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                                                                                            Contents

Descriptive Paragraph .......................................................................................................................................................................... 2
   I. What is a descriptive paragraph? ................................................................................................................................................ 2
   II. Unity .............................................................................................................................................................................................. 2
       Sample paragraphs: ......................................................................................................................................................................... 2
   III. Transition Words Used to Signal Visual Description (Coherence) .............................................................................................. 3
   IV. Outline .......................................................................................................................................................................................... 3
   V. Samples of descriptive paragraphs ................................................................................................................................................. 3
       Sample 1.. ....................................................................................................................................................................................... 3
       Sample 2. ........................................................................................................................................................................................ 4
       Sample 3. ........................................................................................................................................................................................ 5
   VI. Conclusion .................................................................................................................................................................................... 5




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                                             Descriptive Paragraph



      I. What is a descriptive paragraph?

      A descriptive paragraph explains how someone or something looks or feels. For example, you might need to
      describe a city for a paragraph about life abroad, a person’s appearance for a paragraph about that person, etc.

      II. Unity

      Unity is an idea that a writer discusses a single topic.

      Sample paragraphs:


                                                   Daredevil Sports
      1. Daredevil sports are also becoming popular. Young people especially are increasingly willing to risk life and
          limb white-mountain biking, back country, snowboarding, or high-speed skate boarding. Soccer is also
          becoming popular in the Unite State, where it was not well known until recently. One of the riskiest new
          sports is skysurfing, in which people jump out of airplanes with graphite boards attached to their feet.
          Skysurfing and bungee jumping for the amount of thrills and risk.


                                                  Enemies to friends
      2. Sometime enemies become friends. For example, when I was young, I was beaten very often by girl who was
          much stronger than me. I wish to take revenge upon him; that was on my mind for a very long time. But it
          was a problem for me because of my being unaware of the way to do it. Usually, she started a fight by
          accusing me of something. I felt confused when she did that, and she knew that I could not stop being afraid.
          One day, she tried to kick me in the stomach, but I twisted my body and made a counter-kick in her knee. She
          gave loud scream of pain.




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         III. Transition Words Used to Signal Visual Description (Coherence)
above         at the side      behind        by          farther     left
right         across           at the top    below       center      front
middle        there            adjacent      back        beneath     close to
here          next to          under         around      beside      down
in            nearby           underneath    at the bottom backup beyond
far away inside outside within



         IV. Outline
                                                  Relaxing at the beach
                Where is your favorite summer vocation place? The beach is the perfect place for me. The air is hot, but
         the water is cool, wet, and fresh. First, I enjoy swimming and surfing in the ocean. When I am tired, I come out
         and lie on the beach. The sand is soft and white. The beach is noisy with seagulls and children laughing, but it is a
         pleasant noise. I even like the beach and sweet from everybody’s suntan lotion. I feel peaceful and relaxed. When
         I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach.


                Topic Sentence
                The beach is the perfect place for me.
                Supporting Sentence
                The air is hot, …………………………………………………………………..everybody’s suntan lotion.
                Concluding Sentence
                I feel peaceful and relaxed. When I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach.



         V. Samples of descriptive paragraphs
         Sample 1.The sample below is an opening paragraph from a student essay on thedevelopment of entertainment
         media. In it, she describes TV-watching in her family to makea point about how central TV was as a form of
         entertainment in the 60’s.




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                                         Entertainment in the 60’s
           As I was growing up in the 60’s, television was the only entertainmentmy family knew of the electronic
           sort. The 7 o’clock nightly news wassuch an important part of our family that my dad knocked a wall
           down andbuilt a huge cabinet in its place just to accommodate our 19-inch black andwhite. No one was
           allowed to talk or make a sound when the televisionwas on; all eyes were glued to the moving and
           flickering image. The boxcommanded absolute respect. In the daytime, “the television needs itsrest” my
           mother would say, as she patted its pseudo-wooden top andcovered it with a doilie she had made herself.
           There is no doubt that TVwas as central to our lives as it was to the lives of all our friends during
           thatperiod. (adapted from an essay by Angeline Chan, used with permission.)




              Notice the writer’s use of action verbs (knocked, glued) and her use of sensory words (19-inch, black
              and white, huge, talk, sound, flickering)) to paint a picture of the scene in herliving room. In the final
              sentence, she states the main point of the paragraph: that TV wascentral in families’ lives during the
              60’s. The appearance of a topic sentence at the end of aparagraph, rather than at the beginning is
              common in descriptive paragraphs, and it workswell for this kind of development.



      Sample 2.
                                                          My Parent
           When I was young, I admired my parents for their strength and kindness. They were not very big. In fact,
           they were tiny and thin with pointed nose. They were strong though. They lived by themselves and still
           did a lot of the chores around their house. When I was a child, I saw them almost every day, and they
           were very happy people and were always smiling and joking, and they often made me laugh. My parents
           were also very patient, and they would listen to all of my problems. They gave me very good advice
           whenever I needed it. I did not need to be afraid to tell them anything, because they never got mad at me.
           They just listened and tried to them because they had interesting to tell about their own childhood and life
           experiences. When I was young, my parents were my favorite friends.




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      Sample 3.
                                      My favorite summer vocation place
             Where is your favorite summer vocation place? The beach is the perfect place for me. The air is hot, but
             the water is cool, wet, and fresh. First, I enjoy swimming and surfing in the ocean. When I am tired, I
             come out and lie on the beach. The sand is soft and white. The beach is noisy with seagulls and children
             laughing, but it is a pleasant noise. I even like the beach and sweet from everybody’s suntan lotion. I feel
             peaceful and relaxed. When I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach.



      VI. Conclusion

      Descriptive Paragraph explains us to know how to describe persons, things, places, animals by using adjective,
      similes, and prepositional phrase. In so doing, sensory details are important because they can help the reader see,
      hear, feel, smell, and taste what is being described. This is the goal of a descriptive paragraph.




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Reference

-www.english studies.com/descriptive paragraph

-www.descriptive paragraph.com/pdf




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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 Contents Descriptive Paragraph .......................................................................................................................................................................... 2 I. What is a descriptive paragraph? ................................................................................................................................................ 2 II. Unity .............................................................................................................................................................................................. 2 Sample paragraphs: ......................................................................................................................................................................... 2 III. Transition Words Used to Signal Visual Description (Coherence) .............................................................................................. 3 IV. Outline .......................................................................................................................................................................................... 3 V. Samples of descriptive paragraphs ................................................................................................................................................. 3 Sample 1.. ....................................................................................................................................................................................... 3 Sample 2. ........................................................................................................................................................................................ 4 Sample 3. ........................................................................................................................................................................................ 5 VI. Conclusion .................................................................................................................................................................................... 5 Group V Page 1
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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 Descriptive Paragraph I. What is a descriptive paragraph? A descriptive paragraph explains how someone or something looks or feels. For example, you might need to describe a city for a paragraph about life abroad, a person’s appearance for a paragraph about that person, etc. II. Unity Unity is an idea that a writer discusses a single topic. Sample paragraphs: Daredevil Sports 1. Daredevil sports are also becoming popular. Young people especially are increasingly willing to risk life and limb white-mountain biking, back country, snowboarding, or high-speed skate boarding. Soccer is also becoming popular in the Unite State, where it was not well known until recently. One of the riskiest new sports is skysurfing, in which people jump out of airplanes with graphite boards attached to their feet. Skysurfing and bungee jumping for the amount of thrills and risk. Enemies to friends 2. Sometime enemies become friends. For example, when I was young, I was beaten very often by girl who was much stronger than me. I wish to take revenge upon him; that was on my mind for a very long time. But it was a problem for me because of my being unaware of the way to do it. Usually, she started a fight by accusing me of something. I felt confused when she did that, and she knew that I could not stop being afraid. One day, she tried to kick me in the stomach, but I twisted my body and made a counter-kick in her knee. She gave loud scream of pain. Group V Page 2
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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 III. Transition Words Used to Signal Visual Description (Coherence) above at the side behind by farther left right across at the top below center front middle there adjacent back beneath close to here next to under around beside down in nearby underneath at the bottom backup beyond far away inside outside within IV. Outline Relaxing at the beach Where is your favorite summer vocation place? The beach is the perfect place for me. The air is hot, but the water is cool, wet, and fresh. First, I enjoy swimming and surfing in the ocean. When I am tired, I come out and lie on the beach. The sand is soft and white. The beach is noisy with seagulls and children laughing, but it is a pleasant noise. I even like the beach and sweet from everybody’s suntan lotion. I feel peaceful and relaxed. When I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach. Topic Sentence The beach is the perfect place for me. Supporting Sentence The air is hot, …………………………………………………………………..everybody’s suntan lotion. Concluding Sentence I feel peaceful and relaxed. When I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach. V. Samples of descriptive paragraphs Sample 1.The sample below is an opening paragraph from a student essay on thedevelopment of entertainment media. In it, she describes TV-watching in her family to makea point about how central TV was as a form of entertainment in the 60’s. Group V Page 3
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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 Entertainment in the 60’s As I was growing up in the 60’s, television was the only entertainmentmy family knew of the electronic sort. The 7 o’clock nightly news wassuch an important part of our family that my dad knocked a wall down andbuilt a huge cabinet in its place just to accommodate our 19-inch black andwhite. No one was allowed to talk or make a sound when the televisionwas on; all eyes were glued to the moving and flickering image. The boxcommanded absolute respect. In the daytime, “the television needs itsrest” my mother would say, as she patted its pseudo-wooden top andcovered it with a doilie she had made herself. There is no doubt that TVwas as central to our lives as it was to the lives of all our friends during thatperiod. (adapted from an essay by Angeline Chan, used with permission.) Notice the writer’s use of action verbs (knocked, glued) and her use of sensory words (19-inch, black and white, huge, talk, sound, flickering)) to paint a picture of the scene in herliving room. In the final sentence, she states the main point of the paragraph: that TV wascentral in families’ lives during the 60’s. The appearance of a topic sentence at the end of aparagraph, rather than at the beginning is common in descriptive paragraphs, and it workswell for this kind of development. Sample 2. My Parent When I was young, I admired my parents for their strength and kindness. They were not very big. In fact, they were tiny and thin with pointed nose. They were strong though. They lived by themselves and still did a lot of the chores around their house. When I was a child, I saw them almost every day, and they were very happy people and were always smiling and joking, and they often made me laugh. My parents were also very patient, and they would listen to all of my problems. They gave me very good advice whenever I needed it. I did not need to be afraid to tell them anything, because they never got mad at me. They just listened and tried to them because they had interesting to tell about their own childhood and life experiences. When I was young, my parents were my favorite friends. Group V Page 4
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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 Sample 3. My favorite summer vocation place Where is your favorite summer vocation place? The beach is the perfect place for me. The air is hot, but the water is cool, wet, and fresh. First, I enjoy swimming and surfing in the ocean. When I am tired, I come out and lie on the beach. The sand is soft and white. The beach is noisy with seagulls and children laughing, but it is a pleasant noise. I even like the beach and sweet from everybody’s suntan lotion. I feel peaceful and relaxed. When I want to relax in summer, I go to the beach. VI. Conclusion Descriptive Paragraph explains us to know how to describe persons, things, places, animals by using adjective, similes, and prepositional phrase. In so doing, sensory details are important because they can help the reader see, hear, feel, smell, and taste what is being described. This is the goal of a descriptive paragraph. Group V Page 5
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    Western University AcademicYear 2011-2012 Reference -www.english studies.com/descriptive paragraph -www.descriptive paragraph.com/pdf Group V Page 6