Planning an essay on obesity in young children

2. 1. READ THE EXAM QUESTION CAREFULLY

3. 2. UNDERLINE THE KEY WORDS
You must answer this question. Write your answer in 140-190 words in an appropriate style.
In your English class you have been talking about the problem of obesity in young people. Now your
English teacher has asked you to write an essay.
Write an essay using all your notes and give reasons for your point of view.
In Europe and the USA a lot of young people have an obesity problem. What can be done to solve this problem?
Notes
Write about:
1. Drinking
2. Fast Food
3. ……………………(your own idea)

4. 3. PARAPHRASE THE KEY WORDS IN THE EXAM QUESTION TO
AVOID “LIFTING”.
In Europe and the USA a lot of young people have an obesity problem.
What can be done to solve this problem?
 The Western World
 European Countries
 Occident
 The old continent
 The US
 North America
 Americans
o Many/ most/ a vast
majority of…
o Teenagers/
adolescents/
youngsters/ the youth/
Young adults/ people in
their teens/ secondary
school or high school
students
 Medical condition
 Excess body fat
 Overweight
 Overeating
 Plumpness
 Fatness
 Difficulties/trouble/complication/
issue with their weight/size
 To put on weight/gain weight
 To tackle
 To face
 To deal with

5. 4. REPHRASE THE ESSAY TITLE AND EXPAND NOTES
Drinking
ALCOHOL-SUGARY DRINKS-ENERGY
DRINKS- SOFT DRINKS-FATTENING-
CALORIFIC-HIGH IN SODIUM
Fast Food
JUNK- HAMBURGERS- CHIPS- SNACKS- FAT-
ARTIFICIAL SWEETENERS- SATURATED FAT-
CHOLESTEROL- CARBOHYDRATES- FIBER
Sedentary
Lifestyle
EXERCISE REGULARLY- TRAIN- KEEP FIT-
BE IN SHAPE- PRACTICE SPORTS –
PHYSICAL ACTIVITY- MODERATE.INTENSE-
FAST WALKING-SWIMMING
Effects
• Obesity
• Social discrimination
• Higher risks of
diseases like diabetes,
heart disease
• Reduced life
expectancy
• Energy that is not
used is stored as fat
Solutions
• Prevent weight gain
• Avoid out-of-control eating
by keeping a journal
• Monitor weight
• Plan ahead
• Parents, schools and
governments should control
what is eaten, ensure
children have a healthy
diet, limit junk food
advertising, encourage
them to take regular
exercise
Your own idea

6. 5. SIGNPOST YOUR ESSAY
FIRST OF ALL, FIRSTLY,
SECONDLY,
TO BEGIN WITH,
MOREOVER,
FURTHERMORE,
WHAT IS MORE,
TO MAKE MATTERS
WORSE,
LAST BUT NOT
LEAST,
IN CONCLUSION,
TO CONCLUDE,
AS I SEE IT
IN MY VIEW,
TO ME,
TO MY MIND,

7. 6. STYLE
Remember to avoid a conversational tone
• Only eat when you are hungry. People should eat only when they are hungry.
• You should weigh yourself once a week to
monitor your health.
Health should be monitored by registering weight.