once you’d write about this matter. Though
influences or was other question. two books in it is better. function. Reflection chosen your you’ve a couple of books on your
Henry’s Final question: First very brief and not sheets are similarly not question. You need reference list, you’ve not used
decision to Examine the motives good sources. She had very engaged. 1 to understand the them in the essay, which, while it is
separate and reasoning behind the books in the common reasonably structured, narrates
from the King Henry’s decision to reference list, but did not knowledge rather than argues its case. 14.
pope separate from the use them. Essay suffered exception in
Catholic Church. from superficiality. footnoting.
She did not show much 1 Anything that is
engagement or interest widely known does
during her research not have to have a
process. 1 citation. She does
not use citations to
advance an
argument, using
them instead to

narrate well known
facts. 2

Emily M: Weiednbach, Instone, Excellent use of logs and Good reference list, Well concluded. This is a well 8 + 16 =
Comparison Final question: “Today's NSW amateur boxing comment function to sort matching what structured and argued essay that 24/35
of ancient Olympic Games are assoc, compare info base, out her question. you’ve taken notes uses your research efficiently. I
and modern based on what took Olympic Museum, coupe Reflection sheets on mostly. You’ve think it’s a better essay than your
Olympics place at Olympia, in and Scanlan; Nostos.com, improved into a useful made a very good modern one, in that it’s used better
*** Greece, nearly three Konstam; fofweb.co; tool for her by RS3. attempt at sources, and probably because you
millennia ago”-Dr Crowther, IOC, Potted 2 footnoting, while didn’t change topic mid stream as
Stephan Instone history, Olympic.org, some of them could you did in Modern. Your sources
To what extent is this National Sport have been left out still could have been more
statement true? Information Centre because they are scholarly, but it’s perhaps true that
Emily worked well These were all used in her common the ones you used are the most
towards her enquiry reference list. The notes knowledge, i.e. appropriate ones for this topic,
question, after some were not very detailed, likely to appear in which is not pure Ancient History.
hitches with finding but got better towards pretty much any Well done. 16
information about the end. source about the
modern Olympics. 2 topic. 2
2
Kate O’M: Moved from initial Collingridge, BBC Youtube Competent and reflective Excellent This is a very good essay. Both the 7 + 21 =
Boudicca * interest to video, website Nymag. – researcher, using logs and bibliography. Very introduction and the conclusion 28/35
*** representations over all very brief notes. Good comment function well. good footnotes, could have been expanded to make
time, to: Is Boudicca’s notetaking grid on Excellent use of reflection only one error. 3 reference to all of the major points
story an exaggeration unc.edu.au. None of sheets to sort out her you then make in the essay. But it
or merely a fabrication these sources are used in thinking. Is a thoughtful is very reasoned, well written and
of eventsCan we know her essay, so think she researcher. makes excellent use of sources,
the truth about has another way of taking perhaps a little more on the
Boudicca? notes. 2 secondary sources?
Final question in essay: 21
Who was Boudicca?
Transparent process of 0
question development.
2

Romy P: Romy was going to go Oracle thinkquest, Good, reflective, Short reference list Conclusion very general. This is an 5 + 14 =
Antony and with the take up of vroma.org, E.E. Rice: not organizing use of both with some essay that contains quite a few 19/35
Cleopatra Antony and Cleopatra, very detailed, best source the logs and the formatting errors, expression errors, and may have
which is huge. We will is Rice. 1 comment function. footnotes scarce, suffered from its question. You’ve
advise her to go with Reflection sheets show with some errors. recorded some varying

something like, The her grappling with her Same sources as in interpretations of the A & C story,
story of A & C: a simple topic, being flooded with your notetaking as you set out to do, and in most
love story? Or politically information but coming grids. Two sources cases, brought a critical light on the
motivated. Maybe to a reasonable end, are good, but she sources you chose. My problem
focus on effects of their where focus is on the puts them with it is that it is so source –
liaison. relationship being alongside some not driven, rather than argument-
Final question: Assess romantic or political. 2 very good ones, e.g. driven, so that it ends up being a
the different Thinkquest. summary of some interpretations
perspectives of the 1 of A& C. I think you needed to use
relationship between historical sources.
Mark Antony and
Cleopatra. Unclear argument, 14

Question ended up
being not very
historical. 1
Sophia P: Is the legacy of Norse Henkin: Seems Reflective researcher in Reference list very This essay needed some clearer 5 + 15 = 20
Ragnorak – Mythology all bloody unsynthesised. Fasulo use of log. Records late brief. Footnotes definition of argument in the first
Norse and violent? Are there also unsynthesised. Both change in direction of technically fine. Just paragraph and a tighter drawing
mythology peaceful claims to on norse mythology. question. No use of don’t add much to together of your three main areas –
How did the fame? Sophia found These were used in the comment function. the arguments, and Religion and beliefs; the
creation story the various countries in essay, and two more. some come under environment in which they lived
and ideals of Norse mythology Grabianowski and Ritchie 1 heading of common and the daily lives of these people
an imminent confusing, and came to – gives impression of knowledge i.e. facts – in the conclusion. The essay
‘ragnarok’ put them all under one more research needed. that could seems in some parts narrative,
impact on the heading: Scandinavia, reasonably be rather than argumentative, and it
lives of the which made her essay 1 expected in any seems that you might have done
people. RS2 general and narrative history of Norse more research to get a fuller
rather than analytical. people. picture of the nature of these
Were the 1 people 15
Ancient 2 5/10 for process.
Northern Unsure of argument
Germanic Abrupt conclusion
tribes Insufficient depth
influenced in No use of historical perspectives.
a peaceful or
violent way
by their
religion? RS3
Final
question:
Was the

culture of the
ancient
Scandinavian
tribes of a
peaceful or
violent
nature?

Jess P: Jess is getting to Michael Wood, Made excellent use of the Reference list and Jess, this is not a very well 6 + 13 =
Arthurian accounting for the Arthurianlegend.com comment function and footnotes fine. 2 structured essay, largely because 19/35
legends lasting appeal of the Notetaking grids very used it specially to seek you didn’t set out in the first
What is the Arthurian legends. I brief indeed, and many and respond to feedback paragraph what you were going to
Lasting think she has enough unable to be opened. from T and TL. Difficulties argue about the lasting appeal of
appeal of the information. Sources appear in with opening reflection King Arthur. You slip into narrative
Legend of Had trouble with reference list, but they sheets. 2 about the story with which you are
King Arthur? developing question as are very brief notes. 1 quite rightly fascinated, and
Final area is so huge and without the structure of an
question: mythical. Probably argument, the essay meanders a
Why has the could have done with little. It is also well below the word
legend of guidance earlier. She limit. Your footnotes and reference
King Arthur had trouble answering list are well presented. 13/25
had an the question as wanted
ongoing to focus on the story,
appeal? telling a narrative,
essentially.
1
Phillippa S: Still struggling with all Unexplained-factor.com, Made good use of the log Reference list well I’m not sure you’ve persuaded me 9 + 15 =
Atlantis the theories. Wants to Donnelly, Muck, entries, and not much of presented, that Plato’s account was accurate. 24/35
focus on Plato and the eridu.co.uk – Reasonably the comment function. contained more This essay has some expression
Minoan theory. Her well synthesised. Sources Maybe does not need it. than her notetaking errors and roundabout ways of
notetaking grids not in reference list a little Reflection sheets well grids. Footnotes making points. But it does use your
there. How useful is different, but on the used. excellent. sources to show Plato as the source
Plato to understanding whole not very well 2 2 of the Atlantis legend, whether or
the Atlantis theory? chosen to prove her not it was an historical fact in his
Final question: To what question. 2 writing. Your reference list and
extent is Plato’s footnotes are good. Not critical of
account of Atlantis an the sources, no page references for
accurate one? Donnelly. 15
2

Ashleigh B-W Final question: Assess Eyewitness to history, Comment function and Well presented This is a very convincing conclusion 10 + 24 =
Battle of the immediate impact Baldwin, Bury, Osborne, daily logs shows close reference list to the best essay I’ve read yet from 34/35
Marathon of the Battle of Plutarch, Ehrenberg, engagement with topic substantially the this group! Very well done. It
Worked in Marathon and its Herodotus, Califf, Creasy, and growing interest. same as the sources presents a complex argument
hols. lasting significance to Lenardon. Very Reflection sheets show in your notetaking without confusion, accounts for
history. Ashleigh thoughtful, critical notes, strong engagement with grids, which both the short and long term
worked very hard to which were culled down her topic and struggle to demonstrated effects of the Battle of Marathon in
define her question. 2 to the ones that best narrow it. 2 critical synthesis of very convincing fashion. There
supported her what you were could perhaps have been more
arguments. reading. Excellent explanation about why the Battle
footnotes. 3 allowed for the rise of the western
3 world. This essay shows your
diligent process and deep research
into what is not an easy area, its
greatest strength being the
measured way in which you write.
24.
Emily W: Explain the importance She has a variety of Brief use of the comment Reference list ok, This is an essay that achieves what 5 + 13 = 18
Ancient of religion in the sources, e.g. Instone, and logging functions. footnotes were it set out to do, show that the
Olympic Ancient Olympic Games Cartledge, Stack, Leuven, Not particularly useful for mostly of common Ancient Olympics were more about
Games:Needs Tufts Uni – she’s copied her or us. Reflection knowledge religion than sport, without any
more time to Final question was: and pasted notes from all really brief as well. 1 examples. 2 real depth of analysis. It is
solidify. Examine the extent to of them into one, so that reasonably structured, but tends to
She is looking which the Ancient you can’t tell where the become a bit repetitive. It’s a bit
at the Olympic Games was info comes from. Or under the word count, and this
balance of more focused on notes might be from only may be accounted for by the fact
religion and religion than sport one. 1 that your research (if that is the
sport in the Question ok, just didn’t same as what’s in your notetaking
Ancient allow for any real grid) was a bit on the short side.
Olypmics. debate. 1 13.
Emma W: Begam with Scythians, Search.time.com, Brief but pertinent use of After all your Conclusion is a bit on the weak 8 + 18 =
Scythians and the Ice Maiden. www.shsu.edu daily logs, not much in research, you’ve side. This is a very good essay, 26/35
Found she had so much artmagic.webs.com, way of interaction on used fairly few which needed quite a bit of editing.
information she had to Edwards, Atlas of world comment function. sources. But they You certainly answer your question
leave out the Ice history, Emma’s reflection sheets are clearly the most about daily life and culture of the
Maiden. Final question: ancienthistory.about.com are very focused and relevant. Rawlinson Scythians, as well as writing a very
Our understanding of , www.crystalinks.com , show her very interested has no notetaking good section on the archaeological
different tribes and Daily telegraph, All a bit in her topic, and having grid. Footnotes are evidence. I wanted to know how
cities is based on what unscholarly. But detailed to swim through deep very good. 2 you gleaned all this information
is left behind. What can notes. One good source, water. 2 about the Scythians’ way of life,
sources tell us about The Scythian scourge, when Herodotus was the only
the lives of the Scythian Blair. Also www.pbs.org source, and he was unreliable. I

people? Refer to ‘The Notes very synthesized, think you lost sight of that in your
Histories’ by Herodotus however. writing. 18
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