The document provides feedback on a student's proposal for a digital graphic narrative project adapting the story of Little Red Riding Hood. The feedback notes the clear plot description and interesting take on the original story as strengths, while suggesting further explanation is needed for the target age range audience. It also comments that the idea generation contains good planning with annotated images, but could have explored more font and illustration options. The student agrees more audience rationale and font choices would have improved the proposal, but disagrees with suggested changes to the darker story elements or page count.

1. Digital Graphic Narrative
Development
Will Wheatley

2. Shape Task

3. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the simplicity of it. And the fact that it was relatively easy to create
with the Photoshop software and looks more or less as it’s supposed to. I like
the fact that whilst the design is very rounded and curvy, only core basic
shapes were used. I used shape merging which is combining multiple layers of
shapes together into one layer so they wouldn’t separate and ruin the image.
I also used the line tool to add in extra detail such as creases in the skin. I also
used the outline tool to give my animal a defining edge around it. I used
shapes such as circles, oblongs and the line tool. Although my image seems
jagged, I have used the warp tool to round and bend some of the image.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I’d like to improve the amount of detail in my animal. As only the basic
features have been added to it such as using the colour range tool to add in
the fur and fuzziness on the animal. I would like to do this to give the cartoon
a slight more realistic look about it. I would also like to clean it up a bit,
making sure the image is smooth, sharp and rounded.

4. Rotoscope

5. Rotoscope

6. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
My first image is very simplistic. I have purely used highlights and shadows
from the original image with the colour change tool so it has very little
difference from the original. The lion picture is far better as I have used the
lasso tool as well to colourize certain parts. I have used the lasso tool to add
in details like face, mouth and eyes. I have also used the shadow tool which I
like because it captures detail and adds in extra detail to the face of the lion.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would like to add in a lot more detail and more of my own effects as it
doesn’t look much different to the original image. As for the lion image I
would like to add in much more noticeable detail to the lions mane. And
correct the shapes so you can’t see the mane colour behind the lions face.

7. Text Based

8. Text Based

9. Text Based

10. Text Based

11. Evaluation
What did you like about your images?
I liked being able to manipulate text because Photoshop gives you
much more freedom to create unlike the likes of Microsoft Word. I
liked being able to add a background to the text and personalize it with
a picture of your choice. I also liked being able to freely warp and bend
text to create shapes with it. I liked putting the “stroke” borders
around my text to give it a defining edge. I also like the part on the
quote where the “dying” part is large to emphasize the word.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would like to improve my picture on the text so it is more clear as to
what the picture is. I would also like to improve the appearance of the
bottom text on my first page, adding a different gradient and style to
my text for a nicer, neater look.

12. Comic Book

13. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked how I succeeded in making it simulate a comic book
illustration. I liked the detail of the shadows and highlights in
my image. I also liked the grain in my image to make it seem
old. I also liked how I have used highlights to shine on his face
to make it distinguished.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would like to give my image some colour as comic books are
usually in colour to convey emotion into the image. I also
would like to draw with a brush tool around the edge of the
face to separate Quentin’s face with the background of the
image. I would also improve on the overall look of the image
as it looks more like a painting than a sketch/drawing.

14. Photography - Sadness

15. Photography - Excitement

16. Photography - loneliness

17. Photography - happiness

18. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I liked the usage of black and white effect to present a negative
emotion, in this case loneliness. Sadness was presented in the image
by looking away from the camera. The people are also darkened to
create a negative emotion. I also like that on the happiness image that
the sky is lit up around his face. I also like that in the loneliness image
she is the only person in the image which furthers the feeling of
loneliness.
What would you improve if you did it again?
My face on the excitement image doesn’t look as exciting as the image
is supposed to present. Similar with the happiness image it doesn’t
present a look of happiness and I would like a better image to
represent that emotion so it is much more obvious.

19. Illustration

20. Evaluation
What did you like about your image?
I like how it looks relatively like the source image. I like
how I have drawn him stood in a pose, rather than stood
in one place. I also liked how I have outlined the image to
bring out the edges of the image.
What would you improve if you did it again?
I would like to improve the neatness of my drawing as it is
very crudely drawn and rough. I would also like to
improve, specifically the hands as the thumb is a way too
long. I would like to improve upon them.

21. Initial Ideas

22. Idea Generation

24. I chose Little Red Riding
hood because it is a
classic story with
interesting themes such
as strangers and
pedophilia. It explores this
however, with the wolf
wanting to eat her as that
is far more child
appropriate
I chose a pig as an an animal as
they are cute and innocent
and the most abused of
animals. The wolf would also
be more interested in eating
pig. I have also chosen a pig as
my shape task was based from
a pig.
The story’s setting is also
interesting as the forest is
isolated and creates a scary
atmosphere. It is also
isolated and perfect for a
murder or abduction which
is why the book teaches
children to be wary in these
sorts of atmospheres.
I’m using this font because it has a
fairy tale look and it looks
innocent like the main protagonist
in the book

25. Proposal
Dimensions
Pages: 12 Size: 13.3 x 2.2 x 16.4 cm
Export Format
PDF
Advantages: Easy access to PDF documents and a multilingual interface. Other people
can not edit your work in this program.
Disadvantages: Large file size. You can not edit your work in this program.
Story Overview
My story is my own interpretation and take on the classic fairy tale story “Little Red Riding Hood”. It begins with
a family of anthropomorphic pigs. The mother of the family, who is extremely sick and irritated by her children.
She sends her eldest child (Little Red Pig), with a pie to take it to her grandmother. However, like the original
she has to pass through a dark forest. In the forest she comes across a wolf, who acts kind and helpful to the
child, with a true purpose of eating the child (as she is a pig). The child asks for directions but sneakily the wolf
tells her the long way round. The wolf then takes a short cut and reaches the grandmothers house. The wolf
then eats the grandmother. The child comes to the grandmothers house with the a friendly seeming
woodcutter who has been showing her the way. The woodcutter ends up killing them all for food. A few
months pass and the mother is depressed and misses the child, wondering where her and the grandmother
went to. She makes a cake for her Auntie and asks her other child to take it. She then realizes that she
shouldn’t have let Little Red Pig go alone so she goes with the younger child to the aunties.

26. Production Methods
I am going to shape task to create my book. I am going to use different shapes to
create my animal. I am also going to use the rotascope tool to select different parts
of my image. I am also going to use the colour range tool to create highlights and
shadows to add in extra detail to my images. I am also going to use the colour
overlay to create different colours for my animals. And I am going to use the stroke
tool to create a border for my characters so the edges are more defined.
Audience
My target audience is children aged from 9-11 (the reason for this is because my
take on the story is quite dark and is not as much of a conventional happy ending as
other fairy tales) , male and female audience as the main character is a girl which
can relate to young girls but the dark story telling has no girly elements used so
there is no reason why it can’t relate to both. It is for an audience of anyone who
speaks the English language, mainly children who live in England. For a middle class
to working class family. Also for an audience who’s family who have children are
very independent and travel a lot of places alone.
Deadline
18th December 2014

27. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Clearly descriptive story plot with an interesting
take on the original story. Clear idea of how the
book is going to be created; great planning.
Could explain why the target audience is aged 9-11.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Great planning and the mind maps have plenty of
ideas. Good images of the settings and characters
that are going to be in the book.
Could have more fonts to chose from to ensure you
chose the best one. Could put more images up also
you could have chosen and annotated just a bit
more (2-3) pictures.

28. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Plot is described very clearly, the audience is well
thought through and includes finer details such as
the class and area where they would live.
the areas that need further work would be the
audience, you have stated what the age group
would be and other things about them but you
could go further and say why.
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
The idea generation is fairly detailed and thought
through. The storyboard contains images and
annotations which explain why you are using that
font.
You could develop your story board further by
getting images of other ways little red riding hood
has been portrayed before in stories and say what
you like/don’t like about each technique for
example, more illustrations, more photography,
more cartoon like illustrations etc etc.

29. What are the strengths of the proposal? What areas of the proposal need further work?
Good detail especially in the storyline production
methods and audience good advantages and
disadvantages of using the pdf file.
40 pages is a lot for a children's book if you are
doing one side picture and one side story then your
best bet is somewhere more like 20-22. also the
story is less like a children's book and more like a
young teenagers book I would change the ending
and make the books audience more towards the 5-
7 mark as that would be more like a children's
book. Also the story kind of scared me so this
would need to be changed if you were to take my
advice and make it a more childish book (it would
also be easier).
What are the strengths of the idea generation? What areas of idea generation could have been
further developed?
Good mind mapping I like how you have done one
to work out which you want and then a hole
separate one on your chosen book. Also the
annotations are good and so is your images mixing
both real and cartoon
You could have tried out more fonts than just one

30. Feedback Summary
Sum up your feedback.
Most of the feedback has commented on my detailed description of the plot and how it
is an interesting take on the story. Most of them have also commented on the fact that I
need to add detail to my target audience and state why I have chose this age. And they
have all stated that I should’ve used more fonts.
Which parts of your feedback do you agree with and why?
I agree with the fact that my target audience should have been explained as to why I
chose this. I should have also added more fonts to evaluate on rather than just one. I
also agree that I have used both real and cartoon elements for my mood board.
Which parts of your feedback do you disagree with and why?
I disagree with changing my story twist. This is because plenty of stories are very dark
but there is no mention of gore and I am not specific when characters die. I do not
describe the characters being eaten. My story does not feature anything sexual
(however subtext of the wolf being a paedophile is used). There is no profanity or
swearing used in the book so there is no need to change anything. I disagree with my
page number being a lot. The reason it is a lot is so I can tell everything I want to and
make the story very detailed in one respect but not in another so my target audience
(the children) don’t get bored.

31. Storyboards

32. Storyboards

33. Storyboards

34. Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from

35. Original Script
Original Script goes here with link to where it came from

36. Final Script
Final script goes here.

37. Digital Flat Plans